Haiku 7

barefoot I walk upon the hard cold concrete -- above me clouds

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Jack Ellison

Date: 9/1/2012 5:33:00 AM

Nice little haiku, Debbie! Your three short lines speak volumes! Lots of love, Jack

Kash Poet

Date: 8/31/2012 11:50:00 PM

Interesting haiku..Concrete surface made by man OR A man's body seems to be concrete....

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 9/1/2012 6:27:00 AM

since in all haiku [but modern most specifically the bulk of the poem is in the readers mind...you may see..feell hear what you will, in modern haiku the subjective is alluded to too and attempts are made to use IMPLIED metaphor & simile..so BOTH Kash

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/31/2012 11:40:00 AM

I really like the contrast of this haiku, Debs. Very modern.

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 8/31/2012 11:43:00 AM

yup modern not traditional ;)

Debra Squyres

Date: 8/30/2012 9:41:00 PM

Good one Debbie...I see it !!

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 8/30/2012 7:03:00 PM

Yes, you are right about the little surprise. Your haiku above is the perfect example. I love it...I made some changes to my autumn haiku. I was thinking too much about the contest and not enough about the haiku form. I think they're better. Thanks so much, Debbie! Hugs, Rhonda

Cindy Cayton

Date: 8/30/2012 6:09:00 PM

simpcity yet deeply moving in such an eloquent way, I so enjoyed your Haiku, Much Love, Cindy