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Fortunate Victim

You kill me
Only every time we meet
My body stops there for you 
And my mind falls to pieces

You remind me of how I would like to die
In a moment of happiness without reason
Wanting nothing more
Needing only this and you and nothing more

I am a fortunate victim
Most people don't get the chance
To love their murderer

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/16/2016 8:50:00 PM

wow, Jeff, I love this poem!! Dramatic and effective.

Jeff Davies
Date: 10/17/2016 4:21:00 AM

Thank you very much Andrea

Skat A

Date: 9/15/2016 11:31:00 PM

JEFF, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :) Drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs **YNR - SKAT

Jeff Davies
Date: 9/16/2016 5:00:00 PM

Hi,thanks a lot, everyone is so nice here. Thanks for reading and it's finally the weekend so I'll have some time to sit and enjoy some poems myself. I'll check yours out for sure, thanks again

Cyndi Macmillan

Date: 9/13/2016 8:33:00 PM

Hi Jeff, a fellow Canuck, Yeah! I really liked the line, "I am a fortunate victim" Reminds me Credence Clearwater. Read below that you have been reading here for a year. (friendly chuckle here) then what in the world took you so long to become a member? :D Okay, so we're an oddball group, known to have the occasional brawl, say too much and laugh to loud... but that shoulda made you wanna join the party earlier... Cheers. Cyndi

Jeff Davies
Date: 9/14/2016 4:32:00 PM

Hi, thanks for writing. Ya I'm made in Canada and who doesn't like CCR! I think I procrastinated too long but glad be on here now. Thanks again, I'll check out your writing.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/13/2016 3:50:00 PM

Jeff, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@

Jeff Davies
Date: 9/13/2016 6:33:00 PM

Hi thanks for the message good to be on here. I've been reading here for a year and have already enjoyed your work. Constructive criticism is welcome. If I have any poetic skill it is blind luck. I write because I enjoy the process and to see what comes out. I will continue to enjoy your poems, thanks again Jeff

Jeff Davies
Date: 9/13/2016 6:29:00 PM

hi again did my last message go through