Hammock of Dust

She still paces around the churchyard without a hat on her blown tresses; an autumn cloak rustling beneath a gray cloudscape that somehow, her eyes wander on, not because she relishes the flick of icy leaves...not because silk orchids lay on a marbled cross: rather, her thoughts gather among dry thistles to wail upon a crypt nestled by life’s hammock of dust. The lull from breezes affirms such quietude of her beloved now resting on potter’s field, sealed by the finality of death : this instant crash through night's byway pinning him down down the abyss... And the mist spills into another hour unrelenting in bowed silence, as if he loved her essence more in ghastly ruins. Broken Wing's Could You, Please Contest Submitted 10/20/2017 Originally Written 10/17/2017
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

Poem

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Fleming Avatar
November 15, 2017 at 1:06 PM
Loved it, Nette! I have to somewhat reluctantly disagree with Mr J. Morning (although I do concede to his far superior literacy skills than mine) as to the use of the colon; once in vogue, many moons ago, until it slowly fell out of favour...but now making a reemergence once again. Hurrah for the good old colon!! My very warmest regards, Nette, as always. :) john P.s Congrats on your much deserved win of course. :)
Michaels Avatar
October 28, 2017 at 6:18 AM
Powerful write, Nette! Congratulations on your well-deserved First Place win! Regards, John.
Kimathi Avatar
October 23, 2017 at 7:41 AM
Congrats Nette, for your well-deserved first placement with this brilliant piece! ;-)
La France Avatar
October 21, 2017 at 8:49 AM
Nette, congratulations on your win in my contest with this deliciously, dark and beautifully penned write, well done!
Roper Avatar
October 20, 2017 at 10:57 PM
Congratulations on your win, Nette, great write . Hugs Eve ~`*
Pigeon Tart Avatar
October 20, 2017 at 5:32 PM
Back with congratulations Nette :) bless! xomo
Smith Avatar
October 20, 2017 at 12:22 PM
Back to congratulate you on your deserving win Nette...
Sivey Avatar
October 18, 2017 at 5:32 AM
This is such a chilling write my friend, what a fabulous poem, stealthy in every point, intricately written full of passion of your piece and point of view! You have shown her sadness, and the degree of degradation she has been through! I surely loved reading your lovely piece this morning! what a powerful write, Great Work!!
Sabre Avatar
October 17, 2017 at 5:35 PM
Gruelling, excellent write. Extra credit for metaphorical agility.
Krampe Avatar
October 17, 2017 at 3:12 PM
Love it, Nette. Fave.
Pigeon Tart Avatar
October 17, 2017 at 1:26 PM
Gorgeous
Pandit Avatar
October 17, 2017 at 12:48 PM
Sad story--feelings well depicted!
Gupta Avatar
October 17, 2017 at 12:39 PM
Enjoyed reading your beautiful and delicate poem ...
Smith Avatar
October 17, 2017 at 11:34 AM
Such drama, well done Nette...
Get a Premium Membership
Turn off ads, get more exposure for your poetry, and get more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Diverse Voices: The Poetry of Human Rights and the Pursuit of Peace