Haiku

flies trapped
inside rice jar
I ask him to leave
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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May 21, 2016 at 10:24 AM
Alvin, well penned. Enjoyed reading your thoughts and words today. *SKAT*
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January 26, 2012 at 12:31 AM
Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. Nice short write.
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January 24, 2012 at 8:52 AM
Congratulations on your featured poem this week Alvin. Love, Carol
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November 14, 2011 at 2:39 PM
Hi Alvin; this is a nice moment. It's a little short for me, though. And I wonder about L3 'him'? Since in L1 you have 'flies', plural, should L3 read 'I ask them to leave'? Again, it's a nice moment. Thanks, Jim
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