Fleeting Moments

When this memory unravels
like a ribbon pulled undone,
when these feelings start to falter
like a thousand setting suns.

Give me back my fleeting moments,
let the sun shine on my face.
Let them melt the creeping shadows,
pull my spirit from this place.

If the lights go off forever,
will you lend me your belief?
If they waver, let them flicker.
Give me just one moment's peace.

If the wind begins to temper,
if the waves rescind from shore,
send them back with growing power.
Don't you know I crave the storm?

Give me back my fleeting moments,
let the rain pour down my face.
Let them melt the creeping shadows,
pull my spirit from this place.

When this memory unravels
like a ribbon pulled undone,
when these feelings start to falter
like a thousand setting suns.

Give me back my fleeting moments,
let the sun shine on my face.
Let them melt the creeping shadows,
pull my spirit from this place.

Pull my spirit from this place.



Written: November 9, 2015
For Craig's "Homeward Bound" Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015


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Date: 3/19/2016 4:45:00 AM
"when these feelings start to falter like a thousand setting suns."...you've really put me in this piece with such memorable lines throughout Heather. This is a beautiful poem with a most intriguing refrain. I am enamored by this..very elegant, I like the use of unravel and linking it with a ribbon being pulled. Very pretty imagery. Love this! Always, Laura
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Date: 1/19/2016 10:23:00 PM
Enjoyed Your poem greatly, heather. Excellently written.
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Date: 12/21/2015 9:45:00 AM
question for you at soupmail.
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Date: 12/15/2015 1:52:00 AM
Congratulations!
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Date: 11/20/2015 11:42:00 PM
Greetings Heather. Congrats to your #1 placement in the contest! ;-)
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Date: 11/20/2015 10:59:00 PM
Congrats on ur awesome win with these superb lyrics Heather!
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Date: 11/20/2015 8:04:00 PM
Heather, Congratulations on your Homeward Bound win. SKAT
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Date: 11/20/2015 7:21:00 PM
Heather, congratulations on your wonderful win these beautiful lyrics ~
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Date: 11/20/2015 2:51:00 PM
I played the music while reading your lyrics, and it couldn't be a better fit!! Wow, Heather, this is wonderful!
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Date: 11/20/2015 12:38:00 PM
These are very beautiful and lyrical words that you have penned, Heather! Great job and congrats :)
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Date: 11/20/2015 11:34:00 AM
Absolutely beautiful Heather - I have the melody in my head so could sing along to your lovely lyrics - congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 11/16/2015 1:28:00 PM
A great poem woven with rare poetic skill. I enjoyed reading from the first letter to the last. #7.
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Date: 11/14/2015 7:30:00 PM
Reading this a second time and thinking how utterly amazing it is. you truly deserve first place with this one!! oh and I see Connie agrees!!
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Date: 11/14/2015 3:36:00 PM
Your poem is amazing Heather! I too love the cleansing power of a rain storm. I wrote about it in crystal rain. I really hope to see this poem a top winner! Your repeating lines add to the strength of this beautiful poem.
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Date: 11/13/2015 10:31:00 AM
pull my Spirit from this place, to His Heavenly Grace, while the sunshine rains down on my face, now i'm Eternally Safe, no more earthly disgrace, all of which comes at an instantly pace....very Beautiful and inspiring song heather....I hope you liked my short remix....;)
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Date: 11/9/2015 4:02:00 PM
I have not even listened to this music yet, but it sure seems to have a lyrical quality. I love how you did this and the way you repeated key lines, like that final line. Awesome!
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Date: 11/9/2015 11:57:00 AM
"Give me back my fleeting moments, Let the rain pour down my face - Let them melt the creeping shadows, pull my spirit from this place". Simply Divine! You obviously "think a bit" before writing your poetry, Heather. A 7+. Warmest regards! :) john
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