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Fragile Hearts--You'Re Far Away

WHEN YOU'RE FAR AWAY F ar, far away you wandered off from our gate R eleasing all the warmth that binds us : that in A nticipation, I scanned through every G ift which may remind me of your affection... I nside nooks or corners of our room. The closets L eave a whiff of musk-- breathing it -- and in silence E ntrusting this fragile destiny to godly winds. H ow will i ever know the end of war’s final call? E ven night prayers hold me captive among lost stars A ssuming dear life shall find us on the hills again...but, R est eludes me while the moonlight dips low, lower T esting how brave our hearts could be : I am under S eige. I fold your robe; press it on my bosom...looking far, far away. Contest: Far Away Sponsored by Nayda Ivette Negron Re-submitted 7/9/2017

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Date: 8/1/2017 10:26:00 PM
Congratulations Nette on the placement of the contest.
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Date: 10/27/2016 9:54:00 PM
Nette, I find the line "How will I ever know the end of war's final call?" a very subtle turning point in this poem opening to wonder so many possibilities...Congrats on your placement.
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Date: 10/25/2016 8:52:00 AM
Love how you ended your acrostic: I am under siege... Congrats, Nette!
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Date: 10/25/2016 4:20:00 AM
I love your inimitable way of writing this acrostic, Nette!! Congrats for your WIN in the contest!! ;-)
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Date: 10/24/2016 9:55:00 PM
Wonderful write,Nette, congratulations on your win Hugs Eve
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Date: 10/24/2016 9:46:00 PM
If only someone was folding my robes. This poem has so much depth and warmth, loved it!
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Date: 10/24/2016 4:08:00 PM
Oh, Nette....what sad sweet write. I loved that last line...One can feel the longing that is rife in every line. Good luck in the contest, dear. Hugs
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Date: 10/24/2016 10:58:00 AM
You captured a moment of war battled on two fronts him being away and her heartbreak...lovely
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Date: 10/24/2016 10:08:00 AM
This is so sadly beautiful Nette. I could feel this as I read today.
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Date: 10/24/2016 10:02:00 AM
Dearest Nette, your heart is one the strongest I've met, in each and every word I've read set. Peace and many blessings to you my Sista.
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