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Issued paper fibers mirror those of the straw bale, The waters of the great canal through the morning sail. In spite Venezia was tied, the chairlift was jostling, Twisting its way through the small calli in haze whiting. It's safe to say man has a qualm, despite his skin tone, The Earth spins around, put your location out of zone. Informal suburbs have been overrun by strange walls, The laws of the rulers, custom breeds devotion calls. It's amazing how people fall for lowering strife, Then residents achieve bad habits and lose their life. Identity loss roots our quiet closed eyes, curdle, Teams were the source of hatred for every step hurdle. Its clogged and stuffed bowel burst, the young boy died of filth, They stole his liver, kidneys, and heart, killing his health. Idle boy's heart beats in a guest's chest; mom's tear-soaked veil, The boy is dead or lives couched in flesh tombs as was frail. Its tearful child asks his dad, "where does sorrow stem from?" The sorrow you get is the kid of joy, if not some. It's not just the sun's rays that draw forth the elixir, The Oceans create clouds and those clouds from storms austere. Isn't the fragrance that lures butterflies, but the same scent, The flower that would a lover pick for his content? It's not the light shining on your flesh in the mirror, The light chases the reverse side's shadow to shiver. It's when you're glad, know that it cost others happiness, That you're enthralled recall it's someone else's sadness. Individualism fails in vain, that's a grouse word, This may never know how your fault brings oddly well-augured. It opens endless doors to be tough, profound, and strong, Though no book or teacher can teach you a complete prong. 2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 23 Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Mark Toney 1ST Place Contest Winner Written August 30, 2022 Dot Your I's And Cross Your T's Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Hilo Poet Verified and checked with HMS.COM, with 13 syllables in each line.

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Date: 10/1/2022 5:57:00 PM
Nicely done Lasaad! Congratulations your win! Linda
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Date: 9/30/2022 8:29:00 PM
Great and beautiful scene vividly depicted using this interesting form. Congratulations!
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Date: 9/30/2022 3:37:00 PM
Congratulations for your top win. Excellent! :)
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Date: 9/30/2022 2:04:00 PM
Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Sara
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Date: 9/30/2022 9:54:00 AM
Your poem is strong and thought-provoking, with soft lines to balance. A very fine accomplishment! Congratulations on First Place!
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Date: 9/30/2022 11:58:00 AM
Thank you so much, Ann, appreciate your congrats and your kind words.
Date: 9/30/2022 9:27:00 AM
A stellar achievement, Lasaad, well done! Another feather in your cap for an honorable trophy placement in the contest my friend, Aloha William
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Date: 9/30/2022 11:47:00 AM
William, that was a really pleasant and unexpected piece of news to hear. I would want to express my gratitude for taking the time to read my poem and selecting it as one of the top winners. Thank you so much dear friend.
Date: 8/31/2022 4:36:00 PM
Sotto, you’ve written such thoughtful, deep and meaningful couplets each one spectacular in its own unique way. A most interesting inspirational read… Belle
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Date: 8/31/2022 1:34:00 PM
Your poem was filled with depth and meaning. You delt with so many issues we're facing due to choices taken. Your insight into cause and affect in differnt situations was engaging and drew me into the poem. I'll have to reread this and give some time to all you've shared. Amazing poetry and great entry, Lasaad. Write On! my friend, Bill
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Date: 8/31/2022 6:21:00 AM
Amazing how you wrote such a long poem with I's and T's --and syllable counts. Your talent on display my friend. Best to you.
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