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Happiness burns

Happiness burns Visions of eternity, crash and burn in her mind, Her delusional imposters supplant our reality. Lightning strikes to the brain, burn our happiness to the ground. On the floor lay my fragments...her love was the glue that held me together. 4 lines taken from my Here lies a broken man poem now entered in Greg Barden's Liberum Divisa 5 contest April 26,2021

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Date: 6/13/2021 12:28:00 PM
I came back to say congrats in the contest. I don't think I had ever gone through that particular winners' list. WEll deserved win. I hope you know that I always want to comment on your poems I read. These days we have resumed teaching at my school building and my time is even more limited than it was in the spring!I sure do miss the time I used to have for more comments, etc. nowadays I seem to be making most of them on my weekends!
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Date: 5/26/2021 8:12:00 PM
I remember reading the original, John, and I so happy to see this excerpt on the winners list, congratulations!
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John Hamilton
Date: 5/27/2021 7:57:00 AM
Thanks Michelle it was a nice surprise!
Date: 5/25/2021 4:46:00 PM
Sincere congratulations on your win in the Liberum Divisa 5 Poetry Contest, John - thank you so much for entering! This was a very tough contest to judge as there were SO many wonderful entries - I loved reading your submission. Blessings! - the bard
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John Hamilton
Date: 5/27/2021 7:57:00 AM
Thanks G didn't think I had a chance in this contest, but glad it was chosen, thanks a lot!
Date: 5/24/2021 9:39:00 PM
The ending line is powerful, nice extract, John:) thank you for my placement in your summer love contest, I worked hard on my poem and to see you surprised by my efforts gives me great satisfaction:)
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John Hamilton
Date: 5/27/2021 9:01:00 AM
Thanks Jo, it is a wonderful write!
Date: 5/21/2021 12:20:00 AM
Hey John, I can feel the torment and woundedness in these lines. Nicely done!
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John Hamilton
Date: 5/23/2021 8:42:00 AM
Thanks Thomas I appreciate your kind visit and comment!
Date: 4/29/2021 7:54:00 PM
WoW! John, Your four lines are very good by themselves. Now I have to go read the poem that these four lines were taken from. They're a great contender for the contest. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great evening:-) Alexis
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John Hamilton
Date: 4/30/2021 10:30:00 AM
Thanks Lexi I don't have very many free verse to choose from, I rarely enter Greg's contests I hardly ever win!
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Alexis Y.
Date: 4/29/2021 8:04:00 PM
I already read the poem this gem was taken from-Alexis
Date: 4/29/2021 12:00:00 PM
I loved this John! Short but sweet and amazing!:)
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 5/24/2021 7:00:00 PM
Always a pleasure to read you John!;)
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John Hamilton
Date: 4/29/2021 7:43:00 PM
Thanks Brenda nice to see you by my way today.
Date: 4/27/2021 3:23:00 PM
wow, the end of line 4 has great impact, John. Great imagery!
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John Hamilton
Date: 4/27/2021 6:55:00 PM
Thanks Andrea glad you liked it enough to comment!
Date: 4/26/2021 8:50:00 PM
Thanks so much for the placement in your contest John.
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John Hamilton
Date: 4/27/2021 8:17:00 AM
It was well deserved, you stand with some of the soups finest!
Date: 4/26/2021 11:04:00 AM
It stands well on its own. Well done John.
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John Hamilton
Date: 4/26/2021 2:11:00 PM
Thanks Rick, nice to "see" you pass by today!