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Flat Tire On a Rainy Day

The swish of some passing cars unnerving me still With the rapid clack of my windshield wipers, When, suddenly, I felt a most unwanted chill Like the rapid hiss of a hundred captured vipers. And I knew, at the worst time possible, my tire Right front, passenger side, was now a crumble, Just when my AAA card was about to expire, So, I steered it to the berm feeling the flat rumble. I sat sullen, waiting for the downpour to retire, While several vehicles zip by me at ridiculous speeds None of them, I understood, stopping to inquire Why I was pulled over to the side … or my needs. When the rain finally abated, and I shuffled outside Four creaking vehicles stopped, offering me a ride! written October 17, 2021 especially for "Onamatopoeia" Poetry Contest sponsored by Emile Pinet [Rhymes checked with rhymezone.com]

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Date: 10/18/2021 1:25:00 PM
Marvelous write for Emile's contest.
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 10/18/2021 1:33:00 PM
Thanks. I had to struggle to get those words, until I found that Google has a list of them. I checked mine there.
Date: 10/17/2021 3:51:00 PM
Milton, you have written a fantastic poem that tells the required words effectively, with a great flow and rhyme. Your beautiful words added to the allure of your poetry.
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 10/17/2021 7:28:00 PM
Thanks, Lasaad.
Date: 10/17/2021 1:21:00 PM
Fine write Milton, telling this one very well with nice flow and rhyme too. take care, Gordon
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 10/17/2021 1:27:00 PM
Thanks, Gordon. I really appreciated hearing from you and your kind response was most appreciated.
Date: 10/17/2021 12:26:00 PM
A flat is a pain in the rear whatever the weather Milton. Funny though, it always seems to rain when disaster strikes. You used the Onamatopoeia words well. Best of luck in the contest Tom
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 10/17/2021 1:06:00 PM
Thank you, Tom. I thought my flat tire leant itself well to the onamatopoeia words. I can only hope.....

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