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Go Ask Alice

With enlightenment, not inhalation, drawn from Jefferson Airplane's (Starship?) 'White Rabbit.' (written by Grace Slick) A Monotetra ~ Don't be drawn into that fairytale with the Cheshire Cat's grin and tail He'll lure you in and leave you frail To weep and wail To weep and wail If you're in the Red Queen's palace Don't sip wine from her gold chalice Her evil thoughts reek of malice Go ask Alice Go ask Alice You look weak, skin sallow and pall Your White Knight's steed is in a stall Alice won't save you when you fall She's ten feet tall She's ten feet tall Don't chase white rabbits down a hole Deep descent will devour your soul It's time to wake and take control Don't pay the toll Don't pay the toll

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Robert Kinard

Date: 9/5/2020 4:28:00 AM

Alice in wonderland nicely done, I like the you use rhyme and metaphor.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/9/2020 3:28:00 PM

Here is an older one of yours I had not seen before. It's very clever, Lin. Thanks for the recent visit . Good to see you!!

Daniel Turner

Date: 2/9/2020 9:04:00 AM

"The ones that mommy gives you don't do anything at all" Lin, you never cease to amaze me. This was a really fun read.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/24/2020 8:42:00 AM

Wow! A fave!

Lin Lane
Date: 1/24/2020 8:47:00 AM

Thank you, Kim. I appreciate your time for reading and leaving a comment.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/22/2020 7:06:00 PM

Ha, ha! Alice in Wonderland is a great read; you've just transformed it into a great poetic write as well! Thanks, Lin. Enjoyed! ~ Gershon

Lin Lane
Date: 1/22/2020 7:32:00 PM

Thank you, Gershon. I have a follow-up to this one which serves as a more severe warning about the repercussions of falling down the rabbit hole. I think I'll post it tomorrow.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/18/2020 9:52:00 AM

Wowzer! Exceptional poetry. This one drew me in from start to finish. You rock Lin Lane. Hugs Rick.

Lin Lane
Date: 1/22/2020 6:18:00 AM

Thanks for such great remarks, Rick.

M. L. Kiser

Date: 1/15/2020 5:36:00 AM

Great piece, well penned to the lyrics; enjoyed.

Lin Lane
Date: 1/22/2020 6:17:00 AM

Thanks for liking this one.

Quoth Theraven

Date: 1/13/2020 9:49:00 AM

Lin, Always liked that Grace. And now your Alice in tetrameter. What a story in this poem 'Go Ask Alice'. Both Grace & Lewis would approve, I think. -Richard

Lin Lane
Date: 1/14/2020 6:50:00 AM

Thank you ever so kindly, Richard. I think I agree with you as long as neither accuse me of stealing their vibe.

John Hamilton

Date: 1/12/2020 7:53:00 PM

OOOH I like this one Lin...indeed edgy is the right word, has a poe-like feel. Reminds me of a guy I used to work with 40 odd years ago would come to work tripping on LSD he talked like this, brings back flashbacks (enlightenment not inhalation Ha)

Lin Lane
Date: 1/12/2020 8:04:00 PM

Thanks for picking up on the inhalation comment, John. Lol. I heard the song this morning and the line - go ask Alice stayed with me, and the 4 syllables are perfect for this form. I appreciate the great comments.

Gary Smith

Date: 1/12/2020 2:09:00 PM

A lovely dark poem Lin, much enjoyed. :)

Lin Lane
Date: 1/12/2020 4:48:00 PM

Thank you, Gary. I'm glad you liked it.

Jan Allison

Date: 1/12/2020 1:11:00 PM

Deep dark and quite disturbing imagery Lin, I am not au fait with the song but know Alice in Wonderland and that story is quite bizarre like the writer was stoned at the time:-( hugs jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 1/12/2020 1:12:00 PM

Your perception of being stoned is right on target, Jan. The song was based on the Alice in Wonderland idea...Bizarre? Yes. Thanks for the apropos comments.

John Gondolf

Date: 1/12/2020 12:46:00 PM

I remember the song well having grown up in that era. I was always part of the conservative crowd so I always found that song a bit edgy as well. You have carried that feeling well throughout this poem. Nicely done. Hugs, John

Lin Lane
Date: 1/12/2020 12:52:00 PM

Hi, John. I was naïve about the truth of this song and the comparison to life that it held. Life and those you love are eye openers into its depth. Thank you for understanding the purpose of this write.

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 1/12/2020 12:41:00 PM

Oh, yes, Dear Friend, I like this one a lot ... hemmed with shadowy inference and connotation, with the Lewis Carroll and Starship flavors! Nicely done - love the rhythm and repeated lines, too, they add to the tension and darkness ... my kind of stuff. Fave-ing! :o) <3

Lin Lane
Date: 1/12/2020 12:49:00 PM

Those who allow their addiction to possess them have created ragged hems. I lived with one who was lost in the darkness of a hole, and despite efforts to pull him up out of it, I failed. Thanks for understanding my meaning, and for leaving your thoughts, Greg.