Fireflies

dots of gold embers
dancing between starlit sky 
and blackening earth
can I be a torch bearer
to illumine the dark world



~Placed First~


March.11.2022
Firefly Tanka Poetry Contest
Sponsor- JCB Brul

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/17/2022 10:29:00 PM

Valsa, this is very good work. Sorry it appears at the bottom only because your name starts with a V. It ought to be near the top!!! Congrats on a well deserved win

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 3/17/2022 9:46:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A beautiful write. Their little light is like a torch of light for us to see. What a pretty summer night they bring. Have a blessed day..............

Christuraj Alex

Date: 3/17/2022 4:54:00 AM

"dots of gold embers" - Beautifully written. Congratulations!

Sam Kauffman

Date: 3/16/2022 10:22:00 AM

Valsa, congratulations on your win. Love the last two lines with the emphasis on being a "torch bearer to illumine the dark world." Those lines filled with empathy for those in darkness touched my heart. Blessings of light to you!

Sotto Poet

Date: 3/16/2022 10:10:00 AM

Back with my heartiest congratulations for a well-deserved win dear friend.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/14/2022 3:11:00 PM

Reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Way to go. I am glad you shared this one with us. Reminds me of childhood evenings catching fireflies. Your visit to my page was a delight. Sara