The Grahamburglar Poet Couplet

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Galactic By the Gallon

Galactic cowboys mount mysterious steeds
and chase spacey cows at unfathomable speeds!

Lactating in circles they moo as they spray
an interstellar round-up, a real milky way.

It sparkles and glimmers, that distant lactation
as it drenches the galaxy and all of creation.

At heaven we marvel, in some ungodly hour, 
at distant milk curdles, already gone sour.


8/21/16
For Contest: Word Play: Galactic
Hosted by: Ir0nic Zink

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Laura Hay September 21, 2016 at 10:35 AM Fab and fun this one, well done, warm regards, Laura.

Sandra Haight September 18, 2016 at 4:20 PM So...that explains the 'milky way'...! I enjoyed the fun way you addressed the theme. Congrats on your win! Sandra

Laura Leiser September 18, 2016 at 4:00 PM Love the fun elements in your fine poem, Grahamburglaar! Especially the second couplet....SO funny :D Congrats on your win :)

Ironic Zink September 18, 2016 at 2:01 PM Nice work! thanks for participating in my contest and congrats on 5th place!

Michelle Mac Donald September 11, 2016 at 6:13 PM Phenomenal write, Graham :) Enjoying your poems, thank you for sharing.:)) Mikki

G. Jay September 4, 2016 at 8:32 PM This is Great.

Robert Warlov September 2, 2016 at 11:47 AM Sorry- I forgot. If I may suggest a word change, last line: AS distant milk curdles... If this is inappropriate, my apologies. The Grahamburglar September 4, 2016 at 7:19 PM It's not inappropriate, but the intent of the last two lines was that what we marvel upon, is soured milk curdles. If you remove the modifier, 'in some ungodly hour' the intent is more clear: At heaven we marvel at distant milk curdles, already gone sour. I appreciate the courage to make your recommendation, it's how we all learn from each other. -G =)

Robert Warlov September 2, 2016 at 11:37 AM But they say it's expanding so... fences to mend? You might send this to the periodicals that publish that starry stuff. It's fun, thinking about cow-pie moons and Black-hole cheese. The Grahamburglar September 4, 2016 at 7:27 PM Haha, cow-pie moons...that's crap. ;)

Viv Wigley August 28, 2016 at 1:44 AM Great wit, and a great take on the theme, Grahamburgler. Good luck in the contest! Regards, Viv

J. I. Thomas F. August 23, 2016 at 5:23 PM Well, I won't be able to take the night sky as seriously any more!