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HEART SONG

With devotion lost
You stepped through a low portal.
Infatuation 
Took control of my desire.
You captured my broken heart. 

7-10-18

'TANKA in 5 7 5 7 7 ' Contest ~N/A~
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Date: 8/30/2018 9:41:00 PM
This could be Tim and me as well as all other Tom's, Dick's, Harry's, Kim's, Dot's and Mary's who were saved by love; truly a universal tanka on never giving up on love. You done good, Connie! Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Date: 8/3/2018 4:25:00 PM
Resonates so! ~ Gershon
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Date: 7/19/2018 7:17:00 AM
Hi Connie, an excellent, touching Tanka from your golden pen. Best wishes for the contest. What marvelous songs the heart can sing Connie and you have created a wonderful one with this Tanka. This write sings into my faves. Hugs....Mike. XX
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Date: 7/15/2018 4:31:00 PM
Such a touching tanka Connie :)
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Date: 7/12/2018 12:58:00 AM
A lovely song of the heart, Connie. Best wishes for the contest. T.J
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Date: 7/11/2018 9:36:00 PM
What a wonderful Tanka, Connie! I find them very hard to write, because they are so short. But you sure did a great job.
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/11/2018 11:09:00 PM
Me too Becca. This is only the third one I have ever written. To me they are more difficult than haiku. Thank you Becca. xxoo
Date: 7/11/2018 6:43:00 PM
I was wondering about that line..'you stepped through a low portal', and from reading your comments below I understand now. What a wonderfully romantic Tanka, absolutely love it, and a definite Fave for me....Maria hugs
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/11/2018 9:07:00 PM
These Tanka are so difficult because of the short syllable count. This is only the third one ever I have written, so your fave is very meanngful Maria. Thank you very much. How are you doing? I am on the mend. xxoo
Date: 7/11/2018 4:05:00 PM
problem with captured broken hearts, they sometimes find themselves in a cage...this is really well done should do well...good luck
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/11/2018 5:16:00 PM
Thank you Frederic. If a lesson is learned from the past it all works out. In my case it has. Cheers : )
Date: 7/11/2018 8:40:00 AM
This happens everyday...to the majority of people I say...Very relevant...Nice write Connie
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Date: 7/10/2018 10:36:00 PM
Connie.. a lovely write about the positive influence of infatuation!
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Date: 7/10/2018 6:54:00 PM
Wounded hearts are the easiest to catch. They usually run to love instead of away from it. Lovely tanka Mrs Connie. Good luck sweetie:)
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/11/2018 5:14:00 PM
Thank you Daniel. I agree. : )
Date: 7/10/2018 6:37:00 PM
How well you did this theme, Connie. I bet it's a WIN!! Thanks for all your recent comments to me and for putting up a new poem!
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/11/2018 5:14:00 PM
Thank you Andrea. I appreciate the encouragement. : ) xxoo
Date: 7/10/2018 4:44:00 PM
aww how beautiful and romantic Connie, I hope you give a copy of this to your hubby I know what a devoted couple of lovebirds you are:-)hugs Jan xx
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Date: 7/10/2018 4:03:00 PM
Beautifully depicted in carefully chosen words..broken heart explains why infatuation took hold. Splendid poem..a win in my books. Always a joy to read your poems.
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/10/2018 4:31:00 PM
That is such a nice comment Vijay. I appreciate it so much. This is only the third Tanka I have ever written. The brevity of this form makes it a challenge for me. Thank you my friend! : )
Date: 7/10/2018 3:56:00 PM
Love at first flight. lol You two have a wonderful romance story and a blessed marriage union. Loved it, Connie.
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/10/2018 4:26:00 PM
Thank you Lin. It was definately love at first sight. He mended my heart and opened it to his love. So nice to hear from you my friend. xxoo
Date: 7/10/2018 3:19:00 PM
Oh, this is a nice and deep one. Love that he steps "through a low portal" - there are many ways to describe a passage, and this has a special vibe. Good luck in the contest.
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Agnes Krampe
Date: 7/10/2018 4:53:00 PM
oh, so it is literal, LOL. I was picturing the low portal (love the repeated "o" sound) as something mystical :)
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/10/2018 3:45:00 PM
Thank you Agnes. This poem is about my husband who is 6'3". He had to bow to enter through the aircraft door. : )