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Fragile and Breathless

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she was fragile- delicate, like autumn fighting for reveries of crimson tides, delirium raced and left no trace, and before i whispered farewell- she was already gone. she spoke as if her awakening had arrived, yet- hid without telling me where to seek; ran over rivers not fearing bridges, fought with might while weak- the egregious demons she grew up with rippled into fears, all the why mes and what ifs- questions left unanswered leaving her breathless and me… restless. she was not self-centered, just a woman longing to see the snow-capped Rocky Mountains once again- (where she found herself lost in joy) she’s been gone for quite some time now- and even on obtuse nights when midnight breaks medallion dreams, i wonder why she felt indigent and abandoned. as i mediate the contradicting thoughts my mind wears, i remember why she left in the first place- to find PEACE. i shall consecrate her memory... by loving others as she loved me. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ August 15, 2019 Writing Challenge 2, November - A Poem Meaningful Sponsor, Dear Heart - Wisshkobi Ode

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Date: 11/23/2019 4:49:00 PM
Back for another read and I still love this poem, congrats on another win!
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Date: 11/20/2019 5:57:00 PM
Congrats on your win Lu Loo
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Date: 11/20/2019 3:40:00 PM
Lu congratulations on your win in my writing challenge, you never fail to bring me to tears with your beautiful words and voice ! You keep your sisters memory alive each time you write about how you feel about her leaving.
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Date: 9/12/2019 11:17:00 AM
Congratulations on your win, Lu. Great take with the words.
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Date: 9/14/2019 4:01:00 PM
thank you so much sweet Subimal :)-luloo
Date: 9/12/2019 10:02:00 AM
Consecrate her memory by loving others, wow Laura, that left an impact on me, congrats on an excellent write, little consolation knowing the subject matter, but writing about it does promote healing.
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Date: 9/14/2019 4:00:00 PM
thank you dear John for my placement, I am always honored when you like my muse...:)-luloo
Date: 9/12/2019 5:15:00 AM
Back to say congratulations on your win my friend :) hugs
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Lu Loo
Date: 9/14/2019 3:56:00 PM
hugs to you too! :)-luloo
Date: 9/12/2019 12:51:00 AM
Laura back once again to congratulate you on a well deserved win!;) you rock!;)
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Lu Loo
Date: 9/14/2019 3:56:00 PM
thank you sweet Brenda!! :)-luloo
Date: 8/16/2019 12:16:00 PM
Oh wow... this is absolutely an amazing write and i am sure it will take the top spot in the contest....marked with so much beauty yet the sadness of a heart than can never be erased! I stand in awe of your talented pen...a fave for me... hugs :)
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Date: 8/18/2019 9:40:00 AM
aww thank you! It is so rewarding reading such amazing comments. thank you sweet Sandra :)-luloo
Date: 8/16/2019 10:21:00 AM
I was about to turn off the computer when I found this poem and one other you wrote. So touching and flowing.
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Date: 8/16/2019 11:35:00 AM
I feel as if I don't deserve your kindness sometimes. I don't think you know how truly grateful I am to read your amazing kind comments. I will never know how to thank you, sometimes it's the little things that help us get through the day. The fact you read what my heart writes touches me deeply. Thank you sweet Sunlite my pretty friend. :)-luloo

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