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she was a caterpillar, i her cocoon she was the music i her dance she was the rose i her thorns she was lost among the stars i showed her the moon i drifted like a tepid breeze but she was lost in the storm she was right i was not wrong she lit the fire i burned like hell

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Paul Callus

Date: 9/5/2020 3:58:00 AM

I like this....a balancing act, I would say! Regards // paul

Vickie Hurtt - Thayer

Date: 3/20/2019 7:54:00 AM

B E A U T I F U L... in so many ways. Vickie Thayer

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 12/31/2018 1:20:00 PM

Hi Silent One, May 2019 bring you peace, happiness and whatever you wish for. Went back on your page a bit - nicely penned. Wishes, health and light, Jennifer.

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 12/20/2018 5:40:00 PM

Yeah, I just love the presentation of this one - very matter-of-fact - and the multiple metaphors of the ways one human being can affect another. Very nicely done, my friend - fav-ing this one! Blessings and Merry Christmas, Silent One! :-)

Constance La France

Date: 12/8/2018 11:28:00 AM

Silent, oh yes beautiful, I fell into this poem like a dream, well done ~

Bobby May

Date: 11/27/2018 6:26:00 AM

Beautiful and touching!

Anisha Dutta

Date: 11/18/2018 10:50:00 AM

Another excellent composition. Love n Blessing.

Robert Lindley

Date: 11/18/2018 9:22:00 AM

Love is bliss, except when it turns bad, then it is worse that hellfire! Only you could write simple musings and gift such purity, truth and depth about love my friend! A fav.,..

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 11/5/2018 3:35:00 PM

She was ...you were...A masterpiece.

Meenakshi Raina

Date: 11/1/2018 11:15:00 PM

What an unexpected ending! Loved it !

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 10/25/2018 6:56:00 AM

I know the feeling, especially when she extinguished the fire...but I found a better fire place now and she is beautiful inside and out. What cooking good looking? True love...

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 10/25/2018 6:47:00 AM

Wow! Both the bonding and the duress!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/25/2018 1:53:00 AM

I loved the ending to this poem Silent. : )

Just James

Date: 10/24/2018 6:44:00 AM

Simple but well done! S1

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 10/24/2018 4:54:00 AM

You got so much fire inside of you when you write, smoking good S.O. keep them coming. I love to read them.

Holly Bohto

Date: 10/24/2018 3:12:00 AM

Wow, now the structure you used to fit this together....is...my kind of free verse...and the need for silence hurts my eyes to look at noise outside my mind. VERY COOL.

Carole Duet

Date: 10/24/2018 2:18:00 AM

Just incredible, ZZ. Your poetry always touches my soul and although this one is sad it is a FAV.

Elle Smith

Date: 10/24/2018 1:52:00 AM

Isn't it funny how LOVE often pulls us to the flame, and yet we crave this intensity!!! LOVED IT :)

M. L. Kiser

Date: 10/23/2018 5:44:00 PM

Whoops! Well, it happens...Nevertheless you've made a good poem out of the situation.

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 10/23/2018 2:54:00 PM

Was not expecting that! x!

Silent One
Date: 10/23/2018 3:30:00 PM

You never know what to expect in love... Thanks Mo..

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/23/2018 2:03:00 PM

"She" is always right :) - A super writing, S.O. - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Silent One
Date: 10/23/2018 3:31:00 PM

No one can always be right.... Thanks Anne-Lise..

Brandy Nicole

Date: 10/23/2018 1:55:00 PM

They say- Opposites attract. Yes, I find that to be true. However, not in all cases. This is beautiful and heartbreaking, all at the same time. Many blessings to you my friend. ~ Brandy

Silent One
Date: 10/23/2018 3:31:00 PM

Opposites do attract, such is the game of love... Thanks Brandy..