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Fragile and Breathless

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she was fragile-
delicate, like autumn fighting 
for reveries of crimson tides,
delirium raced and left no trace,
and before I whispered farewell-
               she was already gone.

she spoke as if her awakening 
had arrived,
yet-
hid without telling me where 
to seek;
ran over rivers not fearing
bridges,
fought with might while weak-
the egregious demons she
grew up with rippled into fears,
all the why mes and what ifs-
questions left unanswered
leaving her breathless and me…
                                     restless.

she was not self-centered, 
just a woman longing to 
see the snow-capped Rocky
Mountains once again-
      (where she found herself lost in joy)

she’s been gone for quite some 
time now-
and even on obtuse nights when
midnight breaks medallion dreams,
I wonder why she felt indigent and
abandoned. 

as I mediate the contradicting 
thoughts my mind wears,
I remember why she left in 
the first place-
                  to find PEACE.

I shall consecrate her memory...
by loving others as she loved me.




Eight Word Challenge 9 Contest
John Hamilton
August 15, 2019


Copyright © | Year Posted 2019




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Date: 9/12/2019 11:17:00 AM
Congratulations on your win, Lu. Great take with the words.
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Lu Loo
Date: 9/14/2019 4:01:00 PM
thank you so much sweet Subimal :)-luloo
Date: 9/12/2019 10:02:00 AM
Consecrate her memory by loving others, wow Laura, that left an impact on me, congrats on an excellent write, little consolation knowing the subject matter, but writing about it does promote healing.
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Date: 9/14/2019 4:00:00 PM
thank you dear John for my placement, I am always honored when you like my muse...:)-luloo
Date: 9/12/2019 5:15:00 AM
Back to say congratulations on your win my friend :) hugs
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Lu Loo
Date: 9/14/2019 3:56:00 PM
hugs to you too! :)-luloo
Date: 9/12/2019 12:51:00 AM
Laura back once again to congratulate you on a well deserved win!;) you rock!;)
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Date: 9/14/2019 3:56:00 PM
thank you sweet Brenda!! :)-luloo
Date: 8/16/2019 12:16:00 PM
Oh wow... this is absolutely an amazing write and i am sure it will take the top spot in the contest....marked with so much beauty yet the sadness of a heart than can never be erased! I stand in awe of your talented pen...a fave for me... hugs :)
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Date: 8/18/2019 9:40:00 AM
aww thank you! It is so rewarding reading such amazing comments. thank you sweet Sandra :)-luloo
Date: 8/16/2019 10:21:00 AM
I was about to turn off the computer when I found this poem and one other you wrote. So touching and flowing.
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Date: 8/16/2019 11:35:00 AM
I feel as if I don't deserve your kindness sometimes. I don't think you know how truly grateful I am to read your amazing kind comments. I will never know how to thank you, sometimes it's the little things that help us get through the day. The fact you read what my heart writes touches me deeply. Thank you sweet Sunlite my pretty friend. :)-luloo