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like a grumpy ogre the twisted old tree stood guard notched scraggy boughs reached out in fierce surety naught had ever compromised its task in its dutiable charge the primeval stone held fast the blade proud and righteous Caliburn its hilt pointed to the stars the enchanted issue of Merlin's resolve and steadfast keeper of the kingdom thankless was the old tree's post none would e'er recall its name no eye would shed a salty drip to its end nay an honored oath spoken to its passing still it stood through the countless sad losses when the Wee Ones would die in autumn such beautiful quiet deaths falling in color to the forest carpet one soft exquisite flight to their end each one by itself each one dear to the old tree still it stood fearless and proud for it alone would be the first to witness it alone would hear the whisper of the wind when it breathed the name of the new king when it heralded the name of freedom to the world when The One slipped the blade from its surly bonds and the ancient stone split in righteous temper knife and knight blade and banneret Caliburn and king! like a grumpy ogre the twisted old tree stood guard ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Unsheathe Your Sword" Poetry Contest John Lawless, Judge & Sponsor. * This poem is written in "Suzette Prime", (created by a PS member), which consists of lines of prime number syllable counts ONLY, no punctuation or capitalizations, and only of topics which lend themselves to a philosophical statement. *

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Date: 9/23/2018 11:36:00 PM
Wow, congrats on your awesome winner of a poem, Gregory. Superbly done.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/24/2018 12:09:00 AM
Many kind thanks to you, Line - I'm happy that you liked this one! Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 9/23/2018 4:35:00 PM
Congratulations on you win , Greg, wonderful with great imagery...Eve
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/24/2018 12:05:00 AM
Thank you SO much, Eve, that's such a nice comment! Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 9/22/2018 9:44:00 PM
Beautiful and dramatic story-telling, Gregory. Congratulations on your excellent trophy win with your exquisite and enchanting poem. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/23/2018 5:24:00 AM
That's such a sweet comment, Susan, and it means a great deal to me ... thank you so much, Dear Poet! Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 9/22/2018 8:12:00 PM
Congrats!!! my poetic brother...love & light...^WW^
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/23/2018 5:24:00 AM
Thank you, Brother, I am so pleased you liked this one! Blessings! :-)
Date: 9/22/2018 12:30:00 PM
SO beautiful, Greg. CONGRATS!! Janice
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/23/2018 5:23:00 AM
Many kind thanks, Janice - bless you! :-) <3
Date: 9/22/2018 12:06:00 PM
Congrats Greg on your 1st place!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/23/2018 5:23:00 AM
Thank you very much, LJ! :-)
Date: 9/22/2018 11:52:00 AM
Well Greg, in spite of my mathematical ineptitude this wonderful write swayed my poetic proclivities with it magnificent metaphoric melancholy and imagery. Thanks for participating in the contest
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/23/2018 5:23:00 AM
Thank you so much, John, I am so honored that you found it worthy of such placement, and humbled to be on a list with such wonderful writers ... this made my day, as this poem is special to me, and the only one of this form so far ... I must try it again, as it was quite enjoyable. Blessings! :-)
Date: 8/18/2017 2:35:00 AM
Congratulations on your win, Greg, love the story ~*
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/18/2017 3:09:00 AM
Thank you very much, Eve, I had never written a "Suzette Prime" before - it was a lot of fun! Blessings, Friend! :-)
Date: 8/16/2017 1:41:00 PM
Nice storytelling Greg, congrats on your nice 2nd place win!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/16/2017 9:36:00 PM
Thank you very much, John, I very much appreciate that!
Date: 8/16/2017 8:02:00 AM
Congratulations for your win Greg :)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/16/2017 9:35:00 PM
Thanks, Heidi - very kind of you, my friend! :-)
Date: 7/17/2017 6:15:00 AM
Excellent story telling Greg, good luck in the contest
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/17/2017 6:20:00 AM
Thank you, SO - a rare bit of fun, this! (And a new form for me - as most are) - much appreciated!