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Flawless You

I am in your arms tonight
Can you feel me there?
All I am is breaking,
And I need your heart to hold

Together let us search through the rubble
To find treasures others would be blind to 
I know that if I search with you
We will find happiness
We will find that love is kind
Your strength...I need it now
My words are running cold
Please hold,
Please hold me now

I have lost a soul I cannot bear
I have lost a part of me in a tumultuous sea
Of anger, misunderstanding and sadness...

As all of reality fades into us,
I ask you to show me your deepest side,
Your most beauteous light
So when I close my eyes in this fantasy
I will see beyond the pain
Beyond me
And into flawless you

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 4/6/2016 6:26:00 PM
What a wonderful piece of work!!! Loved the ending really spoke to me!! Great job!! -Love Ettie
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 4/7/2016 9:26:00 PM
Thanks so much for reading this, Ettie! Means a lot ! ~Laura
Date: 2/17/2016 12:12:00 AM
Engaging, and filled with longing. It sounds as though your lover is much more than a shoulder to cry on, but a compliment to your sadness. A completion that makes you whole. A beautiful title for a heartfelt poem.
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Date: 1/17/2016 2:26:00 PM
We hope that there is someone we can look into and see beautiful thoughts and motivations. I try to look for those things. Then, we hope to return the favor. Relationships are just difficult, but a little forgiveness and appreciation will smooth over most things. So, I can understand that this is a wish that might be a fantasy only for now. I believe you will find your needs fulfilled. Could it be any other way? Of course, you have to be your own best friend at times. Treat yourself well--yes.
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Date: 1/14/2016 7:09:00 AM
A very beautiful and emotional poem..wishes - shaista
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Date: 1/7/2016 6:58:00 PM
"Together let us search through the rubble to find treasures others would be blind too..." Mmm...this exploration of love between two devoted lovers just makes me sigh sweetly Laura, inhaling smoothly the perfume of your romantic, journeying spirit. This is flawless love woman, it excites me with the pleasure of sharing love risk in a dangerous world. I love this poem so much!!! A FAV...J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/13/2016 3:13:00 AM
Glad you love it! You understand its depth like no other. Yes, always journeying...(: ~Laura
Date: 1/7/2016 6:03:00 PM
Beautiful thoughts expressed with such heartfelt plea to the beloved. Love does give us that rose colored vision, making the cherished person flawless in our eyes. Awesome write! PS. Check beauteous. hugs!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/13/2016 3:12:00 AM
Ah, thanks for the catch, love! And thank you as always for the in-depth commentary - very much appreciated Kim! ~Laura
Date: 1/7/2016 5:11:00 PM
silent one said it all, love is so great, I hope you find that soothing balm...excellent write Laura
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/13/2016 3:11:00 AM
Thanks, White Sage. I read some of your poetry today on your page...wow...so beautiful... loving your work! ~Laura
Date: 1/7/2016 2:35:00 PM
awesome
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/13/2016 3:10:00 AM
Glad to have you stop by! (: ~Laura
Date: 1/7/2016 11:25:00 AM
A beautiful write, Laura. T.J
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/13/2016 3:10:00 AM
Thank you, T.J (: ~Laura