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she was a caterpillar, i her cocoon she was the music i her dance she was the rose i her thorns she was lost among the stars i showed her the moon i drifted like a tepid breeze but she was lost in the storm she was right i was not wrong she lit the fire i burnt like hell
Simple Musing Silent One 23 October 2018

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Date: 3/20/2019 7:54:00 AM
B E A U T I F U L... in so many ways. Vickie Thayer
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Date: 12/31/2018 1:20:00 PM
Hi Silent One, May 2019 bring you peace, happiness and whatever you wish for. Went back on your page a bit - nicely penned. Wishes, health and light, Jennifer.
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Date: 12/20/2018 5:40:00 PM
Yeah, I just love the presentation of this one - very matter-of-fact - and the multiple metaphors of the ways one human being can affect another. Very nicely done, my friend - fav-ing this one! Blessings and Merry Christmas, Silent One! :-)
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Date: 12/8/2018 11:28:00 AM
Silent, oh yes beautiful, I fell into this poem like a dream, well done ~
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Date: 11/27/2018 6:26:00 AM
Beautiful and touching!
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Date: 11/18/2018 10:50:00 AM
Another excellent composition. Love n Blessing.
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Date: 11/18/2018 9:22:00 AM
Love is bliss, except when it turns bad, then it is worse that hellfire! Only you could write simple musings and gift such purity, truth and depth about love my friend! A fav.,..
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Date: 11/5/2018 3:35:00 PM
She was ...you were...A masterpiece.
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Date: 11/1/2018 11:15:00 PM
What an unexpected ending! Loved it !
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Date: 10/25/2018 6:56:00 AM
I know the feeling, especially when she extinguished the fire...but I found a better fire place now and she is beautiful inside and out. What cooking good looking? True love...
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Date: 10/25/2018 6:47:00 AM
Wow! Both the bonding and the duress!
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Date: 10/25/2018 1:53:00 AM
I loved the ending to this poem Silent. : )
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Date: 10/24/2018 6:44:00 AM
Simple but well done! S1
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Date: 10/24/2018 4:54:00 AM
You got so much fire inside of you when you write, smoking good S.O. keep them coming. I love to read them.
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Date: 10/24/2018 3:12:00 AM
Wow, now the structure you used to fit this together....is...my kind of free verse...and the need for silence hurts my eyes to look at noise outside my mind. VERY COOL.
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Date: 10/24/2018 2:18:00 AM
Just incredible, ZZ. Your poetry always touches my soul and although this one is sad it is a FAV.
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Date: 10/24/2018 1:52:00 AM
Isn't it funny how LOVE often pulls us to the flame, and yet we crave this intensity!!! LOVED IT :)
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Date: 10/23/2018 5:44:00 PM
Whoops! Well, it happens...Nevertheless you've made a good poem out of the situation.
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Date: 10/23/2018 2:54:00 PM
Was not expecting that! x!
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Silent One
Date: 10/23/2018 3:30:00 PM
You never know what to expect in love... Thanks Mo..
Date: 10/23/2018 2:03:00 PM
"She" is always right :) - A super writing, S.O. - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Silent One
Date: 10/23/2018 3:31:00 PM
No one can always be right.... Thanks Anne-Lise..
Date: 10/23/2018 1:55:00 PM
They say- Opposites attract. Yes, I find that to be true. However, not in all cases. This is beautiful and heartbreaking, all at the same time. Many blessings to you my friend. ~ Brandy
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Silent One
Date: 10/23/2018 3:31:00 PM
Opposites do attract, such is the game of love... Thanks Brandy..
Date: 10/23/2018 12:39:00 PM
Poetic codependence !! Only you Silent One could express it so beautifully and with just a touch of lilting humor I loved it !!
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Silent One
Date: 10/23/2018 3:36:00 PM
Thanks Mike.. Interesting feedback..
Date: 10/23/2018 12:23:00 PM
wow so nice
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Silent One
Date: 10/23/2018 3:36:00 PM
Thanks..
Date: 10/23/2018 11:14:00 AM
Emotive contrasts of love and friction! Loved this! :)
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Silent One
Date: 10/23/2018 3:39:00 PM
Thank you Laura..
Date: 10/23/2018 10:29:00 AM
A powerful poem. Well done SO :)
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Silent One
Date: 10/23/2018 3:39:00 PM
Thank you Heidi..
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