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Heading Downtown by Subway

The escalator keeps descending; Seemingly, it’s never-ending, Taking riders deep into The bowels of the earth. Everyone around pretending That they’re fine, of course, depending On their circumstances and Just what their time is worth. When the platform’s reached, there’s waiting. Scrolling signs are indicating When the closest train will come – That is, if you’re in luck. Minutes tick by, generating Lots more people congregating But you’ve made your choice and now It seems that you are stuck. Finally, a revelation – See the train approach the station. As the doors glide open, people Rush to get inside. Find a seat or resignation Will stay ‘til your destination. Then at last you exit, Having taken it in stride.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024




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Date: 3/1/2024 9:32:00 AM
The subway may be cheaper than a taxi /but the price I paid was anxiety! / I got to my destination, Yankee stadium my heart palpitating wildly, the problem! I could have taken a taxi, of course but I likely would have gotten ripped off! – Maurice
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Date: 2/29/2024 11:44:00 AM
- I've only traveled by train once in my life ... we don't have trains where I live ... (no stress ... take the time we need:) - A great poem at a busy train station, Ilene :) - hugs
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Date: 2/26/2024 10:22:00 PM
You always bring living in the city to life Ilene, an enjoyable read. Tom
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Date: 2/26/2024 9:41:00 PM
Ilene, your skillfully written, expressive poem describes the daily routine of those in bigger cities riding the subways. Excellent. Janice
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Date: 2/26/2024 9:28:00 PM
a captivating poem, it brings back memories for me!
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Date: 2/26/2024 4:06:00 PM
Dear Ilene, Your poem truly captures the essence of the daily commute. The imagery of the perfectly conveying the feeling of descent and the unknown that awaits. I love how you portray the diverse passengers, each pretending to be "fine" despite their unique circumstances and anxieties. It's a subtle but powerful observation of the human condition in a shared space. The waiting on the platform, the anticipation, and the rush to board feel so real. Each line culminating in the bittersweet "resignation" of an accepted journey. Finally, the arrival and subsequent exit showcase the daily cycle, taken "in stride." The poem perfectly captures the mundane yet strangely human experience of a subway ride. I understand the commute. - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 2/26/2024 3:45:00 PM
This is a poem of relief. I live where there are no subways. My heart goes out to you. You're tough.
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