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August 23, 2023 ~ G or T Personification Contest

              Sponsored by Joseph May

I heard screams from those marked for a guillotine death No compromises for their cries before taking a last breath Words of repentance for dastardly crimes were bemoaned Begging for mercy with fear and tears, curses were groaned My blade is always kept whetted for those who regretted and my cutthroat job is thought to be brutally inhumane "Oh, please!" I wanted to shout at the louts who fretted, "For only the briefest moment will I cause you any pain!" In modern days I would be aptly labeled a "French Press." Humorous, the thought, but I'd still create a bloody mess Hence, never should I ever be used inside of an abattoir Before I take a life, I always remember to say, "Au revoir." I abhor the taste of blood in my mouth and on my teeth Love to be cleaned before my blades are again in sheath When my deadly decapitation chore is over and complete heads I felled roll to lie supine at the executioner's feet People then clear the scene, to flee from me, the guillotine As if what they'd witnessed me do would wash them clean Maybe it was the act of my beheading they were dreading Hoping tomorrow it wouldn't be theirs that I'd be shredding

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Date: 9/1/2023 11:49:00 PM
You executed this write well Lin, Congrats on your win
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Date: 8/23/2023 7:18:00 PM
Well, you certainly took me back to the final chapters of 'A Tale of Two Cities!' ~ Sidney Carton
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Lin Lane
Date: 8/24/2023 2:52:00 AM
Ending this one on the worst of times for those were to die by beheading. Thanks for reading and leaving a comment, GW.
Date: 8/23/2023 2:04:00 PM
A dark choice from you Lin, which makes this one all the better, on the surface the guillotine spectre does seem inhumane, probably the psychological effect of what’s going to happen is the worse part, but I’m pretty certain their is no physical pain, a fine personification and poem, great one for the contest, (I wonder if Putin could be passed through incrementally feet first) cheers David
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Lin Lane
Date: 8/23/2023 2:36:00 PM
Lol David. An inch at a time starting with his toes until he bleeds to death or until he screams for mercy when the blade reaches his “ahem” area. That’s the moment the whetted blade is exchanged for a rusty one and the guillotine saws instead of slicing. Thanks for your encouragement.
Date: 8/23/2023 1:56:00 PM
Lin, your use of words and language in this poem are fantastic. "Whetted" and "regretted"; "abbitoir" and "au revoir", plus so many more. Really a beautiful poem for such an ugly chore. I'd gladly have given my head to have written this one lolol. Thanks and hugs
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Lin Lane
Date: 8/24/2023 2:54:00 AM
Maybe a wee bit of a trim?
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Jeff Connelly
Date: 8/23/2023 6:49:00 PM
Thanks Lin, but I have shoulder length hair, and a long beard; so I could do with a shave... Though not much on my topnotch... Hmmm...
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Lin Lane
Date: 8/23/2023 2:28:00 PM
I’ll sign over the writer-ship deed to you, Jeff but that blade will not shave a hair from your neck. Thanks so much for the many complimentary comments.
Date: 8/23/2023 12:50:00 PM
Quite a gruesome machine Lin, you gave it life with your words. I can name a few candidates for you lol. Tom
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Lin Lane
Date: 8/23/2023 2:23:00 PM
I’m quite sure my list and yours would be identical. Thank you, Tom for liking it personified.
Date: 8/23/2023 11:45:00 AM
My friend very fine poetry on such a ghastly subject. The French gave us the quillotine and french fries. No ketchup please. God bless...
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Robert Lindley
Date: 8/23/2023 12:38:00 PM
HAHA. YES MA'AM QUITE A LONG STRETCH. But you came up with a gem by switching. God bless.
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Lin Lane
Date: 8/23/2023 12:24:00 PM
Garlic butter or ranch dressing, Robert. Try either one if ketchup is too acidic for your taste. I went from writing ‘Beautiful’ to ‘Guillotine.’ That’s quite a stretch when it comes to taking a different fork in a road. I hope you enjoyed both paths. Thank you.
Date: 8/23/2023 10:04:00 AM
A wonderful write/picture. I enjoyed it. Bet it was hard to watch. Have a great day.............
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Lin Lane
Date: 8/23/2023 10:49:00 AM
Thanks for letting me know you enjoyed it, Paula.
Date: 8/23/2023 9:54:00 AM
Well done, Lin. An excellent Personification poem. I liked the humor in it also. Have a guillotine free day! :-) Bill
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Lin Lane
Date: 8/23/2023 10:49:00 AM
I’ll be sure not to stick my neck out for anything today. Thanks for your review, Bill!

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