First Time

And moistened lips I softly kissed
Beguiling as the dusk's embrace,
That framed with such expressiveness
The perfect smile upon your face,
Which reached out so uncertainly
Although I glimpsed with mild surprise,
The tethered velvet fluttering
Of shadows living in your eyes.

Then we awakened to each other
As we held on to the dawn,
With a sense of life beginning
Such a sense of being born,
And we paddled in the shadows
As the moon washed them away;
Then we walked along together
Through our first together day.


Lyric Man's What's The Big Idea Contest
by nette onclaud
5/21/2015
Theme: The First Time
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Roberts Avatar
June 3, 2015 at 5:53 PM
Wow i loved this, what a brilliant idea.....Seren
Bickerstaffe Avatar
June 1, 2015 at 12:25 PM
This is simply GORGEOUS! Such colorful phrasing, such brilliant imagery, such an easy cadence AND such deft rhyming! I love '...and we paddled in the shadows as the moon washed them away,' '...tethered velvet fluttering of shadows living in your eyes.' I could quote each and every line for the are all equally beautiful. I get warm and fuzzy so I have to read it again and again. A masterpiece my dear! Best wishes, Keith
Martin Avatar
May 29, 2015 at 11:02 AM
Great! Enjoyed it so much.
Makama Avatar
May 28, 2015 at 10:18 AM
Great lines with majestic eloquence.. Your meandering of words still did not prevent your peice from giving out its message. This is an absolute 7!
Roper Avatar
May 27, 2015 at 9:04 PM
Nette, a 7 and congratulations on your wonderful win. Hugs :~)
Lawless Avatar
May 27, 2015 at 8:45 AM
AAWWWWW. Nette that would be a very interesting "theme" for a contest. I imagine it would generate some very interesting responses.
Das Avatar
May 27, 2015 at 8:10 AM
Sweet and romantic...Congratulations on your win.
Ebbs Avatar
May 27, 2015 at 7:23 AM
Congrats on your nette!
Ryerson Avatar
May 26, 2015 at 5:13 AM
Why is it getting hot in here? My air conditioner's running full blast and---Oh well. I LOVE seeing your romantic side my friend...GREAT idea! No surprise this got the top spot - Tim
Nunez Avatar
May 25, 2015 at 10:04 PM
Wow. Cingratulations on your win with this beauty, Nette! hugs!
Lamoureux Avatar
May 25, 2015 at 6:54 PM
Congratulations on your top placement Nette!
A   Avatar
May 25, 2015 at 5:44 PM
NETTE, CONGRATS ON YOUR BIG DEAL WIN. ALWAYS ~LINDA~
Dietrich Avatar
May 25, 2015 at 3:02 PM
gosh, Nette, Did he say we could post about the First time? Wish I had seen that. This is a beauty!! Big congrats.
Sirak Avatar
May 25, 2015 at 2:39 PM
The First Time is a big thing that no one forgets. You paid a proper tribute to that moment with your soaring images.
A  Avatar
May 25, 2015 at 2:37 PM
Awesome win, love Skat
Smith Avatar
May 25, 2015 at 10:10 AM
Congrats nette....this could be an interesting contest
Allison Avatar
May 25, 2015 at 9:23 AM
Many congrats on your win Nette - hope Dave goes with this theme:-) Hugs Jan xx
Kiser Avatar
May 25, 2015 at 6:43 AM
Excellent imagery here.
Torres Avatar
May 21, 2015 at 1:21 PM
Oh wow.. what a wonderful piece you brought out this time... I so loved every lines... The First Time ,who would've forgotten it? :')) Cheers !!
Devnath  Avatar
May 21, 2015 at 10:33 AM
Yes, it's a very big idea poem beautifully expressed about starting the life with first time kisses. Excellent and good wishes for the contest. 7+ i feel. Loved always,my lovely friend,bl
Casto Avatar
May 21, 2015 at 3:26 AM
And how you bewitch me! A most charming poem.
Em Avatar
May 21, 2015 at 2:52 AM
Nette, what a way to make me drool. The last line gave me the bumps!An excellent poem for me.
Sabre Avatar
May 21, 2015 at 12:52 AM
Alright, I must say you got my undivided attention. So enchanting you woke my muse up, Nette!
Merryman Avatar
May 20, 2015 at 9:15 PM
A lovely, romantic write, Nette! Love, Kim
Arana Avatar
May 20, 2015 at 5:18 PM
I am enamored by the delicate melody of this poem. Exquisitely caressing as it reminds of Roberta Flack's " The First Time I Ever Saw Your Face."
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