Premiere Contest WinnerGettysburg, Redux

[Note: this poem was inspired by a strange and terrible experience I had at 17  when I first set foot on the battlefield in 1965 after an interview at the college there: physiologically, it was like being mortally wounded. I was an agnostic then and so shrugged it off, but after I had an NDE 7 years later, I started thinking it may have been something else.]



Now the happy soldiers
go to fight again the battle,
marching bravely forty abreast
with heavy muskets shouldered,
yelling their cries of pain and glory
as they face the cold cannon
barking like a pack of mad dogs.

Down they go in ones and twos,
and sometimes in little bunches,
collapsing together as though
put to sleep by the fairy dust
of long forgotten dreams.

Both sides feel the urge 
to kill, to step the victor
o'er their bothers' bones.
Grown men playing-- yes,
even perhaps a bit silly--
but maybe, just maybe,
some of them are unaware
of their own anguished deaths
there on that sweating day
not really so very long ago.

At seventeen I went to that town
to talk of my education and 
in the warm afternoon
I meandered mindlessly
amidst the boulders named
fearfully for Satan's lair.

There, suddenly, terribly,
while walking between two
of the giant stones, my body
shuddered in anguish and sweat,
my heart raced like it might burst, 
as fearful dread seized my mind  
and rattled me to the very core 
of my soul; but back then, I did not 
yet know I might have lived before.


['Satan's lair' refers to Devil's Den, near the base of the Little Round Top where  some of the battle's fiercest fighting took place.]
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Fowler Avatar
April 4, 2024 at 10:57 AM
I sometimes get shivers and have a weird clammy coldness come over me in certain places. Interesting sensations. Congratulations on your win Lenny! And a Happy Birthday to you! :)
Carber Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 8:56 AM
Thanks Linda--I understand-- I also experienced something strange--and frightening when I visited ground zero at Hiroshima.
Lamoureux Avatar
April 3, 2024 at 3:49 AM
Congratulations on your top placement. A stellar piece.
Carber Avatar
April 3, 2024 at 11:57 AM
Thank you Richard
Rodgers Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 6:12 PM
Dear LJ, your poem touched mecdeeply with me, not just for its poignant imagery but also for its connection to our shared hometown. Your vivid depiction of the battlefield evokes memories of my own experiences there, particularly the eerie sensation I felt upon first setting foot on that historic ground. Like you, I too was born and raised in Gettysburg, and the echoes of its past have always lingered in my consciousness. Your exploration of mortality and the possibility of past lives adds another layer of depth to the poem, inviting reflection on the mysteries of existence. Very haunting piece of art that strikes a chord with our shared heritage and personal journeys. - Blessings, Daniel
Carber Avatar
April 3, 2024 at 12:02 PM
Thank you, Daniel, but just to clarify: I was born in Philly but went to Gettysburg College for my BA. The 'incident' actually happened-- it was as I understand it much like getting shot--but at 17 I was still an agnostic and so wrote it off. But the NDE I had when I almost drowned 7 years late showed me the reality of the endless soul.
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April 2, 2024 at 2:25 PM
What a soul stirring write this is, flows so very well too and i must highlight “ put to sleep by the fairy dust of long forgotten dreams.” that hit so deep and the ending too is powerful and so very well articulated in the most eloquent manner. Pleasure reading this poem. Worthy of all the accolades, congratulations on your win.
Carber Avatar
April 3, 2024 at 12:03 PM
Thank you so much!
Messina Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 8:44 AM
A great write, Lj. Bone-chilling and downright freaky. Congratulations on your top win! Charlie
Carber Avatar
April 3, 2024 at 12:05 PM
Yes, Charles, it was freaky, but not as much as some other dips into the 'twilight zone' I've taken [ask me sometime about the time I visited Hiroshima...]
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September 28, 2020 at 3:27 PM
Chilling in its power, LJ - maybe a premonition, definitely other worldly. I had a strange experience at Mt. Vernon where I distinctly heard the sound of horses and an army moving toward the final battle of the Revolution. It has stayed with me for years. Congrats and kudos on your win!
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September 29, 2020 at 3:43 PM
You are so right, LJ! Interesting idea about the Minuteman as I come from colonial families on both sides who fought in the American Revolution. Both of our sons married girls with colonial roots and one of our daughters-in-law descended from Roger Sherman - the only American to have signed all four revolutionary documents! You must have a physic side!
Carber Avatar
September 28, 2020 at 3:38 PM
Well Sam, premonitions look 'forward' while what you or I experienced indicates tuning into the past, in a quantum physics sort of way-- or perhaps as a memory of the soul. Perhaps you were a Minuteman, Sam!
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September 25, 2020 at 7:58 AM
Dear LJ, this grabbed me right away. Happy soldiers, perfect to display their blind enthusiasm. A beautifully written account of your early days in the military. Terrible business. It's bearing on you is tremendous. Thank you for sharing it with all here.
Carber Avatar
September 25, 2020 at 9:11 AM
Thank you Sigrid, your kind words are very much appreciated!
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September 24, 2020 at 7:18 PM
A milieu of intrigue be our involving minds being chronicled, blessings my friend on your honorable placement, Aloha! William
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
September 25, 2020 at 10:05 AM
Si, fielmente
Carber Avatar
September 25, 2020 at 9:12 AM
Aloha! and thank you for the honor William-- vaya con Dios siempre
Wolf Avatar
August 5, 2018 at 11:46 PM
Bone-chilling, illusion-shattering poem, my friend. … As an admirer of the Gettysburg Address and the terse message behind it---desecrated by rank amateurs of our era, like Obama and Trump, who routinely exploit soldiers' deaths for political gain---this poem speaks volumes to me (and to others, as well, I imagine). Brilliant! ~ gw
Carber Avatar
August 6, 2018 at 9:30 AM
Thanks Gershon-- I actually had a 'spooky' and frightening experience whilst walking between 2 boulders at Devil's Den-- but as a 17 year old 'know it all' agnostic, I discounted it as some kind of fluke until 7 years later I had an NDE and awakened to my soul, and the Divine.
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February 1, 2018 at 5:18 AM
I have chills, I felt this, still do and think it'll be awhile before I shake this feeling. Wow. Also, based on this write, you are darn wonderful with blank verse. My husband remembers being a native American SHOT off his horse. More chills, shame my husband isn't a writer. This is something unique, delivered uniquely. All the best ... CayCay
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April 6, 2016 at 10:53 PM
len, Nice to see your poem showcased in Justin's "Where Freedom Finds The Fire Contest List." Love LINDA
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April 6, 2016 at 2:26 AM
Congrats on a worthy win Ien..
A  Avatar
November 5, 2015 at 12:06 PM
Len, congrats on your win in Rob Carmack's contest. SKAT
A. Sharma Avatar
November 4, 2015 at 9:43 PM
Congrats on huge win Ien with this superb write!
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