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These lyrics were written on 16 March 2021.

It was a four way collaborations with myself, Ink Empress, The Aura of Rhymes and The Lioness on Paper

For turning you invisible, I'll always be regretful, when things got critical was easy to be forgetful. I left you in a state of shock , in tears heavier than a rock. , I heard you, but left you on mute, now you know I'm forbidden fruit. Just another day without me, can't you see I set you free. I know I killed your dreams, but now you flow like streams. The bed we laid in got colder, things changed as we grew older. Waves of thoughts lost their way, as silence ruined every day , But, I still hate how you hold her, because sometimes I miss how we were. These feelings I just let them slide, although I fight against those tides, I loved how we used to glide, Oh! at times it was a good ride, Just another day without me, can't you see I set you free. I know I killed your dreams, but now you flow like streams. Flashbacks can be an intrusion, so I throw stones at your illusion. I gave our love a conclusion, as life was full of confusion, My mind was fighting delusion, so I gave my soul seclusion. Just another day without me, can't you see I set you free. I know I killed your dreams, but now you flow like streams.

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Duke Beaufort

Date: 2/3/2024 10:40:00 AM

There seems to be no shortage of hurt in this world. The relationship theme is one form of hurt. I am never surprised when seeing it expressed in so many different and elegant ways. Each one makes me think of a different scenario of loss.

Sotto Poet

Date: 2/1/2024 7:54:00 AM

This poignant collaboration proves to be profoundly influential in the expression of sorrow and the process of coping with loss. It evoked a myriad of emotions within me, some of which I deeply resonated with. I am grateful for the opportunity to have encountered and experienced this work and commend the team responsible for its creation. Through masterful storytelling, vivid imagery was skilfully woven, captivating the readers and leaving them in a state of wonderment. Numerous lines within this composition stood out to me, and the overall flow was flawlessly executed.

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 1/31/2024 7:18:00 PM

A great collaboration, Silent One. I wonder, if this was written today, how different it might turn out.

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 1/31/2024 2:39:00 PM

An awesome foursome, a great collaboration… Beryl

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/31/2024 11:38:00 AM

Well done collaboration!

Aqua Marine

Date: 1/31/2024 9:31:00 AM

The time of the writing of this poem... and it's theme both significant and illuminating. To mourn the loss of love that was "illusion", "confusion," "delusion. Seems so strange, yet when reality finally sets in, that one is finally free now, to flow like streams, it is both breathtaking, and calming. Really amazing collaboration, revealing insight through personal experience. Thank you for posting!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/31/2024 9:12:00 AM

I really enjoyed reading your wonderful "Four Way Collaboration" write. A great job by each of you... Have a wonderful day writing away.............

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 1/31/2024 8:51:00 AM

a flowing collaboration filled with remorse. regret, and grief over one's action. Powerful stuff....liked it

Deb M

Date: 1/31/2024 8:07:00 AM

Very nicely written you guys! Debx

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 1/31/2024 7:47:00 AM

Wow, it is a heartfelt collaboration that is impactful in mourning and grieving loss. It brought many emotions to mind, and I felt some of them. Thanks for sharing this and to the team for writing it. - Heartfelt, Daniel

Ink Empress

Date: 1/31/2024 7:00:00 AM

Hah! I remember writing this, all of us, although my memory is so clogged i cant even tell which ones my lines , but i believe it is the lines with “ The bed we laid in got colder, things changed as we grew older. Waves of thoughts lost their way, as silence ruined every day , But, I still hate how you hold her, because sometimes I miss how we were.“ and some few others! Thank you so much for sharing this.always a pleasure writing with you.with aura and lioness too! We should do this again.

Lioness Onpaper

Date: 1/31/2024 6:31:00 AM

Omg!!! It’s beeen sooo looong I havnt seen this piece in ages…. Suck good times!!! We were on a rhyming high!!!! Most definitely!!!

The Aura Rhymes

Date: 1/31/2024 6:14:00 AM

Omg . I remember the time we wrote this .

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/31/2024 6:08:00 AM

- An excellent mixture, my friend :) - hugs