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Half Past Summer, Two Months To Fall The sultry legs of summer dance under sunny skies Each day, the steps are heated and embraced She lies in summer's arms on a beach, tanning herself As the sands of summer roll with the waltzing tides When the song ends, she sighs, and a new stage begins Slippers and sandals are replaced with shoes for the fall A picnic of beachgoers wanes as a harvest moon peaks Soon her yard fills with leaves as Fall looks to ask her out connie pachecho 7/29/25

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Date: 7/29/2025 12:45:00 PM
One edit I made was to add an adjective before legs in line#1. Because the legs of summer are sexy, hot. As for following the prompts of a current contest that ended, I looked as an incentive and motivation to write this poem.
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Connie Pachecho
Date: 7/29/2025 2:49:00 PM
Also, by changing the last line, it now follows a theme, whereas summer is her suitor and she dances to his tune. Fall eagerly waits his turn.
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Connie Pachecho
Date: 7/29/2025 2:42:00 PM
Soon her yard fills with leaves as Fall knocks on the door. The last line is too cliché. I know that. So I changed it to as Fall looks to ask her out.
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Connie Pachecho
Date: 7/29/2025 1:35:00 PM
In line#7, the term harvest moon peaks has a double meaning here. As summer soon closes, the harvest moon wants to steal a glance at Fall and has a longing to rise.

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