Galactic By the Gallon

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Galactic cowboys mount mysterious steeds
and chase spacey cows at unfathomable speeds!

Lactating in circles they moo as they spray
an interstellar round-up, a real milky way.

It sparkles and glimmers, that distant lactation
as it drenches the galaxy and all of creation.

At heaven we marvel, in some ungodly hour, 
at distant milk curdles, already gone sour.


8/21/16
For Contest: Word Play: Galactic
Hosted by: Ir0nic Zink

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Laura Hay

Date: 9/21/2016 10:35:00 AM

Fab and fun this one, well done, warm regards, Laura.

Sandra Haight

Date: 9/18/2016 4:20:00 PM

So...that explains the 'milky way'...! I enjoyed the fun way you addressed the theme. Congrats on your win! Sandra

Laura Leiser

Date: 9/18/2016 4:00:00 PM

Love the fun elements in your fine poem, Grahamburglaar! Especially the second couplet....SO funny :D Congrats on your win :)

Ironic Zink

Date: 9/18/2016 2:01:00 PM

Nice work! thanks for participating in my contest and congrats on 5th place!

Michelle Mac Donald

Date: 9/11/2016 6:13:00 PM

Phenomenal write, Graham :) Enjoying your poems, thank you for sharing.:)) Mikki

G. Jay

Date: 9/4/2016 8:32:00 PM

This is Great.

Robert Warlov

Date: 9/2/2016 11:47:00 AM

Sorry- I forgot. If I may suggest a word change, last line: AS distant milk curdles... If this is inappropriate, my apologies.

The Grahamburglar
Date: 9/4/2016 7:19:00 PM

It's not inappropriate, but the intent of the last two lines was that what we marvel upon, is soured milk curdles. If you remove the modifier, 'in some ungodly hour' the intent is more clear: At heaven we marvel at distant milk curdles, already gone sour. I appreciate the courage to make your recommendation, it's how we all learn from each other. -G =)

Robert Warlov

Date: 9/2/2016 11:37:00 AM

But they say it's expanding so... fences to mend? You might send this to the periodicals that publish that starry stuff. It's fun, thinking about cow-pie moons and Black-hole cheese.

The Grahamburglar
Date: 9/4/2016 7:27:00 PM

Haha, cow-pie moons...that's crap. ;)