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Gold Dance

wind blowing wheat ears dance and sway sea of gold

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Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/20/2025 7:20:00 AM

- A great haiku, AA :) - hugs

Abdullah Alhemaidy
Date: 2/20/2025 7:27:00 AM

Thank you very much! ~ AA hugs

Ink Empress

Date: 2/20/2025 4:00:00 AM

I love the last line the most “ sea of gold” how beautiful. Exquisite haiku. Pleasure reading. Sending you light always

Abdullah Alhemaidy
Date: 2/20/2025 7:14:00 AM

I am so glad to read your golden comment. Sending you light and respect lovely poetess Ink, have a wonderful day ~ AA

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/19/2025 1:13:00 PM

lovely picture. you don't have to worry about 5/7/5 in haiku, Abdullah. In modern haiku journals, they often use fewer syllables. I would only take out "the neat" I think "wheat ears dance and sway" is a lovely image on its own.

Abdullah Alhemaidy
Date: 2/19/2025 2:51:00 PM

I will try 3/5/3: "wind blowing wheat ears dance and sway sea of gold"