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Haiku About a Star

shooting star lost in immense distance a short lived wish

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Lisa Ricci

Date: 3/6/2017 1:11:00 PM

Hello Charmaine. Truly a 7. I see everything being right within the entry. The form is true as are the voice and tone. The theme is tops with me and you give the reader imagery. Well done

Darren White

Date: 2/13/2017 1:32:00 PM

Shooting star, lives so short, but burns so bright. Is it sad, or something to be happy about? I am never sure, I always wonder...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/12/2017 6:46:00 PM

oh I love this, Charma. Great haiku writing from you.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 2/8/2017 5:14:00 PM

I love the deliberate contrast in this wonderful Haiku Charmaine! Stunning imagery! : ) 7

Becca Teagan

Date: 2/7/2017 7:30:00 AM

Love this haiku, Charmaine, it presents a meaningful yet bittersweet image.

Paul Callus

Date: 2/4/2017 3:01:00 PM

This is very good, Charm! Most striking is the balancing of immense distance and short lived wish. Regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/4/2017 2:37:00 PM

What a powerful analogy, comparing the "short-lived wish" to a "shooting star." Sometimes we wonder were those wishes went. Perhaps they are "lost in immense distance." BEAUTIFUL! Sending love to you.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 2/3/2017 9:28:00 PM

A poetic Star writing about a Star! :)

White Wolf

Date: 2/3/2017 5:40:00 PM

A beautiful poem!

Daniel Turner

Date: 2/3/2017 3:00:00 PM

Personally, I think this is brilliant, Charmaine. So much realistic truth!

Tim Smith

Date: 2/3/2017 2:06:00 PM

a short lived wish is better than no wish at all...terrific haiku Charma

Chris Green

Date: 2/3/2017 1:44:00 PM

Distance is not what it used to be, but a shooting star will always be magical, no matter how far away is the star or what you wished for. Loved this little poem Charmaine. I hope your wish comes true.