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Haiti: Dreams Betrayed Beneath the Sun

Haiti: Dreams Betrayed Beneath the Sun Our “Mother Earth” has filled her graves; dread stays. Entrapping thousands in her hungry jaws. She quivered with her deepest rage, oh, day. And from her belly under seas roars cause. Spitting fire, destroying, homes; thus stealing breath. Disaster bound its heart to tears affright. Rescuers search the rubbles heaped with … Death. She killed the young and old with just one bite. Gone; children ripped from parents while they played. And Old folks lost in thought found not their stay. In moments those that lived had passed away. Now destitute, survivors to God pray. The rich and poor together work, none tire. Will hopes and prayers revive their stolen days? The rescued, shocked, and dazed reap horrors’, ire. Life lost beneath debris turns to a blaze. The world looks on with wonder, all amazed. Resilient, pained, some brave survivors’ fight. For tragedy had thrust death’s dreadful phase. But human strengths arose to face their plight. As help from other lands aid dreams betrayed. Reminding all who lived that we are one. United humans, tasting dread; strength stayed. Compassion, peace, and love beneath the sun. © © Dane Smith-Johnsen January 31, 2010 Poetic form: Quatrain

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Date: 3/6/2010 9:00:00 PM
Hey, I never said congratulations to you on this win. Way to go!!
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Date: 2/27/2010 4:23:00 PM
Beautifully rendered Dane, truly. Congratulations.
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Date: 2/26/2010 7:11:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Starflixer's Betrayal contest Dane Ann. Love, Carol
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Date: 2/25/2010 12:45:00 PM
Dear Dane Ann, my warm congratulations comes your way for this masterpiece on the Haitian Earthquake. Peace, love, audrey
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Date: 2/25/2010 12:17:00 PM
You already know how much I admire your writing and this poem is a good example of your talent. Congratulations on your win! Enjoy your success. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/25/2010 12:17:00 PM
Congrats Dane Ann on your winning poem in the Betrayal contest.. a wonderful write and a wonderful win for a wonderful lady..luv.. and enjoy your victory..Linda-Marie..
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Date: 2/10/2010 1:15:00 PM
My Dear Dane-Ann, Thank-YOU, Thank-YOU very much for Your comment on my POEM " My LOVE " That was one of the first of "End Line Word" Form Before it had a Name Have YOU read the E.L.W. very First of this Form POETRY " Apology " 11/27/06 I just read the Masterpiece of POETRY in front of my Eyes Alas I did not read it : I FELT IT A most Beautiful Dedication to the Haitian Nation ALWAYS YOURS...HG
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Date: 2/1/2010 3:28:00 PM
You have truly captured the horror here. I just hope the world's focus doesn't disappear in 6 months. Haiti was a tragedy without the earthquake and maybe Mother Nature just had had enough of our neglect ... The only other democracy in our hemisphere has been treated rather shabbily and our short-term memory as portrayed by our media is a tragedy also. You've certainly been busy with all your writing of late Ms. DaneAnn ... keep it up and thanks for all your recent comments!!
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Date: 1/31/2010 5:55:00 PM
This is such a wonderful write...This was a real tragedy...Marty
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Date: 1/31/2010 2:32:00 PM
This awesome write is a true testament to your true feeling for mankind, I read inawe Thank you so much Daniel
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Date: 1/31/2010 2:19:00 PM
U have captured the tragedy and enormous loss of this poor country and its people.. may our prayers be of some solace to them and the supplies reach them quickly.. beautiful form of poetry ... your words bring tears ...to my eyes... so touching... luv.. Linda-Marie..
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Date: 1/31/2010 1:32:00 PM
Awesome, Dane Ann! You have here a winner in this one. As usual, well-written. Peace and love, Audrey
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Date: 1/31/2010 9:53:00 AM
Of all the forms you are writing, I think Iambic Penameter allows you to express your thoughts most deeply, Dane Ann. The descriptions of the earthquake are very vivid and our prayers for the victims continue. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 1/31/2010 9:35:00 AM
BTW, OOPS, maybe you mean this is for the Betrayal contest?? And this is DONE in iambic pentamter, it's not an imabic pentameter contest then? Yes, I can see this in the category for betrayal for sure. A cruel unintentional betrayal of earth to man. And if it's in betrayal contest, I STILL think you will do REALLY well!!
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Date: 1/31/2010 9:30:00 AM
THIS is THE best poem I've seen on Haiti. I would not be surprised if you won this contest. Now you have me interested in this contest. Gosh, I LOVE iambic pentameter!!! Luv, Andrea ps. I studied up on all those wildflowers in that poem of mine. I wanted it to be like a mini encycolpedia on wildflowers. Some of them, I had no clue what I was really talking about. haha
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Date: 1/31/2010 7:21:00 AM
Interesting way to describe the Haitian situation. Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara
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Date: 1/31/2010 6:00:00 AM
Excellent presentation of what is happening there . Let's hope that the aid , which is generously given , ends up with those who need it most , and NOT lost in admin and other unnecessarily expensive expenses ...
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