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Freeing An Elephant

An elephant weakened by drought, had become helplessly mired down, in the deep mud of the water-hole's edge. Ironic that death was eminent from the place she sought life - giving water. Too weak to struggle any longer she awaited her fate, aware of the waiting vultures. Little did she know she had become an endangered species and that a patrol would soon discover her. 
Her first sight of the men filled her with dread - the only living being capable of her destruction- at least death would be quick with their death-stick. She had no idea of their plan to rescue her. Soon many more of them appeared. They attached ropes to all her limbs and behind her hind quarters. They laid a make - shift ramp in front of her and used heavy logs to lever her from behind. Like a pachydermal Gulliver she succumbed to their Lilliputian efforts. Heaving together in a concerted effort these well-meaning men were never quite able to move her mastodonic mass. She saw them swarming around her like ants that transported gigantic insects to their nests. 
In their constant attempts she felt their determination to pull her from the death bed she had accepted. Like a bizarre tug of war their bodies heaved in unison, strained in cooperation, and inched her with their very wills, to pull her from the sucking mud. In a final intrepid effort she is suddenly freed.  All of her rescuers scatter out of range, cheering each other for their combined success in liberating her from certain death. 
Turning to face an age old enemy she catches their elation.  Her acute senses perceive no aggression - no devious motive from the crowd. Instead, there is a baffling air of some mysterious joy at her survival. She fights her instinctive urge to charge them. No death dealing -stick is raised in aim against her. She knows now how physically weak they really are.  She had felt it while they were struggling to pull her out.  A fumbling new born calf had more strength than ten of them.  It had taken one hundred men's muscles combined, and hours to move her.  For some strange reason they were not trying to kill her. She had witnessed the slaughter of so many of her kind by men, and now against all previous reason, their super human efforts had been - to give her freedom - not to take it away. She stood in silent comprehension, at this strange reversal of events. 
The life inside her stirred - her unborn calf. Turning her back on her applauding enemies she sought the comfort of her herd. What baffling news to tell! To be given life - the extreme opposite of her expectations was what she must pass on. The message to her newborn calf would carry new wisdom.
Not all men are murderous foes - some are capable of the most heroic love imaginable. Their capacity for love transcends all boundaries. 
And an elephant never forgets. 

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Date: 4/6/2017 11:51:00 PM
Such a great narrative, Suzanne, heart-tugging and heart-soaring at the end.
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Date: 5/16/2016 10:11:00 AM
Salute to your pen and a well done to the mind out of which this sea of wisdom emanated. A definite 7
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Date: 5/4/2016 6:22:00 PM
Wonderful story Suzanne.
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Date: 5/1/2016 7:52:00 AM
Excellent. Very heartwarming story. Well penned. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it
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Date: 4/30/2016 9:33:00 AM
Wow, this should be poem of the year! Fantastic piece! 7 all the way.
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Date: 4/30/2016 4:03:00 AM
Suzanne, that was awesome. I really enjoyed this piece. Thank you so much for sharing it with us all. Kindest regards, Craig
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Date: 4/28/2016 4:49:00 PM
ohh, i feel a sense of liberation through your glorious piece, suZ... spill ink for our brother animals... huggs
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 4/29/2016 4:06:00 PM
Yes Nette: they need lots of voices.....tons of ink. Hugs, SuZ
Date: 4/27/2016 1:48:00 PM
What a great turn around, and alternative situation, to your Words To a Poacher poem. We are fearfully and wonderfully made, it's true. Such a sad, sad situation the elephant fell into, but the story you re-told was joyous and triumphant to read. "like a pachydermal Gulliver she succumbed to their Lilliputian efforts" << great choice of words here ... I adored reading that book.
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 4/29/2016 4:00:00 PM
So pleased I triggered a happy memory for you. I think storybooks shape our thinking and images like these stay with us forever. Hugs, SuZ
Date: 4/27/2016 5:26:00 AM
SuZ, what a wonderful heartwarming story. This read like an article written by an experienced journalist! Superb! #7 ; )
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 4/29/2016 4:02:00 PM
Thanks Connie: Journalism would be a fun career. I never ven thought of it as a young girl. I was steered in the direction of being a nurse and loved it. Thanks for the 7 rating. Hugs, SuZ
Date: 4/27/2016 12:59:00 AM
The picture was sad, I know a story similar to the one you've written above. I'm teaching my granddaughter about elephants. Every week we learn a different kind/type of animals or mammals. To me the elephant is the most interesting. I'm glad to see so many work together. Every life matters. Enjoyed your story... xox. Linda
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 4/27/2016 1:28:00 AM
Thanks Linda: I saw a documentary a few years back about a similar rescue. This picture is of the most recent rescue. The big rescue we really need is to stop Poachers. I love Zebras, too. So good to see you and give your grand daughter. Hug from me. SuZ
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Date: 4/27/2016 1:00:00 AM
I also love the zebra;)
Date: 4/26/2016 12:15:00 AM
wow, what an amazing story and looks like it was taken from a headline! I love how you told this, Suz, and that last line. UNFORGETTABLE
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 4/27/2016 1:31:00 AM
Yes Andrea: the headline triggered the memory of a documentary I saw about 10 years ago where a large group rescued a bogged elephant. Because they can't speak doesn't mean they are not intelligent beings. We have so much to learn about animals but it may be too late already. Cheers, SuZ
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