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Hammock of Dust

It is the eighth hour of fog, yet she still paces around the churchyard without a hat on her blown tresses; an autumn cloak rustling beneath a gray cloudscape that somehow, her eyes wander on, not because she relishes the flick of icy leaves...not because silk orchids lay on a marbled cross: rather, her thoughts gather among dry thistles to wail upon a crypt nestled by life’s hammock of dust. The lull from breezes affirm such quietude of her beloved now resting on potter’s field, sealed by the finality of death : this instant crash through night's byway pinning him down down the abyss... And the mist spills into another hour unrelenting in bowed silence, as if he loved her essence more in ghastly ruins. Broken Wing's Could You, Please Contest Submitted 10/20/2017 Originally Written 10/17/2017

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Date: 11/15/2017 1:06:00 PM
Loved it, Nette! I have to somewhat reluctantly disagree with Mr J. Morning (although I do concede to his far superior literacy skills than mine) as to the use of the colon; once in vogue, many moons ago, until it slowly fell out of favour...but now making a reemergence once again. Hurrah for the good old colon!! My very warmest regards, Nette, as always. :) john P.s Congrats on your much deserved win of course. :)
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Date: 10/28/2017 6:18:00 AM
Powerful write, Nette! Congratulations on your well-deserved First Place win! Regards, John.
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Date: 10/23/2017 7:41:00 AM
Congrats Nette, for your well-deserved first placement with this brilliant piece! ;-)
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Date: 10/21/2017 8:49:00 AM
Nette, congratulations on your win in my contest with this deliciously, dark and beautifully penned write, well done!
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Date: 10/20/2017 10:57:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Nette, great write . Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 10/20/2017 5:32:00 PM
Back with congratulations Nette :) bless! xomo
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Date: 10/20/2017 12:22:00 PM
Back to congratulate you on your deserving win Nette...
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Date: 10/18/2017 5:32:00 AM
This is such a chilling write my friend, what a fabulous poem, stealthy in every point, intricately written full of passion of your piece and point of view! You have shown her sadness, and the degree of degradation she has been through! I surely loved reading your lovely piece this morning! what a powerful write, Great Work!!
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Date: 10/17/2017 5:35:00 PM
Gruelling, excellent write. Extra credit for metaphorical agility.
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Date: 10/17/2017 3:12:00 PM
Love it, Nette. Fave.
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Date: 10/17/2017 1:26:00 PM
Gorgeous
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Date: 10/17/2017 12:48:00 PM
Sad story--feelings well depicted!
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Date: 10/17/2017 12:39:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your beautiful and delicate poem ...
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Date: 10/17/2017 11:34:00 AM
Such drama, well done Nette...
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