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Pretty little princess in bows and pink sundress gifts and presents wondrous year old today Ribbons, sashes, ruffles on floor crawls and shuffles loud laughter and snuffles childlike display Mom and dad are so-so lives changed a year ago turned their whole world wacko baby array Parents hug each other promise are still lovers with a year now over need time away Grandparents blow kisses friends and others wishes party favor glitches happy birthday April 14, 2018 *Violette Poem Contest By Mick Talbot Second Place *Violette is stanzaic, rhymed, unlimited quatrains, (in this contest minium 5), in the aaaB cccB and so on, feminine rhyming scheme. B is a linking rhyme from stanza to stanza. Syllables, 6,6,6,4, per line.

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Mahtab Bangalee

Date: 2/28/2019 11:48:00 PM

sweetly birthday poem, love it

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 4/21/2018 2:58:00 PM

I know what your heart is fed upon - seeing that granddaughter for sure. Know from experience as well as the proof here in your piece. Lovely thoughts, Susan. I enjoyed your violette.

Susan Gentry
Date: 4/22/2018 12:15:00 PM

Thank you :)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 4/18/2018 8:54:00 AM

Quite a lovely birthday poem!

Susan Gentry
Date: 4/18/2018 11:32:00 PM

Thanks Kim.

Charlie Smith

Date: 4/16/2018 1:52:00 PM

Lovely Susan, congratulations...

Susan Gentry
Date: 4/16/2018 2:57:00 PM

Thanks Charlie! Appreciate you reading and commenting.

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 4/16/2018 12:16:00 AM

A beautiful poem, Susan, and such a wonderful example of the form ... congrats on your win! Blessings! :-) <3

Susan Gentry
Date: 4/16/2018 2:56:00 PM

Thank you! Appreciate the comments.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 4/15/2018 9:41:00 PM

Delicious and delightful, so touchingly calling up all those first birthdays scenes. Ah! Your poem captures them in a wondrous forever-bottle. A clear-cut winner! Excellent! :) gw

Susan Gentry
Date: 4/16/2018 2:55:00 PM

Thank you! I thought it would be easier than it was...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/15/2018 7:10:00 PM

I love how you did yours. Easy to follow and such a fun poem to read. Congrats, Susan.

Susan Gentry
Date: 4/16/2018 2:54:00 PM

Thank you Andrea! Glad you liked it.

Sandra Haight

Date: 4/15/2018 5:09:00 PM

Great first birthday imagery, Susan! Love the way you met the challenge and congrats on your win. Hugs, Sandra

Susan Gentry
Date: 4/16/2018 2:53:00 PM

Thanks Sandra! Always appreciate your input.

Jan Allison

Date: 4/15/2018 1:42:00 PM

our lives certainly change from the moment they are born, many congrats Susan:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Gentry
Date: 4/16/2018 2:52:00 PM

Thanks Jan. Without a doubt. :)

Elaine George

Date: 4/15/2018 1:12:00 PM

Very challenging genre of poetry. I know you will top the winners list. Sincerely, Elaine

Susan Gentry
Date: 4/16/2018 2:51:00 PM

Thanks Elaine! Appreciate you reading and commenting.

Line Gauthier

Date: 4/15/2018 12:51:00 PM

Back with well deserved congrats on your podium win.

Susan Gentry
Date: 4/16/2018 2:50:00 PM

Thanks Line!

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 4/15/2018 8:43:00 AM

Congratulation on your win, Susan.

Susan Gentry
Date: 4/15/2018 12:34:00 PM

Thank you! Same to you!

Mick Talbot

Date: 4/15/2018 8:08:00 AM

Hi Susan, Many thanks for taking up the challenge with this relatively new form. Critique: The feminine line endings were fine, however, for me, the rhyming in stanzas 1 and 4 let it down. Congratulations on your 2nd place, many thanks for your support.. Mick

Susan Gentry
Date: 4/15/2018 12:34:00 PM

Thank you, Mick!! Am honored! I saw what you meant and worked it a bit. I so appreciate your constructive input.

Viv Wigley

Date: 4/15/2018 1:22:00 AM

Love the change in tone mid-poem, Susan, gives it an edge. Good luck in the contest x

Susan Gentry
Date: 4/15/2018 7:05:00 AM

Hi Viv... thanks for reading and commenting.

Line Gauthier

Date: 4/15/2018 1:16:00 AM

Beautiful poem, Susan. A clever mix of sweetness with subtle hints of bitterness.

Susan Gentry
Date: 4/15/2018 7:04:00 AM

Thanks Line! Harder than I thought to write.