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Haunted - Emotive Write

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FICTION WRITE FOR CONTEST For so many years I’ve lived with the shame Kept it locked in the sullen depths of my soul He took my virginity; I can’t be held to blame I was so very young, just an innocent child when he babysat at night and my body defiled. He stole my childhood; I can never be whole You've accused me of lies, bitter vitriolic lies when I first told you of my uncle’s abuse I’ll never forget the haunted look in your eyes when the police officer confirmed it was true. He confessed there’d been other children too, you sobbed for not protecting me. It’s of no use Rhyme time I contest Sponsored by Laura Loo cHECKED WITH RHYMEZONE 3/29/18

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Sandra Haight

Date: 4/4/2018 5:35:00 PM

So sad, and so serious, Jan. You have brought the pain forth so well. Congratulations on your Podium win. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2018 5:39:00 PM

Thanks Sandra, it was an emotive write, I never know where my muse will take me:-) hugs jan xx

Janis Thompson

Date: 4/4/2018 5:36:00 AM

So much is going on as we speak. A hard subject well done. Congratulations. My right hand is in a brace I must type with one finger on the left. g o back make my corrections slow. a real pain

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2018 8:06:00 AM

Thanks for dropping by Sian, sorry to hear about your troubles I hope your hand heals quickly, get well soon:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 4/4/2018 2:26:00 AM

This serious social issue is so often swept under the carpet especially in some other cultures. congratulations Jan and well done for highlighting it Tom.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2018 4:45:00 AM

Thanks for your comment Tom:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 4/3/2018 8:29:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Jan, wonderful write. Hugs Eve ~`*

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2018 4:45:00 AM

Thanks Eve:-) hugs jan xx

Susan Gentry

Date: 4/3/2018 8:07:00 PM

Congratulations on your win with this truly haunting poem.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2018 4:44:00 AM

Thanks Susan, it is an emotive poem and I'm thankful its pure fiction for me but i know others can relate:-( hugs Jan xx

Line Gauthier

Date: 4/3/2018 12:47:00 PM

Back with much deserved congrats, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/3/2018 12:49:00 PM

thanks Line:-) hugs jan xx

Randy Steele

Date: 4/3/2018 12:18:00 PM

Congratulations, Jan. What courage it must have taken to do this write. Awesome. Well deserved win.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/3/2018 12:23:00 PM

Thankfully its a fiction write for me Randy, but sadly i know there are some that can relate to being abused:-( hugs Jan xx

John Gondolf

Date: 4/3/2018 10:46:00 AM

Jan, congrats on your win. Your poem is very well written though poems like this are so very hard for me to read. John

Jan Allison
Date: 4/3/2018 10:48:00 AM

It was a difficult theme to write about John, i much prefer humour but never know where my muse will take me:-( hugs jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 4/3/2018 10:23:00 AM

so sad sweet Jan, unfortunately it happens too often, myself included. I pray for all the sweet innocent victims. Beautifully expressed poem. thank you and congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo

Jan Allison
Date: 4/3/2018 10:27:00 AM

Thanks so so much LuLoo, I'm so sorry you can relate to it on a personal level its absolutely heartbreaking:-( hugs jan xx

Fj Thomas

Date: 4/1/2018 10:32:00 AM

How utterly gut wrenching Jan. As a mother you know the feelings this stirs. A truly "emotive" write! Peace upon you today dear poetic sister.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/1/2018 10:51:00 AM

I can't begin to imagine what it's like to be abused by a family member or 'friend' and then for it not to be believed, but I read so many stories in magazines and of course we see it in the press with sport coaches etc:-( hugs jan xx

Roy Pett

Date: 4/1/2018 8:03:00 AM

Well written Jan, any abuse to any living thing is unforgivable but the abuse of children can only be an act of the most evil, good luck in contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/1/2018 10:49:00 AM

Thanks Roy, its a difficult subject to tackle but i have no control over the way my muse beahves:-) hugs jan xx

Mick Talbot

Date: 3/29/2018 8:25:00 PM

Definitely, heart-wrenching! Wishing you success in the contest... hugs Mick

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2018 6:26:00 AM

Thanks Mick I hope it's on the winners list as its a subject that should be written about:-( hugs jan xx

Niall Fulham

Date: 3/29/2018 4:57:00 PM

Hi Jan , very powerful sad emotional write evil lurks behind closed doors :( hugs~~Niall

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2018 6:25:00 AM

You are so right there Niall, I wrote a poem on that subject:-( hugs Jan xx https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/behind_closed_doors_-_emotive_write_886741

Ilene Bauer

Date: 3/29/2018 4:07:00 PM

so sad and so believable, jan! it's awful to think of how often this happens. you've captured those feelings very well in your poem. best of luck in the contest...

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2018 6:23:00 AM

Thanks so much Ilene:-) hugs Jan xx

Abdul Malik

Date: 3/29/2018 10:00:00 AM

Heart-wrenching. Unfortunately, often so true. Nicely written, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2018 6:22:00 AM

It is so sad Abdul:-( hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 3/29/2018 8:28:00 AM

Very emotional verse Jan, sadly it goes on and ruins many lives. Good luck . Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2018 6:22:00 AM

I agree Tom, if the perpetrator gets sent to prison they are out in a few years, but the victims have a life sentence:-( hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/29/2018 8:11:00 AM

- This fate affects many children and young people ... so sad - Great written, Jan - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2018 6:17:00 AM

It impacts onto the rest of their lives:-( hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 3/29/2018 8:09:00 AM

What a sad and emotive write. It rings true to me. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-)Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2018 6:17:00 AM

Thanks Alexis I read stories in women's magazines and that is what inspired the poem:-( hugs jan xx

Mike Gentile

Date: 3/29/2018 7:57:00 AM

This happens all too often, s sad but realistic write, Jan Best in the contest xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 3/29/2018 5:28:00 PM

Thanks Mike, i never know what my muse will come up with, more often than not its humour but this is a little different to my usual style:-( hugs Jan xx

Line Gauthier

Date: 3/29/2018 7:54:00 AM

Strong emotive work. Very touching, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/29/2018 5:27:00 PM

Thanks Line:-) hugs jan xx