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Glittery Oblivion

The corridor is darkly invasive
usurpation knows not where it steers,
my nightgown caught on wildfire, 
ending was indubitably a flimsy inferno
dreaming phantasma went up in smoke
i was flying naked in my captured head,
blissfully feverish in comfortable suffering
chose not to wake as you prickled slumber,
whilst functionally violaceous pain screamed
  taking flight to swap business dealings
i could have opted out, your gray reluctantly
presented within Pandora's key predicament,
contracts were sealed, sensed a lethal attraction
twisted mid your tongue tied transactional eyes,
you presented an untimely shiny gem,
 was hungry for anybody with a flaw
we cozied up on a nonchalant sofa 
underneath blankets of complexity,
shared a hot cuppa mocha java delusion
spiked with combustible confusion,
dripping havoc like beaten egg whites on crack
handed over lockbox to a transfixed universe
 awoken to find the bomb had dropped, 
missed wily antagonism & landed pon converted uppers 
heeded being so high up amid gallerias' artfulness
titanic nightmare sank beneath three hours indifference,
the machine was out of order, swallowed another pill
spellbound hot air balloon was carried away for safekeeping,
  all that was perceptibly audible were familiar Pink tracks on twisted breezes

                                              'shine on you crazy diamond' 


'Sorta delusional dreaming...'

Copyright © Paloma P | Year Posted 2016

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Freddie Robinson Jr. Date: 12/10/2016 5:46:00 PM What a dream, Paloma! Remind me not to be in your dreams okay. I would get scared to death in my sleep. As for the poem, I'm speechless. It was too intense, too surreal to capture w/mere words. It was spaced out ... there, that's the closest I could come to describing this poem. Can I have my mind back now? Great imagery though in this poem. Love and more love to you. Login to Reply Paloma P Date: 12/10/2016 5:59:00 PM Sometimes I get spaced out whilst writing. :) Thanks so much Freddie!

Andrea Dietrich Date: 12/9/2016 8:34:00 PM the imagery is off the charts, Paloma!! Love that shine on, you crazy diamond!!! Login to Reply Paloma P Date: 12/10/2016 5:58:00 PM Much appreciated Andrea! :)

Nette Onclaud Date: 12/9/2016 1:00:00 PM an adrenaline rush from your mind's expressionist, almost surreal twist, paloma... now, take a rest; huggs Login to Reply Paloma P Date: 12/10/2016 5:56:00 PM I'm rested. :) Thanks Nette.

Jannie Breedt Date: 12/9/2016 12:25:00 PM Ha Paloma, I just have to barge into your writes again. You wrote mw something nice again but PS has changed the format so I cannot reply. So visit me again. This one is you allright. I can see you in and out of your pj s. Ssssmookkinnn Login to Reply Paloma P Date: 12/10/2016 5:55:00 PM I'll be sure to visit you again, I'm doing catch-up since I was away.

Tim Smith Date: 12/9/2016 11:31:00 AM You drew me in with "twisted mid your tongue tied transactional eyes" ...was a deal made with devil??...some great lines and images Login to Reply Paloma P Date: 12/10/2016 5:55:00 PM Sort of a devil, glad you liked that line Tim! Thank you.

Doug Vinson Date: 12/9/2016 9:07:00 AM Whew - I'm tired and I ain't even done nuttin' today. "Violaceous" - sweet! Login to Reply Paloma P Date: 12/10/2016 5:53:00 PM Thanks, I love your reviews Doug, they're better than my poems. :) Doug Vinson Date: 12/9/2016 3:12:00 PM Paloma, I think you run quite comfortably with the throttle wide open, while maintaining admirable control - something most of us cannot do.

Chris Green Date: 12/9/2016 8:40:00 AM Three hours, well that leaves me out...and besides, I'd have to contact my physician if it lasted more than four, oh wait...nevermind. : ) Out of control, you hit the accelerator on this one and drove it straight into my mind, never losing a drop of fuel along the way. Shine on indeed, what polish do you use because your work is always shining so bright it is near blinding. Love that song to by the way, a little Pink Floyd never hurt anyone. Login to Reply Paloma P Date: 12/10/2016 5:52:00 PM I'm not going to respond to that first part! :) Much appreciated Chris.

White Wolf Date: 12/9/2016 7:55:00 AM Shine indeed! Such imagination! Spiked with combustible confusion! What a de Lamour! Ha. Loved it, Paloma! Login to Reply Paloma P Date: 12/10/2016 5:52:00 PM Thanks Rick, your review made me smile! :)

Daniel Turner Date: 12/9/2016 7:51:00 AM Pile on many more layers and I'll be joining you there:) Flying naked, huh? Ok, I'll take a ticket, Paloma. Login to Reply Paloma P Date: 12/10/2016 5:51:00 PM Tell me you've never flown naked in your dreams? :)