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Going, Going, Gone

I could kill you by overdose But then you’d become comatose What’s death without fear? Better to do it very slow A little poison in your Coke Watch you disappear 7/31/11 Received 6th place in "Any Twisted Poem" contest Received 8th place in "Tail-rhyme" contest

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/28/2011 8:09:00 AM

Dear Susan, I'm here to give all my old contest winners a late congratulations. Sorry, I forgot to leave everyone a thank you *comment* of appreciation~ I hope you don't mind my copy paste congratulations.. Don't worry I have read every entry more than 3 times. lol. or how else would have I closed it with out reading. Can you accept my apology and old congrats on your poem.. Honestly I don't like my contest winners with out a quick congrats,.. thank you,..p.d. the late bloomer

Margaret Foster

Date: 9/25/2011 10:03:00 PM

Doesn't leave a lot to the imagination Susan, the message comes across clearly. She? really means it.....Twisted or what..... congratulations luv Marg

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/24/2011 10:44:00 PM

ooooh, I loved this one the first time!! congrats to you. can't wait to see you back here tomorrow.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/24/2011 6:07:00 PM

Congrats Susan on another grand win with this dazzling delight of twisted poetry luv.. also..much success with your contest .. enjoy the process and the fun...too...

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/24/2011 5:41:00 PM

Congratulations on your win with your twisted poetry Susan. Love, Carol

Bob Quigley

Date: 9/24/2011 10:56:00 AM

Wow. Short and sweet. Liked this one. Congratulations Susan

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/24/2011 4:34:00 AM

Congratulations on the win in the contest of P.D., Susan

Dinda Minardi

Date: 9/7/2011 11:21:00 AM

Cool, I'll do the same to people I hate the most, but only in my mind, hahaha

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/11/2011 10:47:00 PM

I am stopping by this evening to thank you for your kind comments while the soup is up and running. I will never get caught up oh well that's life right? Turn off the tension. Have a wonderful evening Susan. Love, Carol

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/8/2011 4:36:00 PM

Congratulations on your placement in Dr. Ram Mehta's "Tail-Rhyme" contest Susan. Love, Carol

Jack Horne

Date: 8/7/2011 11:04:00 AM

Quick congrats before I get logged out again!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/7/2011 6:47:00 AM

amazing concept, susan..a joy to read with matching congrats on your glowing win! :) huggs

Kash Poet

Date: 8/7/2011 5:23:00 AM

Dangerously beautiful!!!LOL!Congrats on your win.

Jun-Jun Villanueva

Date: 8/6/2011 9:45:00 AM

CONGRATULATIONS with this fine triumphant placement~~~~~smile~~~~~*-*junjun

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/5/2011 9:17:00 PM

This was one of my faves in this contest. Now I can see you are on the list. Congratulations, Susan.

Joyce Johnson

Date: 8/5/2011 9:07:00 PM

I will try to keep on your good side. Great win,Susan.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/5/2011 7:02:00 PM

Congrats Susan on your exciting win for this expressive entry ..using new form so well luv..

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/5/2011 5:13:00 PM

Congratulations on the win in my contest, Susan

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 8/3/2011 8:33:00 PM

You are a lethal little girl! Love the idea, could put it to use.

Judy Ball

Date: 8/3/2011 3:36:00 PM

I can feeeeeel your pain. (smile) Very good one here my friend. Good emotion. I'm sure many can relate. I can ;) God Bless, JB

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 8/2/2011 7:25:00 PM

oh my that sounds close to done.... I see evil peeking out behind your poems...hehe

Constance La France

Date: 8/2/2011 3:01:00 PM

Ouch, I want to be your friend, never your enemy, and if you offer Coke, I will respectly decline , just wonderful Susan, best of luck with this awesome poem and thanks for your comments on my poetry~~

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/2/2011 1:24:00 PM

Anyone close to you or you watching too many Snapped episodes from TV?...Cute..Reads like a winner..Good luck in Dr. Ram's contest..Thanks for the kind review of my work..I got a chuckle at your comment...Sara

Lisa Cooper

Date: 8/2/2011 12:18:00 PM

lol great write this reads like a winner to me

Jack Horne

Date: 8/2/2011 9:45:00 AM

LOL, thanks for a good chuckle, Susan. This is sure to make Dr Ram laugh