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Going, Going, Gone

I could kill you by overdose
But then you’d become comatose
What’s death without fear?

Better to do it very slow
A little poison in your Coke
Watch you disappear


7/31/11

Received 6th place in "Any Twisted Poem" contest
Received 8th place in "Tail-rhyme" contest

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Poet Destroyer A

September 28, 2011 at 8:09 AM

Dear Susan, I'm here to give all my old contest winners a late congratulations. Sorry, I forgot to leave everyone a thank you *comment* of appreciation~ I hope you don't mind my copy paste congratulations.. Don't worry I have read every entry more than 3 times. lol. or how else would have I closed it with out reading. Can you accept my apology and old congrats on your poem.. Honestly I don't like my contest winners with out a quick congrats,.. thank you,..p.d. the late bloomer

Margaret Foster

September 25, 2011 at 10:03 PM

Doesn't leave a lot to the imagination Susan, the message comes across clearly. She? really means it.....Twisted or what..... congratulations luv Marg

Andrea Dietrich

September 24, 2011 at 10:44 PM

ooooh, I loved this one the first time!! congrats to you. can't wait to see you back here tomorrow.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

September 24, 2011 at 6:07 PM

Congrats Susan on another grand win with this dazzling delight of twisted poetry luv.. also..much success with your contest .. enjoy the process and the fun...too...

Carol Sunshine Brown

September 24, 2011 at 5:41 PM

Congratulations on your win with your twisted poetry Susan. Love, Carol

Bob Quigley

September 24, 2011 at 10:56 AM

Wow. Short and sweet. Liked this one. Congratulations Susan

Dr.Ram Mehta

September 24, 2011 at 4:34 AM

Congratulations on the win in the contest of P.D., Susan

Dinda Minardi

September 7, 2011 at 11:21 AM

Cool, I'll do the same to people I hate the most, but only in my mind, hahaha

Carol Sunshine Brown

August 11, 2011 at 10:47 PM

I am stopping by this evening to thank you for your kind comments while the soup is up and running. I will never get caught up oh well that's life right? Turn off the tension. Have a wonderful evening Susan. Love, Carol

Carol Sunshine Brown

August 8, 2011 at 4:36 PM

Congratulations on your placement in Dr. Ram Mehta's "Tail-Rhyme" contest Susan. Love, Carol

Jack Horne

August 7, 2011 at 11:04 AM

Quick congrats before I get logged out again!

Nette Onclaud

August 7, 2011 at 6:47 AM

amazing concept, susan..a joy to read with matching congrats on your glowing win! :) huggs

Kash Poet

August 7, 2011 at 5:23 AM

Dangerously beautiful!!!LOL!Congrats on your win.

Jun-Jun Villanueva

August 6, 2011 at 9:45 AM

CONGRATULATIONS with this fine triumphant placement~~~~~smile~~~~~*-*junjun

Andrea Dietrich

August 5, 2011 at 9:17 PM

This was one of my faves in this contest. Now I can see you are on the list. Congratulations, Susan.

Joyce Johnson

August 5, 2011 at 9:07 PM

I will try to keep on your good side. Great win,Susan.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

August 5, 2011 at 7:02 PM

Congrats Susan on your exciting win for this expressive entry ..using new form so well luv..

Dr.Ram Mehta

August 5, 2011 at 5:13 PM

Congratulations on the win in my contest, Susan

Elizabeth Wesley

August 3, 2011 at 8:33 PM

You are a lethal little girl! Love the idea, could put it to use.

Judy Ball

August 3, 2011 at 3:36 PM

I can feeeeeel your pain. (smile) Very good one here my friend. Good emotion. I'm sure many can relate. I can ;) God Bless, JB

Doris Culverhouse

August 2, 2011 at 7:25 PM

oh my that sounds close to done.... I see evil peeking out behind your poems...hehe

Constance La France

August 2, 2011 at 3:01 PM

Ouch, I want to be your friend, never your enemy, and if you offer Coke, I will respectly decline , just wonderful Susan, best of luck with this awesome poem and thanks for your comments on my poetry~~

Sara Kendrick

August 2, 2011 at 1:24 PM

Anyone close to you or you watching too many Snapped episodes from TV?...Cute..Reads like a winner..Good luck in Dr. Ram's contest..Thanks for the kind review of my work..I got a chuckle at your comment...Sara