L Milton Hankins Poet Sonnet

Flat Tire On a Rainy Day

The swish of some passing cars unnerving me still
With the rapid clack of my windshield wipers,
When, suddenly, I felt a most unwanted chill
Like the rapid hiss of a hundred captured vipers.
And I knew, at the worst time possible, my tire
Right front, passenger side, was now a crumble,
Just when my AAA card was about to expire,
So, I steered it to the berm feeling the flat rumble.

I sat sullen, waiting for the downpour to retire,
While several vehicles zip by me at ridiculous speeds
None of them, I understood, stopping to inquire
Why I was pulled over to the side …  or my needs.
When the rain finally abated, and I shuffled outside
Four creaking vehicles stopped, offering me a ride!

written October 17, 2021
especially for "Onamatopoeia" Poetry Contest
sponsored by Emile Pinet
[Rhymes checked with rhymezone.com]

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Caren Krutsinger October 18, 2021 at 1:25 PM Marvelous write for Emile's contest. L Milton Hankins October 18, 2021 at 1:33 PM Thanks. I had to struggle to get those words, until I found that Google has a list of them. I checked mine there.

Sotto Poet October 17, 2021 at 3:51 PM Milton, you have written a fantastic poem that tells the required words effectively, with a great flow and rhyme. Your beautiful words added to the allure of your poetry. L Milton Hankins October 17, 2021 at 7:28 PM Thanks, Lasaad.

Gordon Mcconnell October 17, 2021 at 1:21 PM Fine write Milton, telling this one very well with nice flow and rhyme too. take care, Gordon L Milton Hankins October 17, 2021 at 1:27 PM Thanks, Gordon. I really appreciated hearing from you and your kind response was most appreciated.

Tom Cunningham October 17, 2021 at 12:26 PM A flat is a pain in the rear whatever the weather Milton. Funny though, it always seems to rain when disaster strikes. You used the Onamatopoeia words well. Best of luck in the contest Tom L Milton Hankins October 17, 2021 at 1:06 PM Thank you, Tom. I thought my flat tire leant itself well to the onamatopoeia words. I can only hope.....