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Good Old Blue

This story is dedicated to good old blue A 1984 Chev truck, once shiny and new Now in the weeds, covered by morning dew Held together mostly with duct tape glue Poor, poor old blue, how did this happen to you? You've been a good friend tried and true We have had fun times and worked hard too To see you like this makes me cry , boo hoo Never referred to as a tire, but always a shoe Your parts I thought to be lifeless , were seemingly few You became part human from my point of view On the question of my sanity, some often chew If I had a wand, I'd make you anew And this journey again, we would renew How to do that I haven't a clue But if I could I would eagerly do Every scratch and dent I would undo And give you an all over good shampoo All these new trucks, you'd far outdo And we would cruise down the main avenue But you're old and tired...and I bid you ado I hope in truck heaven you find quite a crew A bigger heart, no truck ever grew Than my old Chev truck, good old blue ©Donna Jones

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Date: 3/26/2013 3:35:00 AM
Smashing good!
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Donna Jones
Date: 3/26/2013 7:25:00 AM
Weird for a girl to love a truck?????
Date: 3/12/2013 4:41:00 PM
Very nice Monorhyme, Donna! Not an easy form. BTW, it is one of the listed forms and might be more appropriate than a Quatrain for this poem. Cheers, Roy
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Donna Jones
Date: 3/12/2013 5:31:00 PM
Thanks Roy... and I took your advise and changed it.:-)
Date: 3/7/2013 10:04:00 PM
Fabulous flow, and mono-rhyming! To sustain the 'oo' sound through six four-line verses ain't easy. I think we all form an attachment to a particular vehicle... Adieu Old Blue! Best wishes, Keith
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Donna Jones
Date: 3/8/2013 6:56:00 AM
Appreciate that Keith...I still miss blue..especially the Tommy lift tailgate...wouldn't fit my new truck....blessings...Donna
Date: 3/6/2013 3:28:00 PM
Perfectly magnificent ode to something precious in memory. Reminds me of an old Avery tractor and a 1940 Ford stake bed truck on a tomato farm in Texas.... Great write, sweetheart..... Jake
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Donna Jones
Date: 3/6/2013 4:55:00 PM
Such a sweet old truck, do you name your vehicles?
Date: 3/5/2013 8:08:00 PM
wonderful write Donna.....true blue
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Donna Jones
Date: 3/5/2013 8:59:00 PM
Thanks Joseph....:-) :-) good truck!!
Date: 3/5/2013 6:14:00 AM
Absolutely delightful! Your story telling is a delightful mix of humour and pathos! Inanimate objects can have a life of their own... SWEET! Love and big whopping hugs, Jack xox
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Donna Jones
Date: 3/5/2013 10:35:00 AM
Thanks Jack..I do swear..blue would run without gas, oil, transmission fluid, a battery or whatever...for me....until he just couldn't anymore...he loved me!!!!! I kept him clean even when he got old and ugly...poor old-blue, I shall cry again...
Date: 3/1/2013 4:45:00 PM
I had a blue 86 Chevy...I really miss that truck. Great topic and well done poem!
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Donna Jones
Date: 3/1/2013 6:16:00 PM
Well strange to some but lots of memories and reliable old trucks mean a lot when you live and work in the country and want to go fishing down on the river! Thanks for writing
Date: 3/1/2013 5:58:00 AM
love these personified poems, especially this wonder, shows so much about the poet, one who cares111
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Donna Jones
Date: 3/1/2013 9:22:00 AM
You're a dear to understand Harry......I appreciate everything I have been blessed with...old or new...thanks for stopping by...
Date: 2/28/2013 9:30:00 PM
I had a 1999 van that was eventually repossessed by the bank. I said "good riddance". It seemed I was only working to pay a mechanic to fix that thing. Your poem is a good write. I'm sure you got more mileage out of your truck than I got out of my van.
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Donna Jones
Date: 2/28/2013 9:39:00 PM
No joke Robert...this truck would run for me with no gas or oil. Ran on pure heart I believe...I loved this truck and took good care it. It had almost 300,000 miles on it when we parked it . Sorry about your van.thanks for stopping to read
Date: 2/28/2013 9:07:00 PM
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Donna Jones
Date: 2/28/2013 9:39:00 PM
:-) :-) :-)
Date: 2/28/2013 6:55:00 PM
Aw...Boo hoo. Poor old blue...I can say this is the first poem that I have read with such love for a truck. :o) I love it! And I would also like to thank you for all your encouraging comments on my poetry.I don't get to read as often as I write.But when I take the time,or see you have stopped by.I will take the time and stop on by. :o)
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Dan Kearley
Date: 2/28/2013 9:20:00 PM
Ha,ha...Gotta love them good ole' country girls. :o)
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Donna Jones
Date: 2/28/2013 7:15:00 PM
Well for a country girl a truck is everything!!!!! Thanks for stopping by...:-) :-) :-) :-) :-)
Date: 2/28/2013 5:20:00 PM
Good Old Blue has left his heart with you! Yes, we get sentimentally involved with our cars sometimes! Beautifully written! I think GOB is happy in heaven of cars because of your lovely poem!
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Donna Jones
Date: 2/28/2013 5:41:00 PM
Thanks...Demetrios....a good old truck indeed :-)
Date: 2/28/2013 5:00:00 PM
Wow, you did very well with this incredible Monorhyme Quatrain my friend! You have enthralled me with the awesomeness of your old truck, one that we all can relate to at one point in our lives! I loved your amazing poem, very nicely put together and done! Great Work!!
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Donna Jones
Date: 2/28/2013 5:42:00 PM
Thanks Russell..:-) :-) :-) :-) he was the best
Date: 2/28/2013 4:51:00 PM
the spirit of a house or truck or a tool lives as long as we have faith or need. just look around and see.
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Donna Jones
Date: 2/28/2013 5:43:00 PM
This is true.....thanks

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