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Haiku 17

The moving water Cool flowing reflection moves Blocked by beaver dam Russell Sivey

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Date: 9/16/2011 5:45:00 PM
smile...rule #3 LOL BIG CAPITALS....[Deb's pretending she didn't see them!] ahhhhhhhhh line 1 GOOD [not sure why you need or want warm?] NOW line 2 you must not use dancing because its personification not used in haiku plus..saying flowing is's what it really is doing...line 3 ..dam is a good idea..maybe beacer dam? tweak it again I come back later/I'll try! light & love
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Date: 9/16/2011 12:09:00 PM
NIce one, Russell and thanks always for your sweet comments.
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