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Haiku About A Star

shooting star lost in immense distance a short lived wish

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 3/6/2017 1:11:00 PM
Hello Charmaine. Truly a 7. I see everything being right within the entry. The form is true as are the voice and tone. The theme is tops with me and you give the reader imagery. Well done
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Date: 2/13/2017 1:32:00 PM
Shooting star, lives so short, but burns so bright. Is it sad, or something to be happy about? I am never sure, I always wonder...
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Date: 2/12/2017 6:46:00 PM
oh I love this, Charma. Great haiku writing from you.
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Date: 2/8/2017 5:14:00 PM
I love the deliberate contrast in this wonderful Haiku Charmaine! Stunning imagery! : ) 7
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Date: 2/7/2017 7:30:00 AM
Love this haiku, Charmaine, it presents a meaningful yet bittersweet image.
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Date: 2/4/2017 3:01:00 PM
This is very good, Charm! Most striking is the balancing of immense distance and short lived wish. Regards // paul
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Date: 2/4/2017 2:37:00 PM
What a powerful analogy, comparing the "short-lived wish" to a "shooting star." Sometimes we wonder were those wishes went. Perhaps they are "lost in immense distance." BEAUTIFUL! Sending love to you.
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Date: 2/3/2017 9:28:00 PM
A poetic Star writing about a Star! :)
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Date: 2/3/2017 5:40:00 PM
A beautiful poem!
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Date: 2/3/2017 3:00:00 PM
Personally, I think this is brilliant, Charmaine. So much realistic truth!
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Date: 2/3/2017 2:06:00 PM
a short lived wish is better than no wish at all...terrific haiku Charma
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Date: 2/3/2017 1:44:00 PM
Distance is not what it used to be, but a shooting star will always be magical, no matter how far away is the star or what you wished for. Loved this little poem Charmaine. I hope your wish comes true.
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