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He Doesn'T Shhhh Me Anymore

He told me to be quiet each time I tried to speak
knowing I'd obey for he believed I was meek
Months went by and I acquiesced to his wishes
until I had enough and started flinging dishes

"Shhh," he said and placed a vile finger to his lips
I had enough of him and put my hands on my hips
"You can't tell me who to talk to. I'll not be quiet
If you think I'll stand for this, go ahead and try it."

He thought I was joking. Well wasn't he the fool?
I won't be used by any man. I'm not any man's tool
He's buried in the backyard in an unmarked grave
I bet now he knows I wasn't going to be his slave 

Each night I dress in widow's black and take a walk
Mascara running from tears of joy, I give him a talk
I lay a finger against my lips, then I smile and say,
"Shhh, you know it's your fault you had to go away."

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Geoffrey Brewer August 26, 2017 at 9:39 PM A gripping sardonic tale that gives a frisson of dark poetic pleasure. Well done Lin. Lin Lane September 10, 2023 at 8:08 PM An overlooked comment from years gone by. Sorry, Geoffrey.

Agnes Krampe July 9, 2017 at 8:11 AM This is great! I was drawn in from teh beginning and interested in where this might go... love the dark twist. Very belated congrats on POTD (which I must have missed) Lin Lane July 9, 2017 at 9:09 AM Thank you very much, Agnes. You didn't miss a thing now. ;-)

Jan Allison July 6, 2017 at 6:25 PM Lin I had to drop by and see the comments since you got POTD - wow you got one from TPS I dont think I have never had that honour:-) hugs Jan xx Lin Lane July 6, 2017 at 6:41 PM Hi, Jan. Is it?

Team Poetrysoup July 6, 2017 at 4:25 PM This is a great poem!

Carole Duet July 4, 2017 at 4:23 AM You sound like me...wish the dishes a-flying! lol This poem is hilarious! Just love it.

Michelle Mac Donald July 1, 2017 at 10:43 AM LOL! Love this clever write, Lin! "Mascara running from tears of joy" this is a veritable hoot! :)) This piece reminds me of something I'd endured. Had been joyfully buried, but he had returned with other spooks. Lin Lane July 1, 2017 at 10:55 AM Thanks for the laughter, and I don't mind touching up my mascara. That's an easier fix than burying another body. Call me if you need help getting rid of those spooks.

Indiana Shaw June 30, 2017 at 2:05 PM Ha ha ha - so brilliantly and humorously wrote - well at least I hope so . . . (*o* ) Lin Lane July 1, 2017 at 10:53 AM Thanks for appreciating the humor in this one, Indiana. ;-)

Connie Marcum Wong June 25, 2017 at 10:27 PM Sometimes it helps to vent Lin. I hope this poem was cathartic for you. Relationships are never easy are they? : ) Lin Lane June 27, 2017 at 5:37 AM I ended my vent at him a couple of years ago, but sometimes a spark ignites with a memory. He's not buried in the back yard, but he's dead to me. Thanks so much, Connie.

Debbie Duncan June 24, 2017 at 8:09 PM I love this, awesome write. Once you do this you can't go back :) I knew when I saw pic of girl it would be great write. Love the write. Lin Lane June 27, 2017 at 5:35 AM Thank you, Debbie. Glad you like the drawing. She was perfect for the message.

Freddie Robinson Jr. June 19, 2017 at 12:40 PM A cold, dark Gothic gem of a poem, Lin. The rhymes all rock. You got the verve, whacking the nerves. Laying down the law w/the best. Making poetic promises that we ain't seen the last of you yet. Super cool write. Kudos for POTD. Stellar poetry from one of my favorite poetesses. Love and hugs always. Lin Lane June 19, 2017 at 2:35 PM Thanks for all the great compliments, Freddie.

Lenna Walker June 19, 2017 at 11:59 AM "He thought I was joking. Well wasn't he the fool?" I can really relate to whole write, but that line ......... you showed him. I contemplated a backyard burial at one point, but never went through with it... lol . Spot on with that last line too !! Fun read Lin !! Lenna Walker June 23, 2017 at 12:32 PM Happier that I DIDN'T use my backyard as a burial ground, lmao Lin Lane June 19, 2017 at 2:34 PM Thanks a lot, Lenna. I'm glad you enjoyed it and happier that you use your back yard as a burial ground!

Funom Makama June 17, 2017 at 9:39 AM Hello friend. Its been a while. LORD! This is just vintage you! Excellent, Awesome and a master in this covetous craft of writing. Keep on flowing the ink of your mind. A 7 for sure. Lin Lane June 17, 2017 at 9:42 AM It has been a while, and I was not active for several months on this site. It's nice to see you and I gratefully accept your kind comments, Funom.

Wilma Neels June 13, 2017 at 7:24 AM Lin, I enjoyed your twist.. you surely showed him. You silenced him forever ;) needless to say this was a joy to read! Lin Lane June 13, 2017 at 8:25 AM Yes, I did, Wilma. I put up with his audacity for too long...haha. Thanks for finding joy and humor in this one.

Paul Callus June 13, 2017 at 4:18 AM Some men take their women too much for granted. They don't realize that there is a limit to everything! I love how this 'relationship' worked out at the end, Lin. Can you blame a victim for retaliating!! ~ Regards // paul Lin Lane June 13, 2017 at 8:24 AM You are such a gentleman, Paul. I've always recognized that quality in you. It was a fun write even though I went a little stark raving mad. thanks for your great comments.

Shirley Rebstock June 12, 2017 at 7:48 PM That will teach him. Love it, dangerous, but funny Lin Lane June 12, 2017 at 10:25 PM Yes, it sure did. Thank you, Shirley.

White Wolf June 12, 2017 at 5:21 PM An awesome write, Lin! And congrats to you Lin Lane June 12, 2017 at 10:24 PM Thanks ever so much, WW.

Bl Devnath June 12, 2017 at 1:45 PM i am obedient to my D always my dear lovely friend. Wonderfully pictured. A great congrats on POTD. Loved always, bl Lin Lane June 12, 2017 at 4:54 PM Thanks so much, BL.

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart June 12, 2017 at 12:42 PM *giggle* I love this Lin! Congrats on potd and fave ;) xomo! Lin Lane June 12, 2017 at 4:53 PM Thanks so much, Maureen.

Charlie Smith June 12, 2017 at 11:11 AM Don't guess he'll do that again...Congratulations for POTD honors. Lin Lane June 12, 2017 at 11:13 AM Ha...good one, Charlie, and I don't have plans to dig him up to find out. Thanks for your humor, my friend.

Alexis Y. June 12, 2017 at 10:51 AM Hi Lin, Congratulations on getting the poem of day. It waz most definitely well deserved:-) Alexis Lin Lane June 12, 2017 at 11:02 AM Thanks so very much for your thoughts, Alexis. They're always appreciated.

Dean Wood June 12, 2017 at 10:45 AM Whoa! Remind me not to cross you Lin. Congratulations on your recognition with POTD. - Dean Lin Lane June 12, 2017 at 11:02 AM If you even come close to offending me, Dean, I'll let you know. haha Thanks so much.

Winged Warrior June 12, 2017 at 10:37 AM Congrats!!! on (((POTD))) Lin...very funny I hope...just the same...don't know if I'd come over for dinner anymore lol...all the best...^WW^ Lin Lane June 12, 2017 at 11:01 AM You're not to worry, my warrior friend. You've never shushed me. Thank you for your well wishes, and they are sent back to you.

Jan Allison June 12, 2017 at 10:27 AM Many many congrats Lin on POTD this will always be a fave for me;-) hugs jan xx Lin Lane June 12, 2017 at 11:00 AM Thanks bunches, Jan, for faving this one. I let fly with the ammo on this one, didn't I?

Akkina Downing June 12, 2017 at 10:07 AM Lol... I'm sorry I didn't mean laugh but the ending is perfect. I love it! Congratulation on your awesome potd, Lin... hugs :) Lin Lane June 12, 2017 at 10:59 AM Please laugh all you like. I laughed a titch at myself after reading it aloud. Thanks for liking this one, Akkina.

Sunlite Wanter June 12, 2017 at 9:44 AM I hope this is meant to be funny, because I'm laughing! On the other hand, there are many women who can identify - I hope they don't get any ideas. LOL Congratulations!!! Lin Lane June 12, 2017 at 10:58 AM Oh woe would be to me if I were serious. I'd be behind bars, but I have a fertile imagination. Thanks Sunlite.

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