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Flattened Coins 2

Penny kneeled down on the track To put some coins on their back In order to see the coins become flat Penny kneeled down on the track Envying the coins direction at Their journey forward onward Penny kneeled down on the track To put some coins on their back Russell Sivey In the Afterglow

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/15/2011 10:43:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved placement in Nette's "In The Afterglow" contest Russell. Love, Carol

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/14/2011 8:37:00 PM

Congratulations on the win in the contest of nette,Russell

John Freeman

Date: 8/14/2011 5:46:00 PM

Russell, Great to see your poem doing well in Nette's contest. Congratulations on your worthy poem's place. Agape, Moses

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/14/2011 4:32:00 PM

Congrats Russell on your top ten win in Nette's contest with this exquisite entry luv..enjoy..

Joyce Johnson

Date: 8/7/2011 9:50:00 PM

Very nice A difficult theme and difficult form to do. Joyce

Don Johnson

Date: 8/7/2011 7:00:00 PM

interesting swerve on the curb, and Dr Ram is right, Its morning over here, you are in dark of night? on ya mate, Don

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/7/2011 6:34:00 PM

Wonderful take withis Triolet form, Russell

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/7/2011 5:58:00 PM

Excellent repeat line which gave you an open door to fill in..Enjoyed reading this eve..Reads like a winner to me..Good luck in the contest..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara

Jack Ross Jr.

Date: 8/7/2011 4:41:00 PM

Entertaining write mate I'll take all those coins if you don't care...lol...with love...old Jack

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/7/2011 4:30:00 PM

very interesting followup Russell.. great how everyone thought of a different view of the photo.. good luck in the contest and yes ..we are not supposed to live by our emotions..they always get us into trouble it seems..so for the moment I thought of locking them away but not permanently luv.. glad u related to the write..