Black Eyed Susan Poet Rhyme

Fluff

Maybe you were foaming at the mouth
Brain dead from reading so many poems now
That one more poem, my poem, was just too much
For you, depleted of original thought, to touch
And so you succumbed to the Horror I see
The “Great Work!” comment you left for me 

I can only hope that in your stupor
You didn’t realize your false sounding blooper
Because I would hate to think that your message was Fluff
To stroke my ego, or because you couldn’t scrounge up
Even one nice thing to say 
About my writing today 

The question remains, haunting my brain:
Did you honestly like it and just take the short cut,
Or did you pump me up with a load of fluff?


1/31/12
Received 1st place in Carol's "Fluff" contest

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July 12, 2012 at 9:42 AM You are truly gifted...I sense pain in your life and I hope it's not so.... "Love"

Nick Bagnall May 3, 2012 at 12:33 PM Congrats on the win, liked the sentiment and the rhyming, and to be fair the comments are quire funny too! Thanks for you comments, you have some interting titles which I'll be back to read later

Poet Destroyer A May 2, 2012 at 7:37 PM Hello, Susan;-) I see you won first place in my contest with your fluff poem. I remember why! I super enjoyed this poem. Your bottom question was amazing. Can you imagine being pumped with a load of fluff by everyone! As if it exist, that is the beauty of fluff it can be anything and come from anyone. I'm enjoyed my interpretation on your win. Nathan, is always telling me how good my work is. lots of BS~ coming from him. I liked the first second third and forth time i read this poem. xox~PD

Kim Merryman March 7, 2012 at 9:15 PM This question has crossed my mind a time or two. Congrats on your win in PD's contest, Susan! Love, Kim

Carol Sunshine Brown March 7, 2012 at 6:24 AM A belated congratulations on your win in P.D.'s contest Susan. Love, Carol

Bob Quigley March 6, 2012 at 8:36 AM I think you have put in words what many of us question silently and to which at some time or another we can all plead guilty. This is a "Great Work". Really!!

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders March 5, 2012 at 8:20 PM Congrats on your win, Susan. I really like it...not pumping you up with fluff! LOL, Blessings, Rhonda

Linda-Marie Sweetheart March 5, 2012 at 8:12 PM congrats Susan on an eloquent write and win luv.. top notch poetry .. cool piece..

Ralph Taylor March 5, 2012 at 9:36 AM Congrats, Sue. Excellent write. Nice going. hugs, Ralph

Poet Destroyer A March 4, 2012 at 6:57 PM Susan,, .congratulations! in my contest...muched enjoyed your entry,;-) always*PD

Poet Destroyer A February 12, 2012 at 2:25 AM SUSAN,, stopping by to wish you a SWEET VALENTINE.. AND A WONDERFUL , congratulations... ON your wonderful win In this awesome contest. Enjoyed ;-) . have yourself a wonderful valentines. @lways & @lways *xox~PD

Samual Ronthorpe February 10, 2012 at 12:41 PM You woke us up....Or did you just catch us off guard? Either event, well done.....Congratulations ( <---- see, no 'congrats') on a very clever write and well deserved win. ..........How's that for fluff?

Carol Sunshine Brown February 10, 2012 at 11:59 AM Congratulations on your placement in my "FLUFF" contest Susan. Love, Carol

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl February 10, 2012 at 1:29 AM Brilliant love it no cut and paste comments here for you congratulations xx

Carrie Richards February 9, 2012 at 8:06 PM I love the message in this outstanding piece! I too, tire of just a bit of fluff, sort of seems like a piece wasn't read at all. Well said, Susan!

Ralph Taylor February 9, 2012 at 5:35 PM Congrats, Sue. Great piece. Enjoyed. Nice going. luv Ralph

Linda-Marie Sweetheart February 9, 2012 at 4:56 PM congrats Susan on a magnificent first place win for this awesome write on Fluff.. super one..luv.. thankxx for enjoying my Metamorphosis ... it was written for someone very special who was taken from my life a while ago..luv..

Lizanne Scholtz February 9, 2012 at 4:15 PM Congratulations on your win Susan, love Elizabeth

Andrea Dietrich February 9, 2012 at 4:08 PM Wow, look at YOU. First place, lady. WAY to GO.

David Williams February 9, 2012 at 3:25 PM Susan congrats on your win, no fluff at all..David

Riekie Briel February 4, 2012 at 4:02 PM Daarsy! Translated from Afrikaans 'There you are'! This is what I surmised the moment I've read your first poem though I did not comment on it, but I just 'felt' I'm going to like this ones writing in some of her poems and there you are, this is the poetry I thought you have in you to do. Good!

Andrea Dietrich January 31, 2012 at 10:42 PM WEll, THIS is not fluff, Susan. I think you did a fine job of portraying the disappointment we sometimes feel by comments here. Actually, I don't think "great work" is such a bad comment to leave someone but it all depends on the poem being reviewed and by the normal responses of the giver of such a comments. I love what you said in the last three lines, but don't sell yourself short, Sweetie. It was NOT the second reason. that is for sure!!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart January 31, 2012 at 8:17 PM wow Susanm.. excellent write and such an entertaining piece too.. coordinated thoughts make this one so much more than fluff.. good luck in contest by Carol..a definite winning wonder..

Glenn Sentes January 31, 2012 at 7:06 PM Fluffing's not my cup of tea! I leave comments that are sincere and honest. I must admit, this is a winning masterpiece! Congratulations in advance, Ms. Susan! Fluflessly yours, Glenn =)

Barbara Gorelick January 31, 2012 at 6:11 PM A great take on the topic..no fluff intented...BG

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