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Fleeing Emptiness

Moon is still behind glum clouds
Sullen is the garb of a silent sky
So much like how he feels tonight
Anxious in the night laden in dark

Stars are opaquely hanging listless
Like the glimmer of her grieved vibes
Dimming in saddened teary eyes
Refusing to proffer a happy smile

A chatter heard from birds’ nest
Breaks their muffled silence
Quivering pulse of anguished feelings
Rattling summer’s lavender dreams
Drifting away in coral winds
From fragrant garden’s ruby appeal

A lone bird now leaves its abode
And sits close by, staring at him
Ambivalent of travails it heard
Unsure to yield, unwilling to leave

Bawl of strife’s persistent despair
Slowly fades in decaying night
As moon is starting to pierce dark,
So are the twinkles of distant stars
Waning in purple of rising dawn
Glinting on blush of the tinted arc

Seeing the lone bird sprinting above
Spanning wings in blazing speed
Fleeing emptiness of vacant scene
Much like him… way ahead of him

July 12, 2020
July Na Or Hm Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Constance La France
Hm received in contest judged on 7/14/2020
Contest Name: Completely New (9) Any Form Any Theme

Copyright © Vijay Pandit | Year Posted 2020

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Valsa George Date: 12/31/2021 8:07:00 PM "Seeing the lone bird sprinting above Spanning wings in blazing speed Fleeing emptiness of vacant scene Much like him… way ahead of him" When feeling empty and devoid of cheer, look closely to nature. There we will see something to boost our spirits and calm our frayed nerves. As ever beautifully expressed dear friend ! Login to Reply

Angela Crabtree Date: 10/11/2020 3:24:00 PM A beautiful dark masterpiece, Vijay. Your imagery is perfect! ~Angie Login to Reply

Aditi Mishra Date: 8/1/2020 9:07:00 PM It is so strange that the silence of beautiful nature heals our agony but also enchances that emptiness which we normally conceal in our hearts. Your muse is an exemplary portrayal of those emotions. Congratulations on your win Vijay :) Login to Reply

V. Deepa Date: 7/31/2020 12:00:00 AM Wow I loved each of your lines which holds your powerful feelings Vijay sir:-)It's a fave for me:-) Congratulations on your lovely win.Keep writing and keep glowing:-)Take care.Warm regards:-) Login to Reply

Constance La France Date: 7/29/2020 5:46:00 PM Vijay, congratulations on your win in NA/HM contest with this wonderful write _Constance Login to Reply

Eve Roper Date: 7/29/2020 1:32:00 PM Great imagery in each stanza, Vijay. Congratulations on your win in Constance contest. Hugs Eve Login to Reply

Caren Krutsinger Date: 7/25/2020 12:50:00 AM Your imagery tantalizes. "Quivering pulse of anguished feelings Rattling summer’s lavender dreams Drifting away in coral winds From fragrant garden’s ruby appeal" Wow! Login to Reply

Paul Callus Date: 7/18/2020 5:06:00 PM Vivid imagery never fails you, Vijay. A feeling of anguish runs throughout the poem..a sign of a capable pen! Regards // paul Login to Reply

Jennifer Proxenos Date: 7/18/2020 12:06:00 PM Imagination, creativity and an absolute fascination are the ingredients required to produce a gem of a poem Vijay - excellent -hope you are well and safe! Blessings and hugs, Jennifer. Login to Reply

Heidi Sands Date: 7/18/2020 11:50:00 AM Amazing 3rd stanza. Well written Vijay. I felt myself deep in the poem reading it :) Login to Reply

Eve Roper Date: 7/18/2020 9:23:00 AM imagery in this setting is so visual in your canvas, great work, Vijay Login to Reply

Adeniji Toluwalope Gideon Date: 7/17/2020 7:24:00 AM What a great delight to behold this. You bring life to nature and create an art in my heart dear Pandit. Much love, Adeniji Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 7/17/2020 3:59:00 PM Much appreciate, Adeniji--many many thanks.

Janice Canerdy Date: 7/16/2020 7:35:00 AM Beautiful meditative piece, Vijay. That little bird inspires me. Janice Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 7/17/2020 7:36:00 AM Much appreciate Janice--many thanks.

Joseph May Date: 7/15/2020 4:55:00 PM Sometimes gloomy skies reflect our moods but the moon and stars pierce through the gloom eventually, Well penned Vijay Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 7/17/2020 7:36:00 AM Thank you Joseph--much appreciate.

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 7/15/2020 11:22:00 AM This is truly brilliant, Vijay! It's very interesting. I've felt the same connection to "lone birds" I see at the beach. That last line is awesome! A fave for me! Hugs, Carolyn Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 7/17/2020 7:35:00 AM So very kind of you, Carolyn--much appreciate--many thanks. And a special thank you for the FAVE.

Harry Horsman Date: 7/15/2020 3:22:00 AM Dear Bard, so classic is your poetry, so meaningful and apt... Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 7/17/2020 7:34:00 AM Thank you Harry-much appreciate.

Ann Gilmour Date: 7/15/2020 3:10:00 AM The emptiness in your poetic words is heartbreaking and so full of sadness ~ yet beautiful too dear Vijay. Your talent shines through each and every word dear poet - thank you. With kindest thoughts Ann xx Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 7/17/2020 7:34:00 AM Thank you for the kind remarks, Ann--much appreciate, as always.

Brandy Nicole Date: 7/14/2020 11:08:00 PM That empty feeling tangles around my heart, while reading your words. This is beautiful, yet emotional- all at the same time. ~ Brandy Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 7/17/2020 7:33:00 AM Much appreciate my friend--many thanks, Brandy.

Jennifer Proxenos Date: 7/14/2020 12:40:00 PM A fantastic, breathtaking write dear Vijay, keep spilling that winning ink - absolutely wonderful. Blessings, Jennifer. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 7/17/2020 7:33:00 AM Much appreciate my friend--many thanks, Jennifer.

Brenda Chiri Date: 7/14/2020 10:58:00 AM So many gorgeous lines congrats my friend!;) Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 7/17/2020 7:32:00 AM Thank you my friend--much appreciate.

Michelle Faulkner Date: 7/13/2020 8:30:00 PM This gives me the feeling of flying, alone on the wind, love the line 'Unsure to yield, unwilling to leave' - so lovely! Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 7/14/2020 7:19:00 AM Much appreciate Michelle--many thanks for your visit and comments.

Mystic Rose Rose Date: 7/13/2020 4:22:00 PM Birds are very much like us. They long to take their freedom to new heights every chance they get. You seem to have a keen eye for nature and creatures of the sky , Lovely xo Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 7/13/2020 4:34:00 PM Thank you my friend--much appreciate your comments, Vienna.

Mike Gentile Date: 7/13/2020 3:02:00 PM I too can relate to the feeling of emptiness you have created with your image filled write. You succeeded so well in its execution. I really enjoyed!! Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 7/13/2020 4:33:00 PM Thank you Mike--much appreciate your visit and comments.

Regina Mcintosh Date: 7/13/2020 7:49:00 AM Beautiful, my friend,... inspires creativity because it flows with pure creativity. Thank you for the inspiration and God bless you Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 7/13/2020 9:25:00 AM Many thanks Gina--much appreciate.

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 7/13/2020 6:00:00 AM Poetic beauty dissipates anxiety and gloom my friend Vijay! Excellent writing! Blessings. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 7/13/2020 9:24:00 AM Thank you my friend--much appreciate, Demetrios.

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