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Fugitive Forrest

Fugitive Forrest Running...Oh how he hates running... He feels like Forrest Flippin Gump, because he has ran non-stop...Since... Since The Incident..."I'm Innocent"!!! Already 2,426 miles away...But not far enough...never far enough... Felling that they are always closing in on him...His breathing quickens... Screaming...Yelling at God for hating him... He prayed though not everyday, but surely? Surely God knew he's a Believer... Was a Believer, past tense..."I'm Innocent"!!! It was self defense...Against the police department? It doesn't work that way...Life as a runaway... They are going to kill him for this...No statement... It was 3 unidentified men...His breathing quickens... All over the news...On every front page...Just great! Why didn't they say police? They could've been anybody... Not today...Just 3 sheriff deputies...Gunned down to get away...And hasn't stopped running since..."I'm Innocent"!!!

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Brian Davey

Date: 3/23/2016 4:43:00 AM

Thank you my friend I am glad to hear that this piece put people right there in the suspense while reading it, it is always good as a writer to be able to engage your readers I believe. Thank you for reading and I always look forward to hear what you have to say, I respect your input tremendously.

Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/17/2016 12:29:00 PM

Excellently executed, Brian! A total match up for the theme, and I loved the way you wrote this ... with a million back-and-forth thoughts going through your head ... it's all what really would take place, in this situation. We're not sure exactly what happened ... all we know is ... "You're Innocent!!!" ... quality writing, my friend.

Tom Quigley

Date: 3/14/2016 11:05:00 PM

Agree with other feedback--the excitement rolls nicely. When's AMC going to air the pilot? ;-)

Brian Davey
Date: 3/16/2016 2:43:00 AM

If only that were true my friend...However I think that anything is possible? Thank you for reading friend

Constance La France

Date: 3/14/2016 5:10:00 PM

Brian, I was out of breath reading this great write, wonderful for the contest, a winner to me, 7 ~

Brian Davey
Date: 3/16/2016 2:40:00 AM

That is great, exactly what I as the writer want to hear that he makes happen within his work, thank you so much your comments are making my day much nicer

Robert Heemstra

Date: 3/14/2016 3:40:00 PM

Was an incident not that long ago a sniper shot at two state two state troopers and hid in the woods. Of course that sniper wasn't innocent, but he was the highlight of the local news until they caught up with him. Thanks for the read!

Brian Davey
Date: 3/14/2016 4:42:00 PM

In some sadistic way though that sniper of yours probably thought he was innocent of some shorts, at least justified. Thanks for reading

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/13/2016 1:37:00 PM

the stream of action here is captivating, brian.. well told!..huggs

Brian Davey
Date: 3/13/2016 2:57:00 PM

thank you very much Nette