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Go Ask Alice

With enlightenment, not inhalation, drawn from Jefferson Airplane's (Starship?) 'White Rabbit.' (written by Grace Slick) A Monotetra ~ Don't be drawn into that fairytale with the Cheshire Cat's grin and tail He'll lure you in and leave you frail To weep and wail To weep and wail If you're in the Red Queen's palace Don't sip wine from her gold chalice Her evil thoughts reek of malice Go ask Alice Go ask Alice You look weak; skin sallow and pall Your White Knight's steed is in a stall Alice won't save you when you fall She's ten feet tall She's ten feet tall Don't chase white rabbits down a hole Deep descent will devour your soul It's time to wake and take control Don't pay the toll Don't pay the toll

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Date: 9/5/2020 4:28:00 AM
Alice in wonderland nicely done, I like the you use rhyme and metaphor.
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Date: 6/9/2020 3:28:00 PM
Here is an older one of yours I had not seen before. It's very clever, Lin. Thanks for the recent visit . Good to see you!!
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Date: 2/9/2020 9:04:00 AM
"The ones that mommy gives you don't do anything at all" Lin, you never cease to amaze me. This was a really fun read.
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Date: 1/24/2020 8:42:00 AM
Wow! A fave!
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Date: 1/24/2020 8:47:00 AM
Thank you, Kim. I appreciate your time for reading and leaving a comment.
Date: 1/22/2020 7:06:00 PM
Ha, ha! Alice in Wonderland is a great read; you've just transformed it into a great poetic write as well! Thanks, Lin. Enjoyed! ~ Gershon
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Date: 1/22/2020 7:32:00 PM
Thank you, Gershon. I have a follow-up to this one which serves as a more severe warning about the repercussions of falling down the rabbit hole. I think I'll post it tomorrow.
Date: 1/18/2020 9:52:00 AM
Wowzer! Exceptional poetry. This one drew me in from start to finish. You rock Lin Lane. Hugs Rick.
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Date: 1/22/2020 6:18:00 AM
Thanks for such great remarks, Rick.
Date: 1/15/2020 6:41:00 PM
Oh, Gosh my favorite of all time. Got to Meet Grace at a small party in SF in the 70's. Great monorhyme. Panagiota xx
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Date: 1/22/2020 6:18:00 AM
What a great experience that must've been. Thanks for reading.
Date: 1/15/2020 5:36:00 AM
Great piece, well penned to the lyrics; enjoyed.
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Date: 1/22/2020 6:17:00 AM
Thanks for liking this one.
Date: 1/13/2020 9:49:00 AM
Lin, Always liked that Grace. And now your Alice in tetrameter. What a story in this poem 'Go Ask Alice'. Both Grace & Lewis would approve, I think. -Richard
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Date: 1/14/2020 6:50:00 AM
Thank you ever so kindly, Richard. I think I agree with you as long as neither accuse me of stealing their vibe.
Date: 1/12/2020 7:53:00 PM
OOOH I like this one Lin...indeed edgy is the right word, has a poe-like feel. Reminds me of a guy I used to work with 40 odd years ago would come to work tripping on LSD he talked like this, brings back flashbacks (enlightenment not inhalation Ha)
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Date: 1/12/2020 8:04:00 PM
Thanks for picking up on the inhalation comment, John. Lol. I heard the song this morning and the line - go ask Alice stayed with me, and the 4 syllables are perfect for this form. I appreciate the great comments.
Date: 1/12/2020 2:09:00 PM
A lovely dark poem Lin, much enjoyed. :)
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Date: 1/12/2020 4:48:00 PM
Thank you, Gary. I'm glad you liked it.
Date: 1/12/2020 1:11:00 PM
Deep dark and quite disturbing imagery Lin, I am not au fait with the song but know Alice in Wonderland and that story is quite bizarre like the writer was stoned at the time:-( hugs jan xx
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Date: 1/12/2020 1:12:00 PM
Your perception of being stoned is right on target, Jan. The song was based on the Alice in Wonderland idea...Bizarre? Yes. Thanks for the apropos comments.
Date: 1/12/2020 12:46:00 PM
I remember the song well having grown up in that era. I was always part of the conservative crowd so I always found that song a bit edgy as well. You have carried that feeling well throughout this poem. Nicely done. Hugs, John
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Date: 1/12/2020 12:52:00 PM
Hi, John. I was naïve about the truth of this song and the comparison to life that it held. Life and those you love are eye openers into its depth. Thank you for understanding the purpose of this write.
Date: 1/12/2020 12:41:00 PM
Oh, yes, Dear Friend, I like this one a lot ... hemmed with shadowy inference and connotation, with the Lewis Carroll and Starship flavors! Nicely done - love the rhythm and repeated lines, too, they add to the tension and darkness ... my kind of stuff. Fave-ing! :o) <3
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Date: 1/12/2020 12:49:00 PM
Those who allow their addiction to possess them have created ragged hems. I lived with one who was lost in the darkness of a hole, and despite efforts to pull him up out of it, I failed. Thanks for understanding my meaning, and for leaving your thoughts, Greg.
Date: 1/12/2020 10:18:00 AM
Oooh this is sinister Lin in the way Alice in Wonderland has that slightly disturbing edge! Love your little chants at the end of each stanza. Goosebumps!
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Date: 1/12/2020 12:36:00 PM
I appreciate your insight as to the reality of my meaning, Nina. "Edgy" is a great descriptive word for what lies behind my verses and the song lyrics. Thanks so much for leaving your comments.