Susan Gentry Poet Quatrain

Notes About The Poem

First Birthday

Pretty little princess
in bows and pink sundress
gifts and presents wondrous
year old today

Ribbons, sashes, ruffles
on floor crawls and shuffles
loud laughter and snuffles
childlike display

Mom and dad are so-so
lives changed a year ago
turned their whole world wacko
baby array

Parents hug each other
promise are still lovers
with a year now over
need time away

Grandparents blow kisses
friends and others wishes
party favor glitches
happy birthday

April 14, 2018

*Violette Poem Contest
By Mick Talbot
Second Place


*Violette is stanzaic, rhymed, unlimited quatrains, (in this contest minium 5), in the aaaB cccB and so on, feminine rhyming scheme. B is a linking rhyme from stanza to stanza. 
Syllables, 6,6,6,4, per line.

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Mahtab Bangalee February 28, 2019 at 11:48 PM sweetly birthday poem, love it

Reason A. Poteet April 21, 2018 at 2:58 PM I know what your heart is fed upon - seeing that granddaughter for sure. Know from experience as well as the proof here in your piece. Lovely thoughts, Susan. I enjoyed your violette. Susan Gentry April 22, 2018 at 12:15 PM Thank you :)

Kim Rodrigues April 18, 2018 at 8:54 AM Quite a lovely birthday poem! Susan Gentry April 18, 2018 at 11:32 PM Thanks Kim.

Charlie Smith April 16, 2018 at 1:52 PM Lovely Susan, congratulations... Susan Gentry April 16, 2018 at 2:57 PM Thanks Charlie! Appreciate you reading and commenting.

Gregory Richard Barden April 16, 2018 at 12:16 AM A beautiful poem, Susan, and such a wonderful example of the form ... congrats on your win! Blessings! :-) <3 Susan Gentry April 16, 2018 at 2:56 PM Thank you! Appreciate the comments.

Gershon Wolf April 15, 2018 at 9:41 PM Delicious and delightful, so touchingly calling up all those first birthdays scenes. Ah! Your poem captures them in a wondrous forever-bottle. A clear-cut winner! Excellent! :) gw Susan Gentry April 16, 2018 at 2:55 PM Thank you! I thought it would be easier than it was...

Andrea Dietrich April 15, 2018 at 7:10 PM I love how you did yours. Easy to follow and such a fun poem to read. Congrats, Susan. Susan Gentry April 16, 2018 at 2:54 PM Thank you Andrea! Glad you liked it.

Sandra Haight April 15, 2018 at 5:09 PM Great first birthday imagery, Susan! Love the way you met the challenge and congrats on your win. Hugs, Sandra Susan Gentry April 16, 2018 at 2:53 PM Thanks Sandra! Always appreciate your input.

Jan Allison April 15, 2018 at 1:42 PM our lives certainly change from the moment they are born, many congrats Susan:-) hugs Jan xx Susan Gentry April 16, 2018 at 2:52 PM Thanks Jan. Without a doubt. :)

Elaine George April 15, 2018 at 1:12 PM Very challenging genre of poetry. I know you will top the winners list. Sincerely, Elaine Susan Gentry April 16, 2018 at 2:51 PM Thanks Elaine! Appreciate you reading and commenting.

Line Gauthier April 15, 2018 at 12:51 PM Back with well deserved congrats on your podium win. Susan Gentry April 16, 2018 at 2:50 PM Thanks Line!

Subimal Sinha-Roy April 15, 2018 at 8:43 AM Congratulation on your win, Susan. Susan Gentry April 15, 2018 at 12:34 PM Thank you! Same to you!

Mick Talbot April 15, 2018 at 8:08 AM Hi Susan, Many thanks for taking up the challenge with this relatively new form. Critique: The feminine line endings were fine, however, for me, the rhyming in stanzas 1 and 4 let it down. Congratulations on your 2nd place, many thanks for your support.. Mick Susan Gentry April 15, 2018 at 12:34 PM Thank you, Mick!! Am honored! I saw what you meant and worked it a bit. I so appreciate your constructive input.

Viv Wigley April 15, 2018 at 1:22 AM Love the change in tone mid-poem, Susan, gives it an edge. Good luck in the contest x Susan Gentry April 15, 2018 at 7:05 AM Hi Viv... thanks for reading and commenting.

Line Gauthier April 15, 2018 at 1:16 AM Beautiful poem, Susan. A clever mix of sweetness with subtle hints of bitterness. Susan Gentry April 15, 2018 at 7:04 AM Thanks Line! Harder than I thought to write.