First Date

FIRST DATE
He picked me up and called me wife. His eyes earth brown and bound with mirth. His rod doth reel me in his life. Did God but see this at my birth? Ordained to sail upon his heart. To laugh at jokes in harmony. To knead our flesh - not play a part And seal our lips in symphony. The trumpet blows, before its time. A chorus singing out of synch, And trouble brews, and heat does climb. Unnoticed yet so we don’t blink. What danger lies behind my mind, Of sentiment and rough recline? Perhaps my days are mostly kind - Green eyes removed and feeling fine?
The earth must sense the warmth of dirt. The pearlescent moon-glow - a flirt. 11/6/2017 8 syllable sonnet

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Date: 11/30/2017 2:17:00 AM
A lovely poem with a pensive feel to it. Love has a way with showing us the bright side of things! Regards // paul
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/30/2017 5:36:00 AM
So true, about love! Thank you, Paul!
Date: 11/27/2017 3:48:00 PM
A lovely sonnet Kim. I especially loved the 2nd verse. Great meter and rhyme! Best, Judy
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/27/2017 4:44:00 PM
Thank you, Judith :)
Date: 11/27/2017 9:32:00 AM
Well written poem--a loving depiction of ardent feelings!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/27/2017 9:34:00 AM
Thank you, my friend!
Date: 11/27/2017 9:15:00 AM
I've never seen a sonnet formated like this and esp with 8 syllables.. that is difficult but you pulled it off.. Don't fall for those eyes...
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/27/2017 9:20:00 AM
Thank you so much, Silent! ...it’s all about the eyes :)
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