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Haiku - Into the Blue

in the deep blue the boat lay tilted to one side- rainbow fish explore _________________________ February 11, 2016 Poetry/Haiku/into the blue Copyright Protected, ID 16-7558-47-0 All Rights Reserved. Written Under Pseudonym. Submitted in the contest Haiku 102, sponsor, Nathan D 8th Place

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Steve Grammatico

Date: 2/19/2016 6:06:00 AM

"Rainbow fish"--what an image that conjures up. Well done, Broken Wings.

Constance La France
Date: 2/19/2016 9:25:00 AM

Steve, thanks for visiting and for the compliment !

Timothy Hicks

Date: 2/18/2016 8:01:00 PM

I haven't read this one ... congrats on your win! I really love your last line, but I'm curious ... did you have those glowing rainbow fish in mind when you wrote it? They are the most unique looking creatures I've ever seen and can only be found in Mariana's Trench. If you do a google search, I think you can find them ... they look like a combination of a robot and a fish! Anyway ... I'll stop rambling. Good haiku!

Constance La France
Date: 2/19/2016 2:51:00 AM

Tim, thanks for visiting and the congrats and the love, appreciate, I was inspired by a documentary on the television of a shipwreck that had these rainbow fish exploring, I did not know where they came from thanks for letting me know, I am going to go have a look at that...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/18/2016 7:42:00 PM

very nicely done, Constance. BIG congrats to you.

Constance La France
Date: 2/19/2016 2:52:00 AM

Andrea, thanks for the congratulations, so appreciated !

Eve Roper

Date: 2/17/2016 1:35:00 PM

Broken Wing,congratulations on your win!!!! Hugs Eve

Constance La France
Date: 2/17/2016 2:56:00 PM

Eve, thanks for the congratulations and the hugs !

Sandra Haight

Date: 2/17/2016 7:36:00 AM

BW, congratulations on your nice win, for your outstanding Haiku! Hugs, Sandra

Constance La France
Date: 2/17/2016 9:28:00 AM

Sandra, thanks for the congratulations and the outstanding and hugs !

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 2/16/2016 10:52:00 PM

Congrats on ur great win with this awesome haiku Broken.

Constance La France
Date: 2/17/2016 1:28:00 AM

Upma, thanks for the congrats and the awesome, grateful .

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/16/2016 5:33:00 PM

Awesome work !! No wonder it is in the winners’ list. Congrats..Sara

Constance La France
Date: 2/17/2016 1:29:00 AM

Sara, thanks for the awesome and the congrats ..

Jan Allison

Date: 2/16/2016 3:25:00 PM

love the twist in the final line congrats on your win Broken Wings :-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France
Date: 2/17/2016 1:30:00 AM

Jan thanks for the congrats and the hugs :-) xx

Paul Callus

Date: 2/16/2016 1:19:00 PM

Clever how you noticed that "rainbow fish explore" amongst all those waves, Constance! Congrats on your fine win. Regards // paul

Constance La France
Date: 2/17/2016 1:31:00 AM

Paul, thanks for the clever and the congrats, yes, I imagined that beneath all that turning waves above there was peace below //

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 2/16/2016 12:57:00 PM

Congrats...I never would have thought of fish...good for you. BG

Constance La France
Date: 2/17/2016 1:33:00 AM

Barbara, thanks for the congrats, I got the idea from watched documentaries of ship wrecks below the sea ...

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/16/2016 12:32:00 PM

nice win. LINDA

Constance La France
Date: 2/17/2016 1:33:00 AM

thanks for the nice.

Nathan D.

Date: 2/16/2016 12:01:00 PM

Thanks Nate'

Constance La France
Date: 2/17/2016 1:34:00 AM

Thanks for the placement'

White Sage

Date: 2/13/2016 8:23:00 AM

though wrecked the ship may be, but floating around it are rainbow fishes, that's a beautiful view, nice haiku there BW

Constance La France
Date: 2/13/2016 4:58:00 PM

Sage, thanks for the beautiful and the compliment !

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/13/2016 1:24:00 AM

Thanks for the reply. Pd

James Inman

Date: 2/12/2016 7:51:00 PM

Beautiful imagery, BW.

Constance La France
Date: 2/13/2016 12:33:00 AM

James, thanks for visiting with the beautiful...

Nette Onclaud

Date: 2/11/2016 11:42:00 PM

enjoyed the stirring pivot of your end line...suspense overtakes me, constance,,huggs

Constance La France
Date: 2/13/2016 12:36:00 AM

nette, thanks for visiting with that nice comment and hugs, appreciate ~

Arthur Vaso

Date: 2/11/2016 10:18:00 PM

What an ominous write, gave me shivers! :)

Constance La France
Date: 2/13/2016 12:37:00 AM

Arthur, thanks for visiting, I like those words ominous and shivers !

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/11/2016 10:02:00 PM

The best of luck Broken... Hope Nathan likes this one. LINDA

Constance La France
Date: 2/13/2016 12:38:00 AM

Linda, thanks for the encouragement and I hope he likes it too !

James Marshall Goff

Date: 2/11/2016 9:30:00 PM

I meant line 3!

James Marshall Goff

Date: 2/11/2016 9:29:00 PM

Line 4 twist mind-boggling good# Constance!

Constance La France
Date: 2/13/2016 12:40:00 AM

James, thanks for visiting, I like that phrase mind-boggling good, appreciate so much ~