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First Sight// Form

(LOVE)

 No Poet, eyes upon.
 My heart began to rhyme you.
 Get with the situation.


(SHORT)
 First Haiku ever.
 Joy of write, Haikus delight.
 So cut me some slack.

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Paul Callus

Date: 2/7/2016 8:42:00 AM

Not at all bad for your first haiku attempt, Linda. I see that advice has been coming your way:) Haiku is an art that takes lots of practice, something which I am still doing, and am still learning in the process. Hugs // paul

Cynthia Jones

Date: 2/1/2015 6:17:00 PM

I like them both Linda. Great work. Well done. Keep on penning. Keep up with the great work. Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us. We all truly appreciate it. *S* Cynthia

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/10/2014 8:34:00 PM

What will your husband say if he finds out about us.

Wolf Siegert

Date: 8/2/2014 2:29:00 PM

Found this after having posted my first HaiKu here, called "First Time". Regards from Berlin! LupusDigit

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/12/2013 7:32:00 PM

oi..This is bad

Robin Davis

Date: 11/10/2013 10:18:00 PM

Linda These are cute and clever. Short but full of meaning. Nice job Hugs

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 4/22/2013 10:15:00 PM

Cool poem! I read below it was featured. Congrats on that. Really liked these lovely haikus Always, Laura

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire

Date: 3/3/2013 12:38:00 PM

Dear Linda, As a novice POET my Favorite forms are Haiku,Senryu,Free Verse,Rhyme, and lately Narrative. I am not a critic, but the original Haiku was 5-7-5 Your first one was 6-7-7 the second one perfect Loved the message though. LOVE YOU ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Eternal Liege...Harry

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/8/2012 10:58:00 PM

Soup Mail. Reading certain messages helps me understand.

Jack Horne

Date: 8/21/2012 3:04:00 PM

enjoyed reading tonight, my friend x

Harry Horsman

Date: 8/16/2012 6:20:00 AM

i like these too, pd, count me in as a major fan of yours, but then again i've always been a fan of yours. i see too that dg's comments are a bit like she comments on my poetry, that is when she can be bothered.

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 11/11/2010 10:50:00 AM

smiles as I read this-- am no haiku expert so I'm just enjoying this :) --haha I should be packing what am I doing here??

Joe Maverick

Date: 10/31/2010 2:48:00 PM

good stuff,p d.

Daver Austin

Date: 10/26/2010 7:07:00 AM

No slack needed. This is better by far than most. Love, Dave

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 10/25/2010 12:14:00 PM

Congratulations on your well deserved poem being picked to be featured this week P.D. Love, Carol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 10/24/2010 4:32:00 PM

Congrats P.D. my BFF on your featured poem this week on the Soup.. a great piece to share with us all with luv my friend.. keep charming us luv...

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 10/19/2010 3:28:00 PM

Love your first Haiku... soup mail love...

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/1/2010 6:43:00 PM

LOL, D.G. this was not ment for your eyes. i just stored it in here for a friend. now i get your comment you vile women,..p.d.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 6/1/2010 4:36:00 PM

naww like the taste of curdled milk...my mouths tastes my hate for you....like the painful lingering scen of skunk on a precious cat...my hate for you clings....gumming up my mind like bubble gum in a braid.....smooch

De R

Date: 5/27/2010 6:46:00 AM

A lot of hate there...good one there and funny, too, despite the fact that it is about hate. Emily

Izzy Gumbo

Date: 5/8/2010 8:05:00 AM

brilliant. :)

Matthew Anish

Date: 4/28/2010 5:21:00 PM

I'll cut you some slack. I used Xena for visualization when I had cancer. Think it helped and I wrote into into the New York Times and said so. Hope I in - lightened you Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Shirin Neshat

Date: 4/28/2010 12:59:00 AM

i enjoyed reading this poem, its very nice. By the way thank you for the suggestion I changed my poems name to challenge :)

Sharon Winter

Date: 4/27/2010 7:18:00 AM

hello there and thanks for your thoughtful comment. I absolutely LOVE the line "My heart began to rhyme you." wow - excellent!!! love, shar