Russell Sivey Poet Triolet

Flattened Coins 2

Penny kneeled down on the track
To put some coins on their back
In order to see the coins become flat
Penny kneeled down on the track
Envying the coins direction at
Their journey forward onward
Penny kneeled down on the track
To put some coins on their back

Russell Sivey
In the Afterglow

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Carol Sunshine Brown August 15, 2011 at 10:43 AM Congratulations on your well deserved placement in Nette's "In The Afterglow" contest Russell. Love, Carol

Dr.Ram Mehta August 14, 2011 at 8:37 PM Congratulations on the win in the contest of nette,Russell

John Freeman August 14, 2011 at 5:46 PM Russell, Great to see your poem doing well in Nette's contest. Congratulations on your worthy poem's place. Agape, Moses

Linda-Marie Sweetheart August 14, 2011 at 4:32 PM Congrats Russell on your top ten win in Nette's contest with this exquisite entry luv..enjoy..

Joyce Johnson August 7, 2011 at 9:50 PM Very nice A difficult theme and difficult form to do. Joyce

Don Johnson August 7, 2011 at 7:00 PM interesting swerve on the curb, and Dr Ram is right, Its morning over here, you are in dark of night? on ya mate, Don

Dr.Ram Mehta August 7, 2011 at 6:34 PM Wonderful take withis Triolet form, Russell

Sara Kendrick August 7, 2011 at 5:58 PM Excellent repeat line which gave you an open door to fill in..Enjoyed reading this eve..Reads like a winner to me..Good luck in the contest..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara

Jack Ross Jr. August 7, 2011 at 4:41 PM Entertaining write mate I'll take all those coins if you don't care...lol...with love...old Jack

Linda-Marie Sweetheart August 7, 2011 at 4:30 PM very interesting followup Russell.. great how everyone thought of a different view of the photo.. good luck in the contest and yes ..we are not supposed to live by our emotions..they always get us into trouble it seems..so for the moment I thought of locking them away but not permanently luv.. glad u related to the write..