Flight

A coin toss, brothers look eagerly as they vie The dawn awaits the newest bird to take flight in the sky Silver wings above, God's handiwork meets the eye.

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/13/2010 5:27:00 PM

Daniel, Congratulations on your win in this contest. It is beautifully written and going into my fav's. A poem dear to my heart as I flew the big birds for so many many years as a stewardess (flight attendant). Aloha, Connie

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/9/2010 9:10:00 AM

Congratulations Daniel on your win in Barbara Gorelick's contest "Your Favorite Form Of Transportation". Love, Carol

Brandee Augustus

Date: 8/8/2010 8:53:00 PM

Nice! I think it flowed nicely and it was beautifully written piece. It actually read like it was light and airy. Congratulations on getting an honourable mention. I liked this!

James Fraser

Date: 8/7/2010 9:27:00 AM

Clever Sojo Daniel. What euphoria there must have been when they first escaped the gravital force. Many congratulations on your win. Thank you for your always kind words >> James

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/6/2010 9:43:00 PM

A very original take on the theme. Congrats with your win, Daniel. LUv, Andrea

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 8/6/2010 8:27:00 AM

Ah, the Wright Brothers achieved an awesome feet that day at Kittyhawk. I actually dated one of their descendents when I was in college. Great poem. Congratulations on your success in the contest! Love, Carolyn

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/5/2010 9:50:00 PM

Congrats on your HM win, Daniel

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/5/2010 9:39:00 PM

Congrats Dan on your HM in BG's contest with this great write.. luv the flow and those silver wings.. awesome.. enjoy another special honor my friend..with luv..

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 8/5/2010 9:34:00 PM

Thank you Daniel for participating in my contest. Very nice piece. BG

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/3/2010 4:31:00 PM

lovely form of sijo,, I'm not too familiar with the form but I did like this write,, enjoyed...P.D.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/3/2010 2:58:00 PM

The scene was easy to picture with this very descriptive write..Keep the creative pen flowing..Sara