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Freudian Slip

the chalice of need contains no poison ~ but might cause a herpes lip scoffed the leper to the serpent ~ who was trying to sponge out a sip the snake dissed the quip quietly ~ his tongue had already lost its tip but was heard under his breath saying ~ how’d i end up in such a kip

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Valsa George

Date: 7/9/2023 6:54:00 PM

This is the first time, I saw a monoku turned into a humorous story. Congratulations David on your podium win.

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/15/2023 2:44:00 PM

Thank you Valsa, I do try be a little versatile with my Monokus, some work, others totally don’t, cheers David

Tania Kitchin

Date: 7/9/2023 1:57:00 PM

David, a great string of monoku's congratulations on your winning placement.

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/15/2023 2:42:00 PM

Heya Tania sorry for the belated response I was on holiday for a couple of weeks, cheers David

Jan Allison

Date: 7/9/2023 11:26:00 AM

dropping back with many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/15/2023 2:41:00 PM

Thank you so much Jan, I’ve a lot of catching up to do after the holidays, cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 7/5/2023 5:23:00 PM

Hahaha funny haikus, David it hit the spot--remember you are more than a poet! lol okay, To paraphrase Billy Joel—you’ll throw daggers at them, but you’re always a poet to me. Glad to hear your on holiday as most of us are, thanks for always being there for us on holidays, some of us just keep it to our selves, but still make time to comment.

I Am Anaya
Date: 7/6/2023 7:56:00 AM

Monokus

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/6/2023 12:22:00 AM

Heya Anaya, I’m on holiday so soup time is pretty limited, oh you know what I mean, Billy himself has some great lyrics, (we didn’t start the fire it’s been always burning since the world’s been turning) is one of my favourites, humans and trouble seem to go hand in hand, I’m delighted my Monoku hit the spot with you “no daggers” just a bit of fun, cheers David

Jay Narain

Date: 7/5/2023 12:46:00 PM

Funny Monoku. admirable humour.

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/5/2023 1:02:00 PM

Heya Jay, I actually wrote and entered (Freudian slip) for your contest I mentioned it in the comment box, sorry if you missed the pointer, with these new contests rules it must be so difficult for the sponsors to know who’s entering what, thanks for stopping by cheers David

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 7/5/2023 12:21:00 PM

So funny. I admire your sense of humor. Well doe.

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/5/2023 1:03:00 PM

Thanks Victor, I’m on holiday at the moment, you could be forgiven for thinking I’m in a dungeon somewhere, alls ok sun is shining, cheers David

Lin Lane

Date: 7/5/2023 11:03:00 AM

David, I saw your reply to Jan so I won’t ask where you get your ideas. You have a fertile mind, one seed planted and you reap a bumper crop of thoughts, ripe for picking. You turned your Monoku into a story!

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/5/2023 2:46:00 PM

Ouch I’d never dream of it, lol!

Lin Lane
Date: 7/5/2023 2:35:00 PM

It was the same for Jack. Just don't chop that beanstalk down.

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/5/2023 12:07:00 PM

Thanks for that wonderful comment Lin, but id say I’m probably a Jack and the beanstalk kinda guy, I never know what monstrosity is going to pop up once the seed/bean is planted, cheers David

David Kavanagh

Date: 7/5/2023 10:37:00 AM

For Jay Narain’s contest

Jan Allison

Date: 7/5/2023 10:36:00 AM

hahaha fab string of perfect poems:-) hugs jan xx

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/5/2023 10:40:00 AM

Thanks so much Jan, don’t ask where such thoughts come from, lol! Cheers David