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Guilty, Sir- Contest

A beautifully perfect July sky, exploding in holiday brilliance, held its collective breath as I carefully secured my bottle rocket for lift off. At that precise moment, Ms. Filipski decided to violate my airspace and with pinpoint accuracy, I scored a direct hit from two backyards away. A certain sense of pride in this accomplishment was bound to complicated my guilt. Father, just emerging from our back door onto my launch pad, bellowing "noooooooo" in full stride, ran immediately to the site of impact. My relationship with Ms Filipski and the significance of the Fourth of July were, then and there, inexcusable altered forever. I have yet to see another " rocket's red glare" absent a wry smile. 03/16/2016

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/20/2016 2:42:00 PM

What an interesting way you chose to do this theme. I really enjoyed this story from your life. Was the challenge to do it in four lines each part? The top one is short a line if that is the case. (I can't remember now the rules(

Charlie Smith
Date: 3/20/2016 3:27:00 PM

I think you're right about four lines. When I first typed it out on Word it had 4 lines. I, of course, didn't paste it on PS, I re-typed it and now it's three. Oh well...such is life. It was fun anyway. I hope you enjoyed it.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/19/2016 8:25:00 AM

A devilishly fun write! I truly enjoyed this one.

Charlie Smith
Date: 3/19/2016 12:10:00 PM

I am so glad you did Richard, that was my goal. Thank you...

Bl Devnath

Date: 3/17/2016 4:42:00 PM

Enjoyable piece of writing on generosity, i feel. Beautifully done. Good luck, bl

Charlie Smith
Date: 3/17/2016 4:49:00 PM

Thank You BL...

Constance La France

Date: 3/17/2016 1:49:00 AM

Charlie, this was fun to read, I like the part about father bellowing "noooooooo" in full stride, ran immediately to the site of impact, that is so like a father, good write and I like it 7 ~

Charlie Smith
Date: 3/17/2016 6:31:00 AM

You are so generous with your encouragement BW, I love your comments. Thank you!

Paul Callus

Date: 3/16/2016 5:50:00 PM

This makes for a very entertaining write, Charlie! Well done:) ~ Regards // paul

Charlie Smith
Date: 3/16/2016 5:55:00 PM

It accomplished it's only purpose. Thanks Paul, let's chat again...

Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/16/2016 4:53:00 PM

Maybe she should also write a formal apology for getting in your way ... haha. Great entry for the contest ... is the "rockets red glare" a blush of anger or embarrassment? Could go either way, depending on how you look at it.

Charlie Smith
Date: 3/16/2016 5:34:00 PM

She had some filthy nerve! A lot funnier now than then...

Tim Smith

Date: 3/16/2016 1:49:00 PM

What was she thinking invading your airspace?...W used to shoot them out of or handle bars on bikes. One hit me right above the eye. Couldn't see for about three days.

Charlie Smith
Date: 3/16/2016 2:06:00 PM

You knowwww, they'll put your eye out. Thanks for the tip, sounds like fun.