Lin Lane Poet Monorhyme

Go Ask Alice

With enlightenment, not inhalation, 
drawn from Jefferson Airplane's (Starship?) 'White Rabbit.' 
(written by Grace Slick)

A Monotetra ~

Don't be drawn into that fairytale
with the Cheshire Cat's grin and tail
He'll lure you in and leave you frail
To weep and wail   To weep and wail

If you're in the Red Queen's palace
Don't sip wine from her gold chalice
Her evil thoughts reek of malice
Go ask Alice          Go ask Alice

You look weak, skin sallow and pall
Your White Knight's steed is in a stall
Alice won't save you when you fall
She's ten feet tall    She's ten feet tall

Don't chase white rabbits down a hole   
Deep descent will devour your soul
It's time to wake and take control
Don't pay the toll      Don't pay the toll

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Robert Kinard September 5, 2020 at 4:28 AM Alice in wonderland nicely done, I like the you use rhyme and metaphor.

Andrea Dietrich June 9, 2020 at 3:28 PM Here is an older one of yours I had not seen before. It's very clever, Lin. Thanks for the recent visit . Good to see you!!

Daniel Turner February 9, 2020 at 9:04 AM "The ones that mommy gives you don't do anything at all" Lin, you never cease to amaze me. This was a really fun read.

Kim Rodrigues January 24, 2020 at 8:42 AM Wow! A fave! Lin Lane January 24, 2020 at 8:47 AM Thank you, Kim. I appreciate your time for reading and leaving a comment.

Gershon Wolf January 22, 2020 at 7:06 PM Ha, ha! Alice in Wonderland is a great read; you've just transformed it into a great poetic write as well! Thanks, Lin. Enjoyed! ~ Gershon Lin Lane January 22, 2020 at 7:32 PM Thank you, Gershon. I have a follow-up to this one which serves as a more severe warning about the repercussions of falling down the rabbit hole. I think I'll post it tomorrow.

Richard Lamoureux January 18, 2020 at 9:52 AM Wowzer! Exceptional poetry. This one drew me in from start to finish. You rock Lin Lane. Hugs Rick. Lin Lane January 22, 2020 at 6:18 AM Thanks for such great remarks, Rick.

M. L. Kiser January 15, 2020 at 5:36 AM Great piece, well penned to the lyrics; enjoyed. Lin Lane January 22, 2020 at 6:17 AM Thanks for liking this one.

Quoth Theraven January 13, 2020 at 9:49 AM Lin, Always liked that Grace. And now your Alice in tetrameter. What a story in this poem 'Go Ask Alice'. Both Grace & Lewis would approve, I think. -Richard Lin Lane January 14, 2020 at 6:50 AM Thank you ever so kindly, Richard. I think I agree with you as long as neither accuse me of stealing their vibe.

John Hamilton January 12, 2020 at 7:53 PM OOOH I like this one Lin...indeed edgy is the right word, has a poe-like feel. Reminds me of a guy I used to work with 40 odd years ago would come to work tripping on LSD he talked like this, brings back flashbacks (enlightenment not inhalation Ha) Lin Lane January 12, 2020 at 8:04 PM Thanks for picking up on the inhalation comment, John. Lol. I heard the song this morning and the line - go ask Alice stayed with me, and the 4 syllables are perfect for this form. I appreciate the great comments.

Gary Smith January 12, 2020 at 2:09 PM A lovely dark poem Lin, much enjoyed. :) Lin Lane January 12, 2020 at 4:48 PM Thank you, Gary. I'm glad you liked it.

Jan Allison January 12, 2020 at 1:11 PM Deep dark and quite disturbing imagery Lin, I am not au fait with the song but know Alice in Wonderland and that story is quite bizarre like the writer was stoned at the time:-( hugs jan xx Lin Lane January 12, 2020 at 1:12 PM Your perception of being stoned is right on target, Jan. The song was based on the Alice in Wonderland idea...Bizarre? Yes. Thanks for the apropos comments.

John Gondolf January 12, 2020 at 12:46 PM I remember the song well having grown up in that era. I was always part of the conservative crowd so I always found that song a bit edgy as well. You have carried that feeling well throughout this poem. Nicely done. Hugs, John Lin Lane January 12, 2020 at 12:52 PM Hi, John. I was naïve about the truth of this song and the comparison to life that it held. Life and those you love are eye openers into its depth. Thank you for understanding the purpose of this write.

Gregory Richard Barden January 12, 2020 at 12:41 PM Oh, yes, Dear Friend, I like this one a lot ... hemmed with shadowy inference and connotation, with the Lewis Carroll and Starship flavors! Nicely done - love the rhythm and repeated lines, too, they add to the tension and darkness ... my kind of stuff. Fave-ing! :o) <3 Lin Lane January 12, 2020 at 12:49 PM Those who allow their addiction to possess them have created ragged hems. I lived with one who was lost in the darkness of a hole, and despite efforts to pull him up out of it, I failed. Thanks for understanding my meaning, and for leaving your thoughts, Greg.