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October-16- 2024
Haunted House Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Tania Kitchin

Getting down at a strange place in a desolate station, I looked for an Uber taxi to reach my location. There was no one around, and no taxi in view. I knew rain coming, as thunder rumbled and wind blew. It was getting late and the sun had already set. With darkness surrounding me, I felt so upset. Panic stomped into me as I stood desperately alone. From far I got the enticing smell of a cologne. Looking around I saw someone hastily coming It was a lady and seemed of decent grooming. She sensed my escalating fear and volunteered to escort. I accompanied her, profusely thanking her for support. * * * * * * Opening my eyes, I saw the lady down on the floor- a corpse frosted. To my great shock, I knew I was in a house haunted. A wave of dread ran over me and I screamed in terror Unable to move, my body shook in deadening horror!

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Date: 10/28/2024 6:24:00 AM
Valsa, a sincere CONGRATS on your win with this chilling piece. Janice
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Date: 10/27/2024 8:55:00 PM
congratulations on your win dear poet. cheers. beautiful write.
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Date: 10/27/2024 8:53:00 PM
congratulations on your win dear poet. cheers. beautiful write.
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Date: 10/27/2024 8:01:00 AM
Valsa, I enjoyed your creepy poem, congratulations on your winning placement.
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Date: 10/27/2024 9:55:00 PM
Hi Tania, thanks a lot for the great placement you have given me. I was wondering what I should write. Suddenly this idea propped up..... :)
Date: 10/17/2024 1:37:00 AM
Your ending is perfect for this type of poetry. The contrast is magnificent. Best for a win.
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Date: 10/16/2024 1:23:00 PM
Dear sweet valsa, that picture made my heartbeat race, ah! I fear death of loved ones so … and as i move onto your poem, wow , i have to once again remind you, to publish your book of short stories, poetic or not, you really know how to deliver engaging ones that get readers intrigued to read more to kno more and find out what’s next! You are just a natural i think with that! And as i read the ending , made me wonder have you ever heard of or seen a haunted house? Iv seen some, dear talented soul, this is just beyond impeccable and very well delivered! Pleasure always reading you! Sending you light today and always and best wishes for the contest too, i hope you are coping well there and please know that you are in my thoughts always
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Date: 10/16/2024 10:16:00 AM
Hey Valsa.. Your poem successfully builds suspense through its eerie setting, gradual escalation of tension, and shocking twist. The combination of isolation, supernatural horror, and psychological fear keeps the reader on edge. The poem for its effective use of sensory details and concise language to create a haunting atmosphere, as well as its ability to surprise the reader with an unexpected, spine-chilling turn.
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Date: 10/16/2024 7:57:00 AM
Quite a spooky tale Valsa. You hear of these happening. Good luck in the contest. Tom
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Date: 10/16/2024 4:47:00 AM
Valsa, a creative one with a surprise ending that one could figure out the plot for him/herself. The lady's ghost could have come to get help so her body could be found is one ending but so many more endings could fit right in. Thanks for sharing your talent with us. Sara K
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