Gettysburg, Redux Premiere Contest Winner

[Note: this poem was inspired by a strange and terrible experience I had at 17  when I first set foot on the battlefield in 1965 after an interview at the college there: physiologically, it was like being mortally wounded. I was an agnostic then and so shrugged it off, but after I had an NDE 7 years later, I started thinking it may have been something else.]



Now the happy soldiers
go to fight again the battle,
marching bravely forty abreast
with heavy muskets shouldered,
yelling their cries of pain and glory
as they face the cold cannon
barking like a pack of mad dogs.

Down they go in ones and twos,
and sometimes in little bunches,
collapsing together as though
put to sleep by the fairy dust
of long forgotten dreams.

Both sides feel the urge 
to kill, to step the victor
o'er their bothers' bones.
Grown men playing-- yes,
even perhaps a bit silly--
but maybe, just maybe,
some of them are unaware
of their own anguished deaths
there on that sweating day
not really so very long ago.

At seventeen I went to that town
to talk of my education and 
in the warm afternoon
I meandered mindlessly
amidst the boulders named
fearfully for Satan's lair.

There, suddenly, terribly,
while walking between two
of the giant stones, my body
shuddered in anguish and sweat,
my heart raced like it might burst, 
as fearful dread seized my mind  
and rattled me to the very core 
of my soul; but back then, I did not 
yet know I might have lived before.


['Satan's lair' refers to Devil's Den, near the base of the Little Round Top where  some of the battle's fiercest fighting took place.]

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 4/4/2024 10:57:00 AM
I sometimes get shivers and have a weird clammy coldness come over me in certain places. Interesting sensations. Congratulations on your win Lenny! And a Happy Birthday to you! :)
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L. J. Carber
Date: 4/7/2024 8:56:00 AM
Thanks Linda--I understand-- I also experienced something strange--and frightening when I visited ground zero at Hiroshima.
Date: 4/3/2024 3:49:00 AM
Congratulations on your top placement. A stellar piece.
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L. J. Carber
Date: 4/3/2024 11:57:00 AM
Thank you Richard
Date: 4/2/2024 6:12:00 PM
Dear LJ, your poem touched mecdeeply with me, not just for its poignant imagery but also for its connection to our shared hometown. Your vivid depiction of the battlefield evokes memories of my own experiences there, particularly the eerie sensation I felt upon first setting foot on that historic ground. Like you, I too was born and raised in Gettysburg, and the echoes of its past have always lingered in my consciousness. Your exploration of mortality and the possibility of past lives adds another layer of depth to the poem, inviting reflection on the mysteries of existence. Very haunting piece of art that strikes a chord with our shared heritage and personal journeys. - Blessings, Daniel
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L. J. Carber
Date: 4/3/2024 12:02:00 PM
Thank you, Daniel, but just to clarify: I was born in Philly but went to Gettysburg College for my BA. The 'incident' actually happened-- it was as I understand it much like getting shot--but at 17 I was still an agnostic and so wrote it off. But the NDE I had when I almost drowned 7 years late showed me the reality of the endless soul.
Date: 4/2/2024 2:25:00 PM
What a soul stirring write this is, flows so very well too and i must highlight “ put to sleep by the fairy dust of long forgotten dreams.” that hit so deep and the ending too is powerful and so very well articulated in the most eloquent manner. Pleasure reading this poem. Worthy of all the accolades, congratulations on your win.
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L. J. Carber
Date: 4/3/2024 12:03:00 PM
Thank you so much!
Date: 4/2/2024 8:44:00 AM
A great write, Lj. Bone-chilling and downright freaky. Congratulations on your top win! Charlie
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L. J. Carber
Date: 4/3/2024 12:05:00 PM
Yes, Charles, it was freaky, but not as much as some other dips into the 'twilight zone' I've taken [ask me sometime about the time I visited Hiroshima...]
Date: 4/1/2024 4:42:00 PM
Congrats on your contest placement! It's a perfect fit for the contest, though an old poem. Anyone who knows a bit about Serling knows war and battle and the moral implications was a fave theme of his, having been a veteran himself.
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L. J. Carber
Date: 4/3/2024 12:10:00 PM
Well, Tom, it's an old poem from an old poet! Actually most of my stuff has come to me in my 8th decade--another mystery; and yes, Twilight Zone [along with Alfred Hitchcock Presents] has always been one of my favorite TV shows--nothing comes close today.
Date: 9/28/2020 3:27:00 PM
Chilling in its power, LJ - maybe a premonition, definitely other worldly. I had a strange experience at Mt. Vernon where I distinctly heard the sound of horses and an army moving toward the final battle of the Revolution. It has stayed with me for years. Congrats and kudos on your win!
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Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/29/2020 3:43:00 PM
You are so right, LJ! Interesting idea about the Minuteman as I come from colonial families on both sides who fought in the American Revolution. Both of our sons married girls with colonial roots and one of our daughters-in-law descended from Roger Sherman - the only American to have signed all four revolutionary documents! You must have a physic side!
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L. J. Carber
Date: 9/28/2020 3:38:00 PM
Well Sam, premonitions look 'forward' while what you or I experienced indicates tuning into the past, in a quantum physics sort of way-- or perhaps as a memory of the soul. Perhaps you were a Minuteman, Sam!
Date: 9/25/2020 7:58:00 AM
Dear LJ, this grabbed me right away. Happy soldiers, perfect to display their blind enthusiasm. A beautifully written account of your early days in the military. Terrible business. It's bearing on you is tremendous. Thank you for sharing it with all here.
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L. J. Carber
Date: 9/25/2020 9:11:00 AM
Thank you Sigrid, your kind words are very much appreciated!
Date: 9/24/2020 7:18:00 PM
A milieu of intrigue be our involving minds being chronicled, blessings my friend on your honorable placement, Aloha! William
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Hilo Poet
Date: 9/25/2020 10:05:00 AM
Si, fielmente
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L. J. Carber
Date: 9/25/2020 9:12:00 AM
Aloha! and thank you for the honor William-- vaya con Dios siempre
Date: 8/5/2018 11:46:00 PM
Bone-chilling, illusion-shattering poem, my friend. … As an admirer of the Gettysburg Address and the terse message behind it---desecrated by rank amateurs of our era, like Obama and Trump, who routinely exploit soldiers' deaths for political gain---this poem speaks volumes to me (and to others, as well, I imagine). Brilliant! ~ gw
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L. J. Carber
Date: 8/6/2018 9:30:00 AM
Thanks Gershon-- I actually had a 'spooky' and frightening experience whilst walking between 2 boulders at Devil's Den-- but as a 17 year old 'know it all' agnostic, I discounted it as some kind of fluke until 7 years later I had an NDE and awakened to my soul, and the Divine.
Date: 2/1/2018 5:18:00 AM
I have chills, I felt this, still do and think it'll be awhile before I shake this feeling. Wow. Also, based on this write, you are darn wonderful with blank verse. My husband remembers being a native American SHOT off his horse. More chills, shame my husband isn't a writer. This is something unique, delivered uniquely. All the best ... CayCay
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Date: 4/6/2016 10:53:00 PM
len, Nice to see your poem showcased in Justin's "Where Freedom Finds The Fire Contest List." Love LINDA
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Date: 4/6/2016 2:26:00 AM
Congrats on a worthy win Ien..
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Date: 11/5/2015 12:06:00 PM
Len, congrats on your win in Rob Carmack's contest. SKAT
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Date: 11/4/2015 9:43:00 PM
Congrats on huge win Ien with this superb write!
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