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Poetic Form: Sonnet

Inspired: 2021 November 12

*1st Place*
Revealing Your Soul And Other Tension
Contest Judged: 2023 January 14
Sponsored by: Sotto Poet

*2nd Place*
Old or New Sonnets
Contest Judged: 2023 November 21
Sponsored by: Joseph May

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When amidst broken equals, we approved, Ere a freed grain of nomadic sand slipped, Melancholic surrendered, whole reproved, Monitor the saved life single and stripped. Two separate paths once joined normally, One courses happiness, opposite naught, Depraved, unprincipled, lived lukewarmly, Blossomed languishes, internally fraught. Provocative commencement surefire fade, Arrangements, invites, sent cancellations, Heartbreaking embattles a soul betrayed, Evoke mother's "time out", do causations. Solely talks like being ere his gravestone, Passersby ask he says, "Gauging my own."

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 11/21/2023 3:07:00 PM

Congratulations, William!

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/21/2023 3:24:00 PM

Mahalo, Kim. 'Tis sweet, my friend. Aloha, William

Joseph May

Date: 11/21/2023 1:01:00 PM

Very nicely penned Hilo, Congrats on your win

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/21/2023 3:21:00 PM

Thanks, Joseph, of a needed resurrectioning. Aloha, William

Christuraj Alex

Date: 1/14/2023 9:35:00 PM

Great sonnet on the theme. Congratulations!

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/14/2023 9:53:00 PM

Thank you so much, Christuraj, my true friend, Aloha William

Valsa George

Date: 1/14/2023 8:44:00 PM

Your resolve to come out from lukewarm living to experience life in its true essence is so appreciable ! Powerful penning. Congratulations William on your first place win.

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/14/2023 9:21:00 PM

Your unique words form nicely to its touches, Valsa, esteemable gratitude I extend to you, my friend. Aloha William

Eve Roper

Date: 1/14/2023 6:28:00 PM

Great verse , William. Big congratulations on your top win. Many blessings my friend

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/14/2023 9:07:00 PM

There's a sense of good measure, Eve, gratefully expressed my friend, Aloha William

Ann Peck

Date: 1/14/2023 9:59:00 AM

Congrats on First Place! I especially loved your couplet.

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/14/2023 1:40:00 PM

Consolation prize, Ann, such as it is--Aloha my friend William

Anisha Dutta

Date: 1/14/2023 9:50:00 AM

Big Congrats to win TOP. Marvellous Composition. Blessings

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/14/2023 1:37:00 PM

Bless you, Anisha, as one man's up. Aloha my friend William

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/14/2023 6:20:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A wonderful write. Love your ending. Have a blessed weekend...............

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/14/2023 1:36:00 PM

Paula, a self-creator, self-fixer upper--what a downer--Aloha my friend William

Sotto Poet

Date: 1/14/2023 6:03:00 AM

Congratulations on your top contest win with this fantastic poem, William. Blessings

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/14/2023 7:55:00 AM

Thanks, Lasaad, an oldie that seems to recall your intent--much appreciated my friend, Aloha William

Sotto Poet

Date: 11/12/2021 8:07:00 PM

You've expressed a fantastic idea in just a few phrases. The ultimate serenity, painted in brilliant colors, is meant to calm the wandering human mind. Even when we are alone, we are all profoundly connected.

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/12/2021 8:38:00 PM

Lasaad, divinity is the unity that enters whenever the heart opens. Truly, there's no shortage of time for happiness. I'm grateful my friend, Aloha!

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 11/12/2021 7:57:00 PM

This makes me think of the quote 'no man is an island' - we are all connected, even when we are alone, very profound~

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/12/2021 8:16:00 PM

Michelle, you've penetrated the nailing, 'tis our encrypted life that tumults inescapably. Truly, a heartiest thanks my friend, Aloha!