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Attraction is a small and fragile thing.
We started with stolen glances,
in crowded halls, across a coffee shop.
I was glancing (I hoped he was glancing).

It was hard, we lived in a rushed way.
We were on schedules, we had routines.
I had doubts about having a boyfriend
but they fell away, like leaves fall off trees.

I’d been warned, "don’t saddle trouble."

But finally, feeling that we were
deserving of love’s rich value,
we came together,
as marble-hearted sinners,
with the serpent's contempt
for God’s stable order.

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Date: 2/12/2024 7:22:00 PM
Hello Anais, The flirtatious game of half hidden glances at a prospective beau is caught with precision in your poem that explores desire, love, commitment. The biblical allusion of the serpent and "God's stable order" gives your posting added punch. The paradise of human mating is often seen with sin possibly lurking. A rich read and fine poetry indeed. Best wishes, Brian
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Anais Vionet
Date: 2/12/2024 8:01:00 PM
A wonderful review Brian, thank you =]
Date: 2/12/2024 6:21:00 PM
Dear Anais, you really delve into the delicate dance of attraction amidst the chaos of everyday life. The stolen glances and hesitant steps toward love resonate with authenticity. The imagery of falling doubts like leaves and the eventual embrace despite warnings evoke a sense of inevitability and defiance. Your portrayal of love's complexity, juxtaposed with the desire for stability, is both raw and captivating. The imagery of the serpent's contempt adds depth to the narrative, exploring themes of desire and rebellion. Your poem beautifully captures the essence of human connection and the complexities of love. Beautiful! Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 2/12/2024 6:32:00 PM
I love your review Daniel - thank you =]
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