Getting Too Old

GETTING  TOO  OLD



Her story told by old charts, scattered, water-drenched. 
Portholes all broken, shaft and screw missing :  a  wreck ,
Grounded  on concrete platform  like an old man sitting on bench, 
Battered  funnel,  broken hawsers, holes in deck.


Tell you stories about the old days when he mattered.
Eyeglasses cracked.   Some say he has a screw loose :
Old man on a bench, like a ship in dry dock, rust splattered,
Battered hat, torn trousers,  holes in shoes.


Endured war  sagas at the siege of Malta,
Braved storms in the Bering Sea  - ice cold, 
Saw exotic island sunsets in Straits of Malacca,
With cargoes varied, they  traveled  the world. 

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Written   for  Matt   Caliri’s  Contest    “Write A Backwards Poem”

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 6/27/2011 10:45:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Matt's "Backwards Poem" contest Syd. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/26/2011 11:21:00 AM
This sure is a very clever, write Sydney! These ships indeed tell their tales and how cool that you related it to the old man as well..Very interesting to read both ways-- Congrats on your win :D
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Date: 6/25/2011 11:10:00 PM
you mean you have inner depth? hmm, again, this was from my draft!! j/ kidding!! syd, what you've done here is not just describe a person, but you creating a living being out of words. .. congrats with huggs! :)
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Date: 6/25/2011 4:08:00 PM
Tell me about it L O L........I am rapidly approaching verse two......best wishes ...Syd
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Date: 6/25/2011 3:44:00 PM
Happens to the best of us as well as to ships. Congratulations Sydney. Love, Joyce
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Date: 6/25/2011 4:09:00 PM
Tell me about it....L O L...I am rapidly approaching verse two....best wishes...Syd
Date: 5/21/2011 8:14:00 AM
Sydney, I like this. It's a very good idea for that backwards contest. I totally could grasp your idea by reading this one backwards. I forgot to answer you last night. Yes, I know that Dylan poem. I think its one famous line is repeated by many when it comes to dying. What made you think of it? That repeating quality?
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Date: 5/21/2011 11:12:00 AM
yes it was the repeating quality which is intrinsic to vilanelle of course....yours has that quality Andrea
Date: 5/20/2011 12:48:00 PM
a great piece of creative work, enjoyed reading this one.
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