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Fleeing Emptiness

Moon is still behind glum clouds Sullen is the garb of a silent sky So much like how he feels tonight Anxious in the night laden in dark Stars are opaquely hanging listless Like the glimmer of her grieved vibes Dimming in saddened teary eyes Refusing to proffer a happy smile A chatter heard from birds’ nest Breaks their muffled silence Quivering pulse of anguished feelings Rattling summer’s lavender dreams Drifting away in coral winds From fragrant garden’s ruby appeal A lone bird now leaves its abode And sits close by, staring at him Ambivalent of travails it heard Unsure to yield, unwilling to leave Bawl of strife’s persistent despair Slowly fades in decaying night As moon is starting to pierce dark, So are the twinkles of distant stars Waning in purple of rising dawn Glinting on blush of the tinted arc Seeing the lone bird sprinting above Spanning wings in blazing speed Fleeing emptiness of vacant scene Much like him… way ahead of him July 12, 2020 July Na Or Hm Poetry Contest Sponsor: Constance La France Hm received in contest judged on 7/14/2020 Contest Name: Completely New (9) Any Form Any Theme

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Date: 12/31/2021 8:07:00 PM
"Seeing the lone bird sprinting above Spanning wings in blazing speed Fleeing emptiness of vacant scene Much like him… way ahead of him" When feeling empty and devoid of cheer, look closely to nature. There we will see something to boost our spirits and calm our frayed nerves. As ever beautifully expressed dear friend !
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Date: 10/11/2020 3:24:00 PM
A beautiful dark masterpiece, Vijay. Your imagery is perfect! ~Angie
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Date: 8/1/2020 9:07:00 PM
It is so strange that the silence of beautiful nature heals our agony but also enchances that emptiness which we normally conceal in our hearts. Your muse is an exemplary portrayal of those emotions. Congratulations on your win Vijay :)
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Date: 7/31/2020 12:00:00 AM
Wow I loved each of your lines which holds your powerful feelings Vijay sir:-)It's a fave for me:-) Congratulations on your lovely win.Keep writing and keep glowing:-)Take care.Warm regards:-)
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Date: 7/29/2020 5:46:00 PM
Vijay, congratulations on your win in NA/HM contest with this wonderful write _Constance
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Date: 7/29/2020 1:32:00 PM
Great imagery in each stanza, Vijay. Congratulations on your win in Constance contest. Hugs Eve
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Date: 7/25/2020 12:50:00 AM
Your imagery tantalizes. "Quivering pulse of anguished feelings Rattling summer’s lavender dreams Drifting away in coral winds From fragrant garden’s ruby appeal" Wow!
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Date: 7/18/2020 5:06:00 PM
Vivid imagery never fails you, Vijay. A feeling of anguish runs throughout the poem..a sign of a capable pen! Regards // paul
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Date: 7/18/2020 12:06:00 PM
Imagination, creativity and an absolute fascination are the ingredients required to produce a gem of a poem Vijay - excellent -hope you are well and safe! Blessings and hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 7/18/2020 11:50:00 AM
Amazing 3rd stanza. Well written Vijay. I felt myself deep in the poem reading it :)
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Date: 7/18/2020 9:23:00 AM
imagery in this setting is so visual in your canvas, great work, Vijay
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Date: 7/17/2020 7:24:00 AM
What a great delight to behold this. You bring life to nature and create an art in my heart dear Pandit. Much love, Adeniji
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/17/2020 3:59:00 PM
Much appreciate, Adeniji--many many thanks.
Date: 7/16/2020 7:35:00 AM
Beautiful meditative piece, Vijay. That little bird inspires me. Janice
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Date: 7/17/2020 7:36:00 AM
Much appreciate Janice--many thanks.
Date: 7/15/2020 4:55:00 PM
Sometimes gloomy skies reflect our moods but the moon and stars pierce through the gloom eventually, Well penned Vijay
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Date: 7/17/2020 7:36:00 AM
Thank you Joseph--much appreciate.
Date: 7/15/2020 11:22:00 AM
This is truly brilliant, Vijay! It's very interesting. I've felt the same connection to "lone birds" I see at the beach. That last line is awesome! A fave for me! Hugs, Carolyn
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/17/2020 7:35:00 AM
So very kind of you, Carolyn--much appreciate--many thanks. And a special thank you for the FAVE.
Date: 7/15/2020 3:22:00 AM
Dear Bard, so classic is your poetry, so meaningful and apt...
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/17/2020 7:34:00 AM
Thank you Harry-much appreciate.
Date: 7/15/2020 3:10:00 AM
The emptiness in your poetic words is heartbreaking and so full of sadness ~ yet beautiful too dear Vijay. Your talent shines through each and every word dear poet - thank you. With kindest thoughts Ann xx
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/17/2020 7:34:00 AM
Thank you for the kind remarks, Ann--much appreciate, as always.
Date: 7/14/2020 11:08:00 PM
That empty feeling tangles around my heart, while reading your words. This is beautiful, yet emotional- all at the same time. ~ Brandy
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/17/2020 7:33:00 AM
Much appreciate my friend--many thanks, Brandy.
Date: 7/14/2020 12:40:00 PM
A fantastic, breathtaking write dear Vijay, keep spilling that winning ink - absolutely wonderful. Blessings, Jennifer.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/17/2020 7:33:00 AM
Much appreciate my friend--many thanks, Jennifer.
Date: 7/14/2020 10:58:00 AM
So many gorgeous lines congrats my friend!;)
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Date: 7/17/2020 7:32:00 AM
Thank you my friend--much appreciate.
Date: 7/13/2020 8:30:00 PM
This gives me the feeling of flying, alone on the wind, love the line 'Unsure to yield, unwilling to leave' - so lovely!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/14/2020 7:19:00 AM
Much appreciate Michelle--many thanks for your visit and comments.
Date: 7/13/2020 4:22:00 PM
Birds are very much like us. They long to take their freedom to new heights every chance they get. You seem to have a keen eye for nature and creatures of the sky , Lovely xo
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/13/2020 4:34:00 PM
Thank you my friend--much appreciate your comments, Vienna.
Date: 7/13/2020 3:02:00 PM
I too can relate to the feeling of emptiness you have created with your image filled write. You succeeded so well in its execution. I really enjoyed!!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/13/2020 4:33:00 PM
Thank you Mike--much appreciate your visit and comments.
Date: 7/13/2020 7:49:00 AM
Beautiful, my friend,... inspires creativity because it flows with pure creativity. Thank you for the inspiration and God bless you
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/13/2020 9:25:00 AM
Many thanks Gina--much appreciate.
Date: 7/13/2020 6:00:00 AM
Poetic beauty dissipates anxiety and gloom my friend Vijay! Excellent writing! Blessings.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/13/2020 9:24:00 AM
Thank you my friend--much appreciate, Demetrios.
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