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Healing a Broken Heart

The bleeding sunset lingers on her mind
as night approaches and the sky goes dark.
Her soul is restless; how it craves to find
some words of comfort which could leave their mark,

erasing heartache etched in grooves of tears
on ice-cold marble where lost dreams now dwell,
relief imploring from the grasp of fear,
the twilight shadows full of doubts dispel.

The wind is conscious of her thoughts distraught;  
it whispers softly, plays with her long hair,
diverts attention, brings her grief to naught...
A damsel’s heart fragmented he can’t bear.

Dense clouds are drifting and the moon slips by;
the joy of healing it will not deny.

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A Sonnet for John Hamilton's Contest.
Placed 2nd
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Duet Avatar
March 1, 2020 at 8:33 PM
I love this poem, Paul...so full of emotion and empathy. It's one of those rare gems I will remember...........
Callus Avatar
March 2, 2020 at 10:33 AM
Thank you so much, Carole; your lovely comments are truly appreciated. Enjoy the new week:) // paul
Staton Avatar
October 17, 2019 at 2:25 AM
Paul, I love this poem! Nice rhythm and imagery.
Callus Avatar
October 17, 2019 at 3:44 PM
Thank you, Valerie. Hope you are keeping well. Regards // paul
Lawless Avatar
December 19, 2018 at 6:23 AM
I missed this the first time Paul, congrats on this well deserved placement.
Callus Avatar
December 19, 2018 at 1:45 PM
Thank you, John. Yours was also a very worthy winner! Regards // paul
Cornish Avatar
December 18, 2018 at 11:16 PM
You nailed it Paul!
Callus Avatar
December 19, 2018 at 4:07 AM
Thank you, Craig. Coming from you it means a lot! Have a nice day. ~ Regards // paul
Vaso Avatar
December 18, 2018 at 7:52 PM
Very beautiful, I agree with Mark, it is a form I wish to conquer one day! Its never as easy as it seems! Congrats!
Callus Avatar
December 19, 2018 at 4:08 AM
Pleased you found it to your liking, Arthur. It's a form which I also keep trying to perfect. Regards // paul
Devonshire Avatar
December 17, 2018 at 4:45 PM
I love the way you created a woman who truly needed something to help pull her from sadness and then had the wind come to her rescue. Outstanding work, Paul. Congratulations on your win! Hugs, Carolyn
Callus Avatar
December 18, 2018 at 2:30 AM
Thank you for the lovely feedback and congrats, Carolyn. Some poems just write themselves! Hugs // paul
Marcum Wong Avatar
December 17, 2018 at 11:59 AM
This sonnet is so lovely Paul. Big congratulations on your Second Placement! Happy holidays my friend! xxoo ; )
Callus Avatar
December 17, 2018 at 3:02 PM
Many thanks, Connie. Your compliments and congrats are truly appreciated. May you and your loved ones have a happy and blessed Christmas. // paul
Hamilton Avatar
December 17, 2018 at 11:50 AM
You were quite right to enter this poem Paul, this is probably my fave from you, although everything you write is brilliant! There is no doubt in my mind this is a top sonnet. This contest was SO hard to judge, any of these top ten could win ANY contest, congrats!
Callus Avatar
December 17, 2018 at 2:47 PM
Thank you for the high placement and complimentary comments, John! Supporting your contest was a pleasure. Regards // paul
Proxenos Avatar
November 13, 2018 at 12:45 PM
Hi Paul, I'm certain these words have brought solace to many soup readers. It took me back to when i lost my first born at 5 days old, but then the wonder and birth of my son a year and a half later. Warm regards, Jennifer.
Callus Avatar
November 14, 2018 at 1:18 PM
I understand your feelings at the loss of your child, Jennifer, and being the first makes it even harder. Fortunately time heals, and the birth of another one, though never a replacement, goes a long way towards bringing renewed joy. ~ Warm regards // paul
Lindley Avatar
October 27, 2018 at 5:21 AM
Giving a solitary standing ovation in appreciation of this magnificent sonnet my dear friend!! A true and deep pleasure to find and read this golden creation.. A fav, your depths in writing awe..
Callus Avatar
October 27, 2018 at 5:26 AM
Thank you for coming back to read this poem, Robert. Double visits are always doubly appreciated, my friend. Regards // paul
Raven Avatar
October 20, 2018 at 3:28 PM
Hi Paul, a wonderful sonnet from your pen my friend. I love the content and the emotions that flow through the piece. An excellent sonnet with such powerful imagery. I love the way you have crafted this emotional piece. Has to be a fave. Have a wonderful weekend. Your friend always....Mike.
Wanter Avatar
October 12, 2018 at 12:33 PM
The title caught my eye, for my heart is broken right now for the loss of my little companion dog. I was looking for comfort and found much beauty in your lines.
Callus Avatar
October 13, 2018 at 8:39 AM
I am so sorry for your loss, Sunlite:( I know how it feels...been in that situation many times! I am glad that these lines somewhat eased the pain. Thank you for a lovely visit. Regards // paul
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September 24, 2018 at 3:30 PM
This is very well done. A marvelous sonnet. Enjoyable reading in true Shakespearean style.
Callus Avatar
September 25, 2018 at 1:41 AM
Thank you, Sian, for your marvelous comments...truly cherished. Best regards // paul
Manassian Avatar
September 23, 2018 at 9:51 AM
Lovely dear....I love sonnets. The ending was the best part. I'm afraid I haven't been able to write much lately. Blessings.
Callus Avatar
September 23, 2018 at 1:23 PM
How lovely to see you back, dear Eileen! I too have not written much lately; like you time has been mostly taken up with hosting. From time to time it is good for our muse to take a rest; it will then come back with renewed zest. Hugs // paul
Lindley Avatar
September 20, 2018 at 9:47 AM
Yet again I am late to find a gem my great friend! This sonnet is wondrously deep, image filled and so beautifully crafted . Definitely a fav for me my dear friend!
Callus Avatar
September 23, 2018 at 5:02 AM
Thank you for your generosity, Robert. Being late is not a sin my friend:) I know how hard it is to keep up with all the Soup activity...I am guilty of that, too! Best regards // paul
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September 18, 2018 at 5:46 PM
Hello Paul, yes the wind will heal her heart.Have a nice evening my friend.
Callus Avatar
September 23, 2018 at 5:20 AM
Thank you for your reassuring words, Darlene. Hope you're enjoying the weekend. Regards // paul
Godwin Avatar
September 18, 2018 at 8:07 AM
A beautifully poem of deep emotion that upsets and comforts simultaneously, at least for me. Your poem is comment-blessed with acknowledgement riches and your poem deserves such. A joy to read such jeweled poetry. All the best ... CayCay
Callus Avatar
September 23, 2018 at 5:24 AM
You are kind and generous, CayCay:) Thank you for the complimentary remarks. Warm regards // paul
Sathasivam Avatar
September 13, 2018 at 1:29 AM
Excellent sonnet and beautifully crafted. Congrats on your win my friend. Thanks for sharing it.
Callus Avatar
September 15, 2018 at 11:59 AM
Many thanks, Ravi. Your complimentary remarks and congrats are appreciated. Regards // paul
Kannan Avatar
September 10, 2018 at 11:51 AM
Such a lovely sonnet,Paul... Congratulations on your placement. I enjoyed it...
Callus Avatar
September 10, 2018 at 4:37 PM
I am so pleased that you found it to your liking, Supraja...thank you! Regards // paul
Gauthier Avatar
September 8, 2018 at 5:22 PM
Lovely, Paul. Congrats on your fine win.
Callus Avatar
September 10, 2018 at 4:44 PM
Thank you, Line. Take care...regards // paul
Warrior Avatar
September 8, 2018 at 3:00 PM
Congrats!!! on your win my friend...excellent sonnet, Paul...love & light...^WW^
Horne Avatar
September 6, 2018 at 7:45 AM
such a deep & thoughtful sonnet here, my friend - beautifully written, as ever. I hope all is good there in Malta!
Callus Avatar
September 18, 2018 at 11:15 AM
Thank you for the lovely comments, Jack. Malta is hot, but luckily the sea is near and thus easily available. I try not to miss my daily swim. Regards // paul
Macdonald Avatar
September 5, 2018 at 1:05 AM
That was beautiful . I especially enjoyed the imagery :)
Callus Avatar
September 18, 2018 at 11:04 AM
Thank you, Maxie. Pleased to make your acquaintance. Regards // paul
Severo Avatar
September 3, 2018 at 4:51 PM
Beautiful poem Paul, I am happy I can learn so much from amazing writers here! peace and love xoxoxo
Callus Avatar
September 3, 2018 at 5:17 PM
You are too kind, Aurore...thank you for stopping by with such lovely comments. Peace & Love to you, too, my friend. // paul
Onclaud Avatar
September 3, 2018 at 2:48 PM
just wonderful; your poem lights the winning screen, paul... sweet congrats!
Callus Avatar
September 3, 2018 at 5:15 PM
Many thanks, Nette:) Your comments and congrats light up my day! Hugs // paul
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