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He Dreams Despite My Screams

If only he could discern my pain and feel it's sorrow near if only he could smell the rain of salty tears I smear If by chance his sorrow grew Ivy's green disguise and choked the life he held onto then would he realize Don't forsake me where I may transcend beget me to dissolve I pray most humbly to ascend if my sin you won't absolve If he would only to forsee these eyes so trite and stark the truth is he does suffer me and leaves me with the dark

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/13/2020 5:38:00 PM

This has an eerie feel to it. Very effective. ;0)

Angela Crabtree
Date: 10/14/2020 8:54:00 AM

Thanks for reading, Richard. I really appreciate it :)

Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 7/24/2008 8:42:00 AM

You judge yourself a little harsher than you think. You write well and have a good heart. You can't ask for more than that in a person. Keep writing. Vince

Sara Lokken

Date: 7/16/2008 8:46:00 AM

So beautifully penned with heart-wrenching and poignant emotion. You know what-I love you, too.:) LOL. Anyway, I didn't log in here in a few days, because I was very busy lately. I hope all is well with you. Love, Sara

Heidie Buys

Date: 7/14/2008 2:40:00 PM

This is very good. Lovely flow and rhythm and so very touching. Very well done. Regards Heidie

Michael Degenhardt

Date: 7/14/2008 12:54:00 PM

Ivy, your writing is always so poignant and presents itself with a clarity, by way of great imagery. This is a wonderfully flowing read but for a sad subject. You pen your words with style. Michael

Date: 7/14/2008 12:24:00 PM

Nice intertwining of nature and emotion to forward your thoughts in this poem. In answer to your earlier question, I do go lilies--perennials I bought as small plants. Thank you for your ongoing support and for sharing your talent with us. Best wishes. Karen

Matthew Anish

Date: 7/13/2008 8:45:00 PM

Now - who are you talking about? A powerful poem written out of pain. The pain comes through especially in the last stanza. Keep it up!

Michael Jordan

Date: 7/13/2008 12:17:00 PM

Astrid - This poem has excellent rhyme and flow - the message is very sad and profound - I thank you for your kind comments and wish you many blessings

Christy Hardy

Date: 7/13/2008 7:28:00 AM

Sad write, but true for so many...Excellent poem, Always, Christy