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First Time

And moistened lips I softly kissed Beguiling as the dusk's embrace, That framed with such expressiveness The perfect smile upon your face, Which reached out so uncertainly Although I glimpsed with mild surprise, The tethered velvet fluttering Of shadows living in your eyes. Then we awakened to each other As we held on to the dawn, With a sense of life beginning Such a sense of being born, And we paddled in the shadows As the moon washed them away; Then we walked along together Through our first together day. Lyric Man's What's The Big Idea Contest by nette onclaud 5/21/2015 Theme: The First Time

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Date: 6/3/2015 5:53:00 PM
Wow i loved this, what a brilliant idea.....Seren
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Date: 6/1/2015 12:25:00 PM
This is simply GORGEOUS! Such colorful phrasing, such brilliant imagery, such an easy cadence AND such deft rhyming! I love '...and we paddled in the shadows as the moon washed them away,' '...tethered velvet fluttering of shadows living in your eyes.' I could quote each and every line for the are all equally beautiful. I get warm and fuzzy so I have to read it again and again. A masterpiece my dear! Best wishes, Keith
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Date: 5/29/2015 11:02:00 AM
Great! Enjoyed it so much.
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Date: 5/28/2015 10:18:00 AM
Great lines with majestic eloquence.. Your meandering of words still did not prevent your peice from giving out its message. This is an absolute 7!
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Date: 5/27/2015 9:04:00 PM
Nette, a 7 and congratulations on your wonderful win. Hugs :~)
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Date: 5/27/2015 8:45:00 AM
AAWWWWW. Nette that would be a very interesting "theme" for a contest. I imagine it would generate some very interesting responses.
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Date: 5/27/2015 8:10:00 AM
Sweet and romantic...Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 5/27/2015 7:23:00 AM
Congrats on your nette!
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Date: 5/26/2015 5:13:00 AM
Why is it getting hot in here? My air conditioner's running full blast and---Oh well. I LOVE seeing your romantic side my friend...GREAT idea! No surprise this got the top spot - Tim
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Date: 5/25/2015 10:04:00 PM
Wow. Cingratulations on your win with this beauty, Nette! hugs!
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Date: 5/25/2015 6:54:00 PM
Congratulations on your top placement Nette!
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Date: 5/25/2015 5:44:00 PM
NETTE, CONGRATS ON YOUR BIG DEAL WIN. ALWAYS ~LINDA~
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Date: 5/25/2015 3:02:00 PM
gosh, Nette, Did he say we could post about the First time? Wish I had seen that. This is a beauty!! Big congrats.
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Date: 5/25/2015 2:39:00 PM
The First Time is a big thing that no one forgets. You paid a proper tribute to that moment with your soaring images.
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Date: 5/25/2015 2:37:00 PM
Awesome win, love Skat
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Date: 5/25/2015 10:10:00 AM
Congrats nette....this could be an interesting contest
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Date: 5/25/2015 9:23:00 AM
Many congrats on your win Nette - hope Dave goes with this theme:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 5/25/2015 6:43:00 AM
Excellent imagery here.
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Date: 5/21/2015 1:21:00 PM
Oh wow.. what a wonderful piece you brought out this time... I so loved every lines... The First Time ,who would've forgotten it? :')) Cheers !!
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Date: 5/21/2015 10:33:00 AM
Yes, it's a very big idea poem beautifully expressed about starting the life with first time kisses. Excellent and good wishes for the contest. 7+ i feel. Loved always,my lovely friend,bl
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Date: 5/21/2015 3:26:00 AM
And how you bewitch me! A most charming poem.
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Date: 5/21/2015 2:52:00 AM
Nette, what a way to make me drool. The last line gave me the bumps!An excellent poem for me.
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Date: 5/21/2015 12:52:00 AM
Alright, I must say you got my undivided attention. So enchanting you woke my muse up, Nette!
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Date: 5/20/2015 9:15:00 PM
A lovely, romantic write, Nette! Love, Kim
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Date: 5/20/2015 5:18:00 PM
I am enamored by the delicate melody of this poem. Exquisitely caressing as it reminds of Roberta Flack's " The First Time I Ever Saw Your Face."
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