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He Doesn't Shhhh Me Anymore

He told me to be quiet each time I tried to speak knowing I'd obey for he believed I was meek Months went by and I acquiesced to his wishes until I had enough and started flinging dishes "Shhh," he said and placed a vile finger to his lips I had enough of him and put my hands on my hips "You can't tell me who to talk to. I'll not be quiet If you think I'll stand for this, go ahead and try it." He thought I was joking. Well wasn't he the fool? I won't be used by any man. I'm not any man's tool He's buried in the backyard in an unmarked grave I bet now he knows I wasn't going to be his slave Each night I dress in widow's black and take a walk Mascara running from tears of joy, I give him a talk I lay a finger against my lips, then I smile and say, "Shhh, you know it's your fault you had to go away."

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Date: 8/26/2017 9:39:00 PM
A gripping sardonic tale that gives a frisson of dark poetic pleasure. Well done Lin.
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Date: 7/9/2017 8:11:00 AM
This is great! I was drawn in from teh beginning and interested in where this might go... love the dark twist. Very belated congrats on POTD (which I must have missed)
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/9/2017 9:09:00 AM
Thank you very much, Agnes. You didn't miss a thing now. ;-)
Date: 7/8/2017 10:00:00 AM
Wonderful... An inspiring piece
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/8/2017 1:59:00 PM
Thanks but I hope it doesn't inspire murder.
Date: 7/6/2017 6:25:00 PM
Lin I had to drop by and see the comments since you got POTD - wow you got one from TPS I dont think I have never had that honour:-) hugs Jan xx
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/6/2017 6:41:00 PM
Hi, Jan. Is it?
Date: 7/6/2017 4:25:00 PM
This is a great poem!
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Date: 7/4/2017 4:23:00 AM
You sound like me...wish the dishes a-flying! lol This poem is hilarious! Just love it.
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Date: 7/1/2017 10:43:00 AM
LOL! Love this clever write, Lin! "Mascara running from tears of joy" this is a veritable hoot! :)) This piece reminds me of something I'd endured. Had been joyfully buried, but he had returned with other spooks.
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/1/2017 10:55:00 AM
Thanks for the laughter, and I don't mind touching up my mascara. That's an easier fix than burying another body. Call me if you need help getting rid of those spooks.
Date: 6/30/2017 2:05:00 PM
Ha ha ha - so brilliantly and humorously wrote - well at least I hope so . . . (*o* )
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/1/2017 10:53:00 AM
Thanks for appreciating the humor in this one, Indiana. ;-)
Date: 6/25/2017 10:27:00 PM
Sometimes it helps to vent Lin. I hope this poem was cathartic for you. Relationships are never easy are they? : )
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/27/2017 5:37:00 AM
I ended my vent at him a couple of years ago, but sometimes a spark ignites with a memory. He's not buried in the back yard, but he's dead to me. Thanks so much, Connie.
Date: 6/24/2017 8:09:00 PM
I love this, awesome write. Once you do this you can't go back :) I knew when I saw pic of girl it would be great write. Love the write.
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/27/2017 5:35:00 AM
Thank you, Debbie. Glad you like the drawing. She was perfect for the message.
Date: 6/19/2017 12:40:00 PM
A cold, dark Gothic gem of a poem, Lin. The rhymes all rock. You got the verve, whacking the nerves. Laying down the law w/the best. Making poetic promises that we ain't seen the last of you yet. Super cool write. Kudos for POTD. Stellar poetry from one of my favorite poetesses. Love and hugs always.
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/19/2017 2:35:00 PM
Thanks for all the great compliments, Freddie.
Date: 6/19/2017 11:59:00 AM
"He thought I was joking. Well wasn't he the fool?" I can really relate to whole write, but that line ......... you showed him. I contemplated a backyard burial at one point, but never went through with it... lol . Spot on with that last line too !! Fun read Lin !!
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Lenna Walker
Date: 6/23/2017 12:32:00 PM
Happier that I DIDN'T use my backyard as a burial ground, lmao
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/19/2017 2:34:00 PM
Thanks a lot, Lenna. I'm glad you enjoyed it and happier that you use your back yard as a burial ground!
Date: 6/17/2017 9:39:00 AM
Hello friend. Its been a while. LORD! This is just vintage you! Excellent, Awesome and a master in this covetous craft of writing. Keep on flowing the ink of your mind. A 7 for sure.
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/17/2017 9:42:00 AM
It has been a while, and I was not active for several months on this site. It's nice to see you and I gratefully accept your kind comments, Funom.
Date: 6/13/2017 7:24:00 AM
Lin, I enjoyed your twist.. you surely showed him. You silenced him forever ;) needless to say this was a joy to read!
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/13/2017 8:25:00 AM
Yes, I did, Wilma. I put up with his audacity for too long...haha. Thanks for finding joy and humor in this one.
Date: 6/13/2017 4:18:00 AM
Some men take their women too much for granted. They don't realize that there is a limit to everything! I love how this 'relationship' worked out at the end, Lin. Can you blame a victim for retaliating!! ~ Regards // paul
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/13/2017 8:24:00 AM
You are such a gentleman, Paul. I've always recognized that quality in you. It was a fun write even though I went a little stark raving mad. thanks for your great comments.
Date: 6/12/2017 7:48:00 PM
That will teach him. Love it, dangerous, but funny
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 10:25:00 PM
Yes, it sure did. Thank you, Shirley.
Date: 6/12/2017 6:00:00 PM
You buried him deep Lin, but do mark the spot in case you need to move him, as they say keep your friends close but your enemies closer, congrats on POTD.
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 10:24:00 PM
He won't be dug up. I'll see to that. Thanks, Cecelia.
Date: 6/12/2017 5:21:00 PM
An awesome write, Lin! And congrats to you
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 10:24:00 PM
Thanks ever so much, WW.
Date: 6/12/2017 1:45:00 PM
i am obedient to my D always my dear lovely friend. Wonderfully pictured. A great congrats on POTD. Loved always, bl
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 4:54:00 PM
Thanks so much, BL.
Date: 6/12/2017 12:47:00 PM
I am glad to see you get POTD, with this splendid write! :) Congrats!
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 4:53:00 PM
Your thoughts and remarks are always a welcome sight, AV. Thanks.
Date: 6/12/2017 12:42:00 PM
*giggle* I love this Lin! Congrats on potd and fave ;) xomo!
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 4:53:00 PM
Thanks so much, Maureen.
Date: 6/12/2017 11:11:00 AM
Don't guess he'll do that again...Congratulations for POTD honors.
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 11:13:00 AM
Ha...good one, Charlie, and I don't have plans to dig him up to find out. Thanks for your humor, my friend.
Date: 6/12/2017 10:51:00 AM
Hi Lin, Congratulations on getting the poem of day. It waz most definitely well deserved:-) Alexis
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 11:02:00 AM
Thanks so very much for your thoughts, Alexis. They're always appreciated.
Date: 6/12/2017 10:45:00 AM
Whoa! Remind me not to cross you Lin. Congratulations on your recognition with POTD. - Dean
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 11:02:00 AM
If you even come close to offending me, Dean, I'll let you know. haha Thanks so much.
Date: 6/12/2017 10:37:00 AM
Congrats!!! on (((POTD))) Lin...very funny I hope...just the same...don't know if I'd come over for dinner anymore lol...all the best...^WW^
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 11:01:00 AM
You're not to worry, my warrior friend. You've never shushed me. Thank you for your well wishes, and they are sent back to you.
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