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Heart Song

With devotion lost
You stepped through a low portal.
Infatuation 
Took control of my desire.
You captured my broken heart. 

7-10-18

Bite Size Poem no.37 Poetry Contest
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CayCay Jennings Date: 8/30/2018 9:41:00 PM This could be Tim and me as well as all other Tom's, Dick's, Harry's, Kim's, Dot's and Mary's who were saved by love; truly a universal tanka on never giving up on love. You done good, Connie! Poetry hugs ... CayCay Login to Reply

Vladislav Raven Date: 7/19/2018 7:17:00 AM Hi Connie, an excellent, touching Tanka from your golden pen. Best wishes for the contest. What marvelous songs the heart can sing Connie and you have created a wonderful one with this Tanka. This write sings into my faves. Hugs....Mike. XX Login to Reply

FJ Thomas Date: 7/15/2018 4:31:00 PM Such a touching tanka Connie :) Login to Reply

Becca Teagan Date: 7/11/2018 9:36:00 PM What a wonderful Tanka, Connie! I find them very hard to write, because they are so short. But you sure did a great job. Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 7/11/2018 11:09:00 PM Me too Becca. This is only the third one I have ever written. To me they are more difficult than haiku. Thank you Becca. xxoo

Maria Williams Date: 7/11/2018 6:43:00 PM I was wondering about that line..'you stepped through a low portal', and from reading your comments below I understand now. What a wonderfully romantic Tanka, absolutely love it, and a definite Fave for me....Maria hugs Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 7/11/2018 9:07:00 PM These Tanka are so difficult because of the short syllable count. This is only the third one ever I have written, so your fave is very meanngful Maria. Thank you very much. How are you doing? I am on the mend. xxoo

Frederic Parker Date: 7/11/2018 4:05:00 PM problem with captured broken hearts, they sometimes find themselves in a cage...this is really well done should do well...good luck Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 7/11/2018 5:16:00 PM Thank you Frederic. If a lesson is learned from the past it all works out. In my case it has. Cheers : )

Arturo Michael Date: 7/11/2018 8:40:00 AM This happens everyday...to the majority of people I say...Very relevant...Nice write Connie Login to Reply

Lyric Man Date: 7/10/2018 10:36:00 PM Connie.. a lovely write about the positive influence of infatuation! Login to Reply

Daniel Turner Date: 7/10/2018 6:54:00 PM Wounded hearts are the easiest to catch. They usually run to love instead of away from it. Lovely tanka Mrs Connie. Good luck sweetie:) Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 7/11/2018 5:14:00 PM Thank you Daniel. I agree. : )

Andrea Dietrich Date: 7/10/2018 6:37:00 PM How well you did this theme, Connie. I bet it's a WIN!! Thanks for all your recent comments to me and for putting up a new poem! Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 7/11/2018 5:14:00 PM Thank you Andrea. I appreciate the encouragement. : ) xxoo

Jan Allison Date: 7/10/2018 4:44:00 PM aww how beautiful and romantic Connie, I hope you give a copy of this to your hubby I know what a devoted couple of lovebirds you are:-)hugs Jan xx Login to Reply

Vijay Pandit Date: 7/10/2018 4:03:00 PM Beautifully depicted in carefully chosen words..broken heart explains why infatuation took hold. Splendid poem..a win in my books. Always a joy to read your poems. Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 7/10/2018 4:31:00 PM That is such a nice comment Vijay. I appreciate it so much. This is only the third Tanka I have ever written. The brevity of this form makes it a challenge for me. Thank you my friend! : )

Lin Lane Date: 7/10/2018 3:56:00 PM Love at first flight. lol You two have a wonderful romance story and a blessed marriage union. Loved it, Connie. Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 7/10/2018 4:26:00 PM Thank you Lin. It was definately love at first sight. He mended my heart and opened it to his love. So nice to hear from you my friend. xxoo

Agnes Krampe Date: 7/10/2018 3:19:00 PM Oh, this is a nice and deep one. Love that he steps "through a low portal" - there are many ways to describe a passage, and this has a special vibe. Good luck in the contest. Login to Reply Agnes Krampe Date: 7/10/2018 4:53:00 PM oh, so it is literal, LOL. I was picturing the low portal (love the repeated "o" sound) as something mystical :) Connie Marcum Wong Date: 7/10/2018 3:45:00 PM Thank you Agnes. This poem is about my husband who is 6'3". He had to bow to enter through the aircraft door. : )